CASTAWAY

The sea was calm and a brilliant clear blue, mirrored by the cloudless sky above.

The storm had railed against the mysterious island for three weeks, the same surge that had capsized the cargo ship and driven them to the unknown land in the canoe life rafts.

‘You’re sure which direction?’ Gideon asked.

Cyrus shrugged. ‘We can’t stay here. Nothing but sand and rock and we haven’t seen another ship all the time we’ve been here.’

‘There must be a search party looking for the wreck and survivors. Why haven’t they picked up our emergency beacons?’

Cyrus shrugged again. He wanted to get away from the island. Something felt wrong. They had explored it all and found no sign of life but still he couldn’t shake the feeling they were not alone.

They shook hands before each solemnly getting into their meagre craft.

As they pulled away from the beach Cyrus looked back.

He saw the glint of sunlight reflected on glass. Standing on a rock he saw the man watching them leave through his telescope.


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My small tale was suggested by the classic novel ‘The Mysterious Island‘, by Jules Verne.

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

41 responses to “CASTAWAY”

  1. Photo prompt aside, I could envision the blue sky and smell the salty water of the sea. I could feel the sun almost blinding me. You fleshed out the scene fantastically Iain.

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  2. “Wilson! Wil-son!!” (Tom Hanks in ‘Castaway’)
    Sorry…just couldn’t help where my mind went.
    Sharp, full, short fiction…as usual! 🙂

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    1. I asked for that with the title I guess! Thanks Liz

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      1. (It’s not you…it’s me!)

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  3. As I recall from the novel, there was plenty of life on that island, just no apparent human life. May Captain Nemo have a better fate in your story than he did in Verne’s.

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    1. Thanks James, plenty of life on Verne’s island – I think they were stuck there for 5 years or more in the end – and 900-odd pages – the opposite end of the fiction scale to the Flash Fiction version!

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  4. Hope they get safely away and rescued!

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    1. Thanks Janet – who knows whee they will end up!

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      1. You’re welcome, Lain.

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  5. And I heard the eerie music in the background as I read the last line. Great job!

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  6. Great story! I love the ending.

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  7. Exciting They just left in time

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  8. OMG, I m so curious to know more.
    Interesting take on the prompt 🙂

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  9. Weeks of rain would be bad enough without the observations from suspicious others. Nicely done

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  10. Love, love… Incredibly ominous. I kind of wish that they end up back on the island and find out what is the mystery. Fab story leaving me wanting more!! 🙂

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    1. Thanks Victoria – they don’t seem like they’re too sure what they’re doing – maybe the tide will drag them back to shore…!

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  11. I fear that they may find that the currents return them to the island, for the ship wreak was no coincidence!

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  12. The man with a binocular did not hurt them. It is good they left in the nick of time.
    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/08/life-boats.html

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  13. The search party is looking for them and they just missed them! Great story Iain!

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    1. Thanks PJ. Interesting interpretation – you’re the only one to think of that solution so far, definitely a plausible explanation of who the man looking for them is 🙂

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      1. Yes, that is what I thought it was about, the search party.

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      2. I thought the same thing that maybe they left too soon.

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  14. Fear of the unknown can put all kinds of thoughts in your head and maybe they just needed to stay a little longer or at least go back and find out who was looking at them…maybe it was someone else that had landed on that island like they did. It may be safer than drifting without water or food to last an unknown time before someone finds them. A grate suspence and lots of questions unanswered. 🙂

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    1. Thank you. The question for them is whether the person on the island is friend or foe?!

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  15. I really admire how you customise your inspiration and create a whole new world rather than blandly reframing the tale like an ordinary/ inexperienced story teller would .

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    1. Thank you for a lovely compliment Moon.

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  16. Did he have a claw for a hand or a stump for a leg? Well done, Iain. Very eerie take.

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    1. And a patch over one eye. Thanks Varad

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  17. I hope that Cyrus and Gideon were able to get away without any harm! Great take on the prompt, Iain! 😊

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