DUMPED

‘It’s over.’

He tried to remain calm, speaking in an even and clear voice, no raised voices or dramatic gestures.

‘Typical!’

She yelled her reply, trying to elicit a reaction from him. This was the problem with their relationship – he was always so passionless, so clinical, so frigid.

‘Just keep cool.’

Over-the-top histrionics, letting her emotions get the better of her – it was why they could never talk about anything. It was why he had to end it.

 ‘I don’t need to cool down!’

She slapped him and pushed him. He fell down. She left him there, discarded.


fridge-in-the-woods
Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.


STATE OF WAR PRE RELEASE BIG

My new novel, ‘State Of War’, the final part of The State Trilogy, is out now, in paperback and available to pre-order in eBook.

You can find it to buy or pre-order by following the links below:

AMAZON:      US/AMAZON.COM     AMAZON.CO.UK      GERMANY      FRANCE       SPAIN  INDIA       CANADA       ITALY      NETHERLANDS   AUSTRALIA     MEXICO    BRAZIL      JAPAN

SMASHWORDS        BARNES & NOBLE       KOBO         Also available from APPLE BOOKS

A JUSTIFIED STATE and STATE OF DENIAL, books one and two of the trilogy are also available. Follow the links on this page: AVAILABLE NOW

If any bloggers would like to host a guest blog about the book, please get in touch, and all reviews and shout-outs are greatly appreciated.

68 responses to “DUMPED”

  1. Frigid! Ha! Nice one, Iain

    Liked by 2 people

    1. There’s a balance to be found between too little and too much emotion.

      Liked by 1 person

  2. Gosh, what a sweetheart.
    Run, Forrest, run!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. I wonder why he wants to break up with her?

      Like

  3. She’s a piece of work, isn’t she? Subtle take on the prompt.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. Sometimes opposites aren’t meant to be together. She was fire and he was ice, yet this might just be from where the both are standing. They might not have read the other for what they really are. Nice take on the prompt, Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thanks Varad, fire and ice indeed.

      Like

  5. Excellent symbolism!

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Dear Iain,

    Clever metaphors in this piece. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Some couples just aren’t compatible. Bet he is really cold now.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Thom Carswell Avatar
    Thom Carswell

    I love this interpretation of the prompt, Iain. Opposites may attract but they don’t always work well together.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you so much Thom

      Liked by 1 person

  9. Poor guy, his body will be fairly well preserved in that!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. True, good use for it 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  10. We had that experience with a Sanyo

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Wonderful use of words to tell us what that box is. I didn’t see it at all until I asked Rochelle, and then I wondered how I could possibly NOT have seen it 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. It did take me a moment at first 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  12. Excellent use of the prompt, Iain. Full of metaphors perfectly placed. Gee… wonder why they don’t fit together? 😉

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Fire & Ice, it’s an eternal battle 🙂 Thanks Dale

      Liked by 1 person

  13. Clever use of the prompt, Iain. I too didn’t realize that it was a fridge even after I read Trent’s story.

    Liked by 1 person

      1. You’re welcome 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

  14. You do a great job of showing communication style mismatch with a couple. I think these two could benefit from marriage counseling. If they love each other, it is worth a try.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. I think it may be too late!

      Liked by 1 person

  15. opposites do attract but sometimes the relationship doesn’t last like in this case.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Not for them, nope!

      Liked by 1 person

  16. I agree with Plaridel, opposites do attract but they often drive each other crazy! =) Once the sting is gone, he’ll be glad. Great use of the prompt!

    Liked by 1 person

  17. Nice metaphorical take on the prompt.

    Liked by 1 person

  18. Wow! So well done, Iain. Love the subtle “frigid.”

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thanks Sascha 😉

      Like

  19. Nice, good use of the photo throughout.

    Liked by 1 person

  20. A great acheivement to get two convincing points of view across in just 100 words. Well done, Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. Ouch, a brutal break up. But they didn’t seem like destined stars. Great description of her leaving him like trash dumped in nature.

    Liked by 1 person

  22. Looks like that’s it then. A great take Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

  23. Sometimes a cold and unemotional person is hiding a great hurt. They might be a very good match, but only if he could face up to the possibility of change. For all his rationality, I think he finds her passion attractive.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. I think so too, thank you Penny. He just has to learn how to respond to her better, and perhaps open himself up a little more.

      Like

      1. It’s probably best they split before one of them ends up in the freezer!

        Liked by 1 person

      2. Not worth the risk, you’re right!

        Liked by 1 person

  24. They had to have had SOMETHING to be together. It wasn’t their outlook on life which is quite noticeable. Maybe they met at a masked ball.

    Liked by 1 person

  25. I know, Fridge’s today … they’re so … well … frigid. Not like once of old, which would need to be thawed out once in a while … 😉

    Liked by 1 person

  26. Oh my … I’m sure I’ll be repeating someone’s comment but – WOW – she’s a feisty one.
    Perhaps, it’s best they go their separate ways. After all, a slap can turn into a whole lot more eventually; then, jail. Great intro to an enticing story, Iain. Have a safe weekend …
    Isadora 😎

    Liked by 1 person

  27. Discarded – is cruel!

    Liked by 1 person

  28. I really enjoyed your take on this weeks prompt

    Liked by 1 person

  29. What a creative take on the prompt. That last line is so powerful and hurtful.

    Liked by 1 person

Leave a comment

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.