Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

NOT WHAT I ASKED FOR

Archie stared at the gift, torn wrapping paper all round. It looked like several bicycles had crashed into each other, a mangled frame with wheels of various sizes attached to it.

‘Wow, that’s… interesting.’

‘Do you like it?’ Agnes smiled at him.

‘What is it?’

Agnes frowned. ‘A puncture repair station. You’re too old to cycle, I thought you’d like to help others if they get into bother. It’s got various sizes.’

‘I don’t know what to say.’ Since Archie had stopped cycling Agnes had wanted him to find another pastime.

‘You’re welcome would be nice.’ Agnes missed having the weekends to herself.

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Copyright Ted Strutz

Happy Holidays to all the Friday Fictioneers and those that visit my blog. As always I am eternally grateful for everyone who takes the time to read my offerings. I hope you all have a wonderful break and a Happy New Year.

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Other stories featuring Agnes and Archie: THE AGNES AND ARCHIE STORIES.

Iain Kelly

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89 responses to “NOT WHAT I ASKED FOR”

  1. Viola Bleu Avatar
    Viola Bleu

    I enjoy your posts – the humour always tucked away there amongst the prose. Clever!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much Viola 🙂

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  2. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    I feel for Agnes. Every wife needs her husband to have a pastime. Well, this wife does. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think it’s always good for a relationship to give each other space. Thanks Rochelle.

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  3. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    I totally get it. Yes, indeed.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      🙂 Thank you.

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  4. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    That was an inventive interpretation of the image

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Neil.

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  5. magarisa Avatar
    magarisa

    Haha – love the last line! I wonder if Archie will really take up “puncture repair” as a new hobby.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you – I think he may not get a choice in the matter 🙂

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  6. Moon Avatar
    Moon

    That was really wonderful, Iain.
    Really liked your interpretation of the prompt.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much Moon

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  7. J Hardy Carroll Avatar
    J Hardy Carroll

    He’s trying to be practical, but I think this is a lost cause.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It doesn’t seem like he’s going to go for it.

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  8. Kelvin M. Knight's blog Avatar
    Kelvin M. Knight’s blog

    The image of bicycles crashed into each other is a lovely description of the photo prompt and metaphor for their lives, I feel.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Kelvin.

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  9. James Avatar
    James

    Archie seems to be underfoot this time around.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      They do take it in turns. I try to be even handed!

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  10. pennygadd51 Avatar
    pennygadd51

    Neat take on the prompt. Agnes seems to pushing Archie towards life in the garage! (Anywhere other than under the same roof, I guess)

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think Archie will be content there!

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  11. scr4pl80 Avatar
    scr4pl80

    Since I work from home and my husband is retired, I can totally relate! That sculpture looks like it could actually be used for such a device. Another great Archie and Agnes.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much Janet 🙂

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  12. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    I hope he takes to it. For the sake of their relationship.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He’ll give it a go – whether he likes it or not.

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  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I would love to have my punctures repaired… where can I find Archie?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Could be a gap in the market 🙂

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  14. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Quick Iain, patent it and go on Dragon’s Den!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Think they’ll invest?! 🙂

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  15. Susan Avatar
    Susan

    I had a boss once who said he was happily married… three days a week. Sometimes you need that time alone to keep a marriage solid.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Absolutely, thanks Susan

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  16. Christine Goodnough Avatar
    Christine Goodnough

    Sometimes, like Archie, we all search for suitable words to express our appreciation for something we never wanted and have no use for. 🙂 Good take on the prompt.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Christine

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  17. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    Haha, obviously it’s a puncture repair station 🙂 Hopefully he’ll get really into it so she can get some space.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  18. Clare Hempstead Avatar
    Clare Hempstead

    Apparently, retirement can be a difficult adjustment. You portrayed this well!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      For some it certainly can be. Thanks Clare.

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  19. Balaka Avatar
    Balaka

    Awww!! That is such a beautiful story..kindness is in the air. Happy Holidays

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Trina, and to you.

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  20. Jane Dougherty Avatar
    Jane Dougherty

    Ooh, cruel. I think they should part company those two.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think they grudgingly still love each other – they are just far too used to each other!

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar
        Jane Dougherty

        There are a lot of couples like that. It’s a pattern. Sad though.

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  21. Jan Vanek Avatar
    Jan Vanek

    It’s so much fun to read all the different interpretations of Ted’s photo prompt! I enjoyed the creativity of yours, but that last line was a hoot! (Maybe because I’ve been there.) 🙂 Happy New Year!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Jan! Happy New Year 🙂

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  22. anuragbakhshi Avatar
    anuragbakhshi

    I have a feeling my wife has reached exactly that stage now 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Haha, I hope not!

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  23. J. E. Kennedy Avatar
    J. E. Kennedy

    I do hope he finds some joy in his puncture repair set but I get the feeling he won’t. Ha. Happy holidays Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, Happy Holidays to you also 🙂

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  24. Lynn Love Avatar
    Lynn Love

    Looks like she’ll have to keep searching for ways to get him out of the house – a nice garden shed might do it. All men need a shed. Nicely done Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Lynn.

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar
        Lynn Love

        My pleasure

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  25. Susan A Eames Avatar
    Susan A Eames

    Ha ha – nice one! Hope Agnes’s plan works. 🙂

    I’m going to resume writing stories with FF in the New Year.
    Happy Christmas!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Susan 🙂

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  26. Jelli Avatar
    Jelli

    Happy New Year! And this is really good. I can’t wait for next week. A week home with the Hubs and I’m ready to crack heads- uh, eggs.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ha, thanks – I hope you both survived the New Year 🙂

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  27. Liz Young Avatar
    Liz Young

    I wonder if something similar would get my OH out fromunder my feet?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Worth a try Liz 🙂

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  28. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Hahaha my mom is the same… need to give dad something to do 😄

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It seems to be a common theme from the comments! Thanks Laurie

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  29. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar
    Alicia Jamtaas

    Oh, Iain, this hit home. Today my husband said, “It seems to bother you when I breathe.” Ouch. Perhaps I’ve let the stress of the holidays bring pressure into our home.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Everyone needs their own space – especially round the holidays!

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  30. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    I so understand her situation! We can love them all to pieces but it is so nice to have “me” time… 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Absolutely, thanks Dale.

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  31. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist Avatar
    Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    I get Agnes. I so love having my mornings (two per week) when my husband plays golf. Mind you I know he looks forward to his two evenings at home alone when I go dancing. Good story that rang true.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Sounds like the perfect arrangement!

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  32. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    hopefully, it’s not too much for him to handle to keep the peace. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He can always take it out and then just head to the pub for a couple of hours instead 🙂

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  33. michaelwynnauthor Avatar
    michaelwynnauthor

    Great take Iain. It’s all so innocent until you understand her more serious underlying motive

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Michael

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  34. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar
    Brenda’s Thoughts

    I love the ending, very humorous and truthful. =)

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Brenda

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  35. prior.. Avatar
    prior..

    it does look like a repair station – brilliant –
    and so is the way you had this agnes help archie find his next hobbie – so the relationship can breathe

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much.

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  36. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar
    neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

    Another fun prompt from you Kelly. Greatly enjoyed this and HAPPY NEW YEAR.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Neel – Happy New Year to you also.

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  37. kindredspirit23 Avatar
    kindredspirit23

    Lol, I like the “real” reason behind her gift. Nice endgame there.
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/12/27/friday-fictioneers-lifes-cycle/
    Scott

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Scott

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      1. kindredspirit23 Avatar
        kindredspirit23

        Welcome

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  38. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    Oh this made me LOL.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Dawn, always happy to provide a chuckle 🙂

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  39. Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly) Avatar
    Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)

    Oh, Agnes I feel you. My husband has been retired two years. I could use a few days to myself.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ha, thanks Susie – I hope you have survived the holidays 🙂

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  40. yarnspinnerr Avatar
    yarnspinnerr

    A novel take.
    Happy 2018.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you – Happy New Year 🙂

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  41. patriciaruthsusan Avatar
    patriciaruthsusan

    Ah, she finally found a way to keep him busy and give her some peace. Humorous and good writing, Iain. 😀 — Suzanne

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Suzanne

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  42. Dahlia Avatar
    Dahlia

    I feel for Agnes I really do! Nicely done Iain 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  43. Rowena Avatar
    Rowena

    I missed that prompt, but that structure was quite clever.
    That balance between intimacy and solitude is a challenging one, where it’s hard to find the mark or to be in the same head space at the same time as a couple. My cousin recently invited me up to her place at Blackheath for a week. It’s in the Blue Mountains, which are just beautiful. However, it could’ve been anywhere. Didn’t matter. I needed a break from the lot of them here. As it turned out, my cousin and I clicked so well that we ended up in our own zone and talked and shared so much that I barely had a chance to let my family know I’d arrived safely. However, we could appreciate each other as individuals, not through the lens of being Mum. She’s 83 and I’m in my late 40s and yet there was no distance between us. She is actually what I call my “family history cousin” and while we’re not that closely related, we are two peas in a pod and have so much in common. It has always amazed me like when you find twins who were separated at birth and find out they have so much in common.
    Anyway, human relationships are so intriguing.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  44. Iain Kelly Avatar
    Iain Kelly

    Thanks Rowena, sounds like you would know what presents to get each other 😉

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