Agnes lay awake staring at the roof of the tent. She gave Archie a nudge.

‘What now?’ he grumbled.

‘Don’t you hear that?’

‘I didn’t hear anything.’ Archie rolled over.

‘This wasn’t what I had in mind when you said you had a surprise planned.’

A strange howl sounded in the distance.

‘Was that a wolf?’

‘Could be,’ Archie mumbled. ‘You can get them around here.’

‘That’s it, I’m sleeping in the car.’ Agnes spent five minutes extricating herself from her sleeping bag then fumbling to open the tent door.

Archie heard her footsteps fading away and the car door slam.

Peace at last, he thought.

© Jan Wayne Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read more stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

80 responses to “PEACE AT LAST”

  1. Yeah… some things just cannot be shared… Sounds like my sister and brother-in-law. He used to take her camping. Then he didn’t! 😉


  2. This reminds me of an episode of The Simpsons (or is it Family Guy?) where it’s Homer who ends up sleeping in the car and getting a little more than he bargained for. In your take, I hope it’s Archie who gets more than he bargained for in the morning.


  3. This made me laugh. This was my Mom when we’re camping. She thought it was bears and it turned out we were camping right near a farmers field –there were cows. Great piece Ian.

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  4. “Agnes spent five minutes extricating herself from her sleeping bag then fumbling to open the tent door.” That lines sums up camping perfectly. A nice take on the prompt and enjoyable read.

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  5. This made me laugh and brought back memories of camping with my son. Just nodding off and “Dad! Dad!” “What is it?” “Tawney Owl!” “Great go back to sleep.” Me awake for the rest of the night.

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  6. LOL! What I’m wondering is: Was the surprise Archie finally getting some peace?? 😉 Funny, your’s is the first story I’ve read and we both had a similar train of thought with the disgruntled co-camper!
    Happy trails and peaceful dreams! 😉

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