Iain Kelly

WAR CRIME

Snowflakes glistened, falling through the electric light. A blanket of innocence covering sin. The same as that night in Kabul.

The funeral had been mercifully brief. Another of the unit was gone, only I remained. Still no one suspected me.

The Military Court said we were innocent. I knew differently. I still see her pleading eyes. I had avenged her where I had failed to protect her.

One bullet left, tonight I will join my unit again and pray she has forgiven me.

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© Sarah Potter

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Iain Kelly

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112 responses to “WAR CRIME”

  1. Snow's Fissures and Fractures Avatar
    Snow’s Fissures and Fractures

    Conscience can be a hard companion. Good one.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Lori

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  2. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    Wow, Iain! I loved this. It explodes out of its 100 word (full metal) jacket. Brilliant! I think this is the best thing I’ve seen from you

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Excellent, thanks Neil, appreciate the high praise.

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  3. Jessie Ansons Avatar
    Jessie Ansons

    Oh wow! What a sad tale. Just beautiful.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Jessie, much appreciated

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  4. David K Avatar
    David K

    A lot of mixed up and vivid emotions there. Like the line of ‘innocence covering sin’. Nicely done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks David

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  5. fictionspawn Avatar
    fictionspawn

    Wow, that’s beautiful. Important subject put in the spotlight, saying incredibly much in very few words.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks, appreciate your kind commet.

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  6. Jane Dougherty Avatar
    Jane Dougherty

    Chilling. In a few words you set out the two sides, the no-man’s land in the middle and the moral dilemma.

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  7. Christine Goodnough Avatar
    Christine Goodnough

    Guess this fits under the category: War is Hell.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Definitely does.

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  8. J Hardy Carroll Avatar
    J Hardy Carroll

    Lots here to parse. Somehow it made me think about the last US soldier executed for desertion, Eddie Slovik.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks, it was heading along those lines. A desertion of duty certainly occured.

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  9. Magaly Guerrero Avatar
    Magaly Guerrero

    In war, everyone loses… and the innocent lose more than anyone.

    This is heartbreaking. And some of it, much too close to home for me.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Magaly, I’m glad it meant something to you. I agree completely, no one wins.

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  10. shehannemoore Avatar
    shehannemoore

    Powerful piece Iain. Really enjoyed.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks as always Shehanne, I aim to please 🙂

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      1. shehannemoore Avatar
        shehannemoore

        Yir a talent Iain .

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  11. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    More than the scene you create with your apt description is the emotion within the character. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks for the high praise Rochelle.

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  12. k rawson Avatar
    k rawson

    Wrenching story. So much woven into those 100 words.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Karen

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  13. Kecia Sparlin Avatar
    Kecia Sparlin

    Iain, I think this is my favorite of your flash that I’ve read so far. This seemed very real and, yet, a romance (in the classical sense) at the same time. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Kecia, much appreciated.

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  14. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Very powerfully done, Iain. Emotionally, we were right there with him…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Dale, glad you liked it.

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  15. Lynn Love Avatar
    Lynn Love

    Tragic, Iain. Saw in the press today there was similar true story, a soldier making horrific decision, skewed by battle fatigue and fear. You capture the despair so well. Well done

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Lynn. That story has been running for a few years now. No one has come out of it well or without loss.

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar
        Lynn Love

        Very, very true. Though the circumstances and outcome were awful, I find it hard to judge the man – unsure of how I would react under such pressures.

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  16. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    A powerful story, so much unsaid,

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Michael

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  17. jellico84 Avatar
    jellico84

    What a terrifying tale, indeed. Sorry, can’t say more at the moment….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      No problem, thanks for reading and commenting.

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  18. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I echo that in war there are no winners… brilliant and sad.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Bjorn

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  19. Rommy Avatar
    Rommy

    There is so much detail packed in this piece. You really get a sense of place and character across so well. I hope for the protagonist’s success, even though I don’t quite know what happened.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rommy, glad you appreciated my effort.

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  20. trentpmcd Avatar
    trentpmcd

    Wow, powerful take on the prompt.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Trent

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  21. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    Very nice piece, overwhelmed by conscience.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  22. ceayr Avatar
    ceayr

    Magnificent, Iain.
    As good as anything you have ever done, and your standard is high.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks CE, very kind.

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  23. rgayer55 Avatar
    rgayer55

    I would have to agree with the others, this is the best I’ve read of your work–so far. You’ve raised the bar. Outstanding piece.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, high praise indeed.

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  24. Liz Young Avatar
    Liz Young

    Chilling – the evil we do lives after us.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Absolutely, thanks Liz.

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  25. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    Excellent writing, the horror and truth creeps up on us and then hits hard. Very powerful.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Gabi, much appreciated.

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  26. Sarah Potter Writes Avatar
    Sarah Potter Writes

    This is so topical, and yet war is always topical. Humans are capable of such wondrous acts of kindness and of evil. The decision to disobey an order is a tough one for soldiers. They almost need to be braver to disobey than to obey. It is good that most humans have a conscience — and I do believe it is most, although the few that don’t have a conscience are the ones we have to fear the most. Even some of the seemingly most evil people in history have had a conscience in a patchy sense of the word. They might love their family, or not dream of hurting their dog, but not think twice about torturing or sending someone to the gas chambers as part of their day job D:

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think the biggest mistake many of us make is to dismiss the people who commit horrific crimes as aberrations of some kind, as evil and somehow not human – they are people and human just like any of us and it behoves us to study and understand how and why a fellow human would act this way. Only then can we try to fathom a way to avoid it happening again. Thanks Sarah, always great comments from you, much appreciated.

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  27. HonieBriggs Avatar
    HonieBriggs

    First person gripping, choking, and deeply moving. Excellent work.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Honie, appreciate the kind comment.

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  28. Balaka Avatar
    Balaka

    amazing story…heart wrenching. Loved it

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    1. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
      Keith’s Ramblings

      Poignant. I wonder just how many have taken this route.

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    2. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks, glad you liked it

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  29. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover Avatar
    Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Wow, what a dark story, beautifully written. I loved “A blanket of innocence covering sin.” That line gripped me.

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  30. nonsmokingladybug Avatar
    nonsmokingladybug

    Terrifying take. Very well written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  31. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    Oh! Takes the breath away. Reality can be grim.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, it certainly can.

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  32. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Whoa! Heavy stuff. The title was a warning but still… memories of wrong doings should be impossible to live with. Well told

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Laurie, glad it made an impression.

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      1. Laurie Bell Avatar
        Laurie Bell

        Sure did!

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  33. wmqcolby Avatar
    wmqcolby

    I never saw any action as a soldier, but this is pretty right on. It’s tough stuff. Great job, Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  34. Vaidehi Soni Avatar
    Vaidehi Soni

    Some mistakes are incorrigible. I feel bad for your character though. Nicely written 😊

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Vaidehi, appreciate you reading and commenting.

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  35. subroto Avatar
    subroto

    Brilliantly done. So much story and so few words.

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      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, much appreciated.

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  36. reemamichelle Avatar
    reemamichelle

    There is so much in these 100 words. Conscience will never let you go free for the wrongs you have done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  37. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    There is such a huge story here in so few words. It makes me feel ill they would do what they did to that young woman. I don’t believe two wrongs make at right but this soldier certainly does. Even enough to kill himself for not stopping what happened. No happy endings here wherever you take it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Afraid not, no redemption for him, at least he has accepted what he did and has done something about it, but too late. No happy endings in war certainly. Thanks for commenting Mandi

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      1. mandibelle16 Avatar
        mandibelle16

        You’re welcome!

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  38. Clare Hempstead Avatar
    Clare Hempstead

    Very powerful. So much detail. Really well told.

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      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Clare, much appreciated.

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  39. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    sometimes, you have to be bad to do good. that last bullet will finally do it, i hope. well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks, appreciate your comment.

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  40. Laura3527 Avatar
    Laura3527

    Oh how sad. Guilt is always a hard pill to swallow… a reminder that war stays on the brain forever.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Absolutely, thanks Laura, appreciate your comment.

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  41. Sascha Darlington Avatar
    Sascha Darlington

    Iain, something feels different about your writing lately, like there’s an underlying intensity, or something. Or sharpness. Well done!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Sascha, hopefully a sign of improvement! Very kind, thank you.

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      1. Sascha Darlington Avatar
        Sascha Darlington

        I was obviously too subtle; I doing that way too much lately. Yes! Not that your previous writing wasn’t good, but lately it’s been excellent. 🙂

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  42. justjoyfulness Avatar
    justjoyfulness

    Very powerful. Conscience is a hard task master, isn’t it?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, I think especially in war it must be difficult to live with what is even and done.

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  43. The Mom Who Runs Avatar
    The Mom Who Runs

    Powerful story in few words. Really enjoyed this one!

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      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, glad you appreciated my effort.

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  44. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar
    lingeringvisions by Dawn

    Powerful story this week, Lain.

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      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Dawn

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  45. Leaking Ink Avatar
    Leaking Ink

    Wow. Powerful…sad…lingering…

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      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, very kind.

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  46. Inside the Mind of Isadora Avatar
    Inside the Mind of Isadora

    Lain,
    Many have said the descriptive words I would love to use: powerful, heart-wrenching, sad, intense, etc. – to capsulize: GREAT – BRAVO
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Too kind, thank you so much 🙂

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  47. sailajaP14 Avatar
    sailajaP14

    Beautiful and powerful, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  48. Dahlia Avatar
    Dahlia

    You have brought out the conflict and the war within so well – awesome.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much

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  49. The Reclining Gentleman Avatar
    The Reclining Gentleman

    Very powerful, Iain. Well written

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      Iain Kelly

      Thank you.

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  50. magarisa Avatar
    magarisa

    Your haunting tale highlights the horror of going through war. Superbly written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, very kind.

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      1. magarisa Avatar
        magarisa

        You’re welcome.

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