They had been waiting for three hours in the airport terminal. The departure boards were full of yellow-highlighted rectangles reading ‘DELAYED.’ The fog looked thicker than ever out the window.

The children were climbing on the seats again.

‘Joe get down from there and let go of your sister,’ Claire said.

The kids ignored her. Pete gave a look of apology to the serious-looking woman sitting opposite them.

A loud groan grew around them. The yellow rectangles turned to red – ‘CANCELLED.’ An announcement came over the loudspeakers. Pete managed to pick out the phrase ‘return to your airline check-in desk to make alternative flight arrangements.’

There was nothing else they could do. Pete grabbed the carry-on luggage and Claire rounded up the kids. They joined the disgruntled crowd heading back to the check-in area.

The woman who had sat opposite them remained. What should she do now? The explosive belt strapped underneath her clothing gripped tightly to her sweating skin.

She had no instructions for this eventuality.


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© Dawn Miller

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

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53 responses to “DELAYED”

  1. Priceless Joy Avatar

    So chilling! Even more so because of all the terrorist attacks these days. I sure hope that the cancellations of the plane meant she would not detonate her explosives! Great story, Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks PJ. Let’s hope she is cancelled rather than delayed…

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      1. Priceless Joy Avatar

        Yes! Absolutely!

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  2. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    There’s a lot of tension there – although I wonder how she managed to get past that crazy airport security. Maybe they were too busy with water bottles and scissors.
    Great story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks J.A. That’s the problem with terrorism, if they want to do it they will find away no matter what security is in place – unless the weather gets in the way!

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  3. joyroses13 Avatar

    Whoa!! Didn’t expect that ending. Good job!

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  4. BarbCT Avatar

    Holy mackerel! I did not see that coming.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Barb. Always good to find a surprising twist.

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  5. David K Avatar
    David K

    Very visual, liked the build up of tension and the twist. Very well written, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks David, much appreciated.

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  6. draliman Avatar

    Foiled by fog. Hopefully she’ll get fed up waiting and blow herself up in a field somewhere.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Maybe she’ll return to sender with a surprise when they open the package!

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  7. Chris C. Avatar

    I find it amazing every time you start with the mundane, you always create a twist ending that leaves the reader unsettled! I am a tad surprised she managed to get the belt across security – I wonder what’ll happen to her eventually.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Chris, very kind. Always a challenge to keep finding a twist to keep everyone guessing.

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  8. Lynn Love Avatar

    Felt something coming, but wasn’t quite sure what it was! Nicely done, Iain, deflecting us towards domestic, personal strife when a huge catastrophy has just been averted – for now.
    Great tale

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Lynn, they’ll maybe never know how lucky they were to have a flight cancelled.

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        My pleasure 🙂

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  9. angietrafford Avatar

    The moment when an inconvenience becomes a blessing. Lucky for those passengers. Great twist.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Angie, they’ll never know how lucky they were.

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      1. angietrafford Avatar

        Absolutely not!

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  10. neelwritesblog Avatar

    Now, that was something i just didn’t expect. Wonderful sudden twist.
    And the theme very topical too. Liked the slow buildup and the domestic squabble that contrasted with the frightening enormity of the situation. Very well written, Lain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Neel, glad I can still find a surprise twist for you.

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  11. Singledust Avatar

    interesting and also a little scary story Iain – always the unassuming ones it seems that get past security checks and such. Like the way your words really gave the feeling of a busy airport terminal. kids, dad, luggage all the typical ingredients!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, you can never tell what anyone is thinking or doing while sitting at airports waiting, but I’m sure this would be the exception.

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  12. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    Wow interesting take indeed. I’m happy all the planes got canceled now but I’m wondering what this woman will do, if she willthink for herself? I hope she doesn’t let the bomb explode in the airport. I hope she can somehow get out of her situation — she could hurt a lot of people a lot!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I wonder if she was really sure about what she was doing – or she would have set it off in the airport. Maybe she takes it as a sign and changes her ways!

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      1. mandibelle16 Avatar
        mandibelle16

        I hope she does Ian. Crossing my fingers. Lol.

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  13. JudyGerald Avatar

    Wow I love your writings. Nice pieces. 👌

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, much appreciated 🙂

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      1. JudyGerald Avatar

        Anytime. The pleasure is all mine.

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  14. John Davis Frain Avatar

    Oh, I do so love a twist ending and this one was delightful. And all the playful thoughts you have about what’s inside this woman’s mind! Mischief be thy middle name, Iain! Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks John, always appreciated.

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  15. KL Caley Avatar

    oooooh! What a surprise twist! Well done. KL ❤

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, appreciate the read and comment 🙂

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  16. Christine Goodnough Avatar

    Your story, so realistic, totally drew me in. Thank God for the fog — gives her a chance to rethink the project. As long as “the enemy” is faceless dogmas work, but maybe seeing the families she was about to blow up will change her mind.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Christine, I get the feeling she is having a change of heart about it.

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  17. Su Avatar

    Scary!! Gosh, with such things becoming so common, that one may not know when is the time.. Good take on the prompt, Iain. Stark reality put upfront…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Hopefully not too common but definitely a scary thought. Thanks Su.

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  18. LaRonda Moore Avatar

    Great story Iain. You know I love a twist!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Happy to oblige 🙂

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  19. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Divine intervention? Brilliant Iain.

    My FFfAW!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Fate possibly? Thanks Keith.

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  20. Nancy K. Avatar

    Oy. So glad I’m seeing this now that I’m BACK from my cross country flights! Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      🙂 sorry, glad I didn’t cause you to worry on your flights!

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  21. Dahlia Avatar

    Wow! That was unexpected and chilling. I can’t help wondering what would happen next…any scope of a glimpse?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks. I hadn’t really thought but I think she has a change of heart. How she gets out of her situation I hadn’t figured out!

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  22. jacquelineobyikocha Avatar

    The tension is palpable. I wonder what her choices were?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Not many easy or good choices in that situation!

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  23. Sally Stackhouse Avatar

    ooh what a twist!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sally 🙂

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  24. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    Well she better come up with something quick.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Hopefully it’s not on a timer!

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