IAIN KELLY

FIRST DATE

Walking down the brightly-lit street, Darryl took Victoria’s arm in his.

The evening couldn’t have gone any better. Dinner at a Michelin-starred restaurant where the conversation and wine had flowed. His month’s wage had just covered the bill.

Now he was beside this elegant woman. Her skin flawless, hair dark and straight, eyes deep and mysterious.

How he would manage beyond this first meeting he hadn’t figured out. She would realise his dating site profile wasn’t entirely truthful eventually. Right now he was enjoying the moment. He would walk back to her flat. If she invited him in for a nightcap, all the better.

They stopped at traffic lights and waited to cross the road. A group of youths on scooters stopped at the lights.

It couldn’t be, Darryl thought, not tonight.

One of the riders, wearing ripped jeans and an old leather jacket, looked over.

‘Alright Darryl, what you doing walking around the posh part of town?’ he shouted. ‘And where’d you get the fancy clothes?’

Darryl’s heart sank. Victoria stared at him.


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Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

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38 responses to “FIRST DATE”

  1. joyroses13 Avatar

    Poor Darryl! He is learning the hard way that trying to be someone your not is not the way to impress someone!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      And all that money wasted for nothing! Thanks for reading Joy 🙂

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  2. Priceless Joy Avatar

    Uh Oh, if you’re not truthful on your dating profile it will catch up with you as Darryl found out! Poor Darryl, he couldn’t even have one night to dream. Cute story, Iain! I enjoyed this!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks PJ, afraid poor Darryl has just learned a hard lesson! 🙂

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      1. Priceless Joy Avatar

        Yes, he sure has! Hopefully Victoria will not dump him!

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      2. Iain Kelly Avatar

        I don’t think it’s going to last much longer!

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      3. Priceless Joy Avatar

        You’re probably right.

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  3. shehannemoore Avatar

    Aw…the poor guy

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He’s trying at least

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      1. shehannemoore Avatar

        oh yeah. it’s another brilliant capture

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  4. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    Hopefully she’s impressed by the effort, if nothing else. Great story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’m not so sure she’s impressed, maybe later when she calms down! Thanks 🙂

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  5. Jade M. Wong Avatar

    One should always be honest from the getgo. I hope Victoria is forgiving lol

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Honesty is the best policy. Thanks Jade 🙂

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  6. Michael Avatar

    Things can come undone sometimes can’t they. I was thinking he was thinking not on the first date…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      They sure can. If he could have just got through the first evening and then told her in his own time. Alas…

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  7. Su Avatar

    Oh no! Poor guy!! Seems like that night was like a fairy tale for Darryl… Good one Iain..

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A modern day Cinderella maybe 🙂

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  8. David K Avatar
    David K

    There’s a moral for us all there Iain! Usually the truth stalks us quietly, but unlucky for Darryl it not only caught up but rumbled past. A nice, lighthearted piece. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks David, a definite moral. 🙂

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  9. Joyfrida Avatar

    I think she will forgive him if he was sincere right then 🙂 Nice take.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I think he deserves a chance 🙂

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  10. izzy-grabs-life Avatar

    Heh. I’m thinking he still has a chance. Maybe now he has some mystery to him, and the real fun date is just beginning! ^_^ Great job with this

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks I think she’ll let him have another chance 🙂

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  11. angietrafford Avatar

    Moment. Ruined. Brilliantly told 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Angie. It’s taken some of the romance out of his evening 🙂

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  12. James Avatar
  13. Shivangi Avatar

    Hahaha… loved this one. I am glad Victoria found out but maybe Darryl has some hope, if fate intervenes! Amazing Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, very kind 🙂

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  14. Singledust Avatar

    Oh he got found out! I hope her stare turned a little softer later. I kind of like Daryl even though he wasn’t totally honest with his profile.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’m glad that came across, I think he’s a nice guy really, just trying too hard to impress 🙂

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  15. Chris C. Avatar

    Well – at least he made the effort, surely she’d see that? But I agree with everyone else, honesty *is* the best policy. I wonder though… was it coincidence they showed up then, or no?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ha, maybe not. Thanks Chris

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  16. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    Poor Daryl as if he’s just been caught in a lie. She maybe beautiful but if he can’t be himself she isn’t for him. Nice write Ian.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Mandi

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  17. jacquelineobyikocha Avatar

    Well, nothing is hidden under the sun afterall. Next time, he should stay real.
    I featured your book on my Author zone post. https://acookingpotandtwistedtales.com/2017/02/19/bring-your-books-2-authorzone/

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That’s great, thanks Jacqueline, will check it out. Stay real, Iain 🙂

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