JUDE

The last note faded on the strings. The gathered handful of listeners gave polite applause. One guy flipped a coin into my bag.

People bustled past on their commutes. As I was about to begin my next song I saw her. She was exiting the train station in a hurry as usual.

For the last three months I had seen her every weekday morning. She never stopped to listen, just kept on walking without pausing. I had tried different songs: fast and slow; loud and soft; romantic and angry. Nothing seemed to interest her.

Last Friday, as she sped past, a piece of paper had fallen from her pocket. I stopped mid-song to pick it up.

Now it was time to put my weekend’s work into action. I struck the opening chord on my guitar and sang as loudly as I could.

‘Hey Jude…’

I saw her stop and turn. Our eyes met. She smiled, turned and walked on.

Tomorrow she will be back. Maybe she will smile at me again.


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© Sunayana MoiPensieve

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

46 responses to “JUDE”

  1. Awh!! Good song 🙂 Hope she comes back!

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    1. Thanks Joy, I’m sure she will 🙂

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  2. Aww, maybe tomorrow she’ll stop and listen to a whole song, and maybe the day after, she’ll have a small conversation with him 🙂

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    1. And so their story begins… Thanks Jade 🙂

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  3. this was a very touching tale from you Iain, not something I think I have read from you before. The emotions from both persons so beautifully clear and evident in its simple connection through music.

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    1. Thank you. You are right, i don’t tend to write much romance or emotional love stories, but it is always nice to try something different. Glad you liked my effort 🙂

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  4. This one really resonated. You know what would be cool. A companion piece written from Jude’s perspective! But hey, it’s not like you announced the all-request hour or anything, so I’ll shut up now.

    BTW, Iain, you should strongly consider participating in the A to Z blogging challenge. I’m playing along this year, and it promises to be great fun!

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    1. Thanks John, that’s a good idea, I wonder what Jude would say? Where can I find out more on the A to Z blogging challenge? Sounds intriguing.

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      1. If I do this right, this link should get you there: http://www.a-to-zchallenge.com/

        If that didn’t show up like a link, try atozchallenge.com. Runs the month of April with Sundays as a day of rest. You’re perfect for it.

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        1. Thanks John, the link worked. Now checking my calendar to see if I have time and mulling over a theme….

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  5. Awweee… i can’t wait for the next morn! And I love that song from The Beatles. 😀

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  6. Lovely romantic story Iain. Loved reading it.

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  7. Hats off to you for making just 150 something words so romantic!

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    1. Thank you, it’s nice to be sweet occasionally 🙂

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      1. Yeah…Just now and again…

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  8. Thank the lord she had a name he could find a song for ! Lovely tale and well told as always, Iain

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    1. Not sure what he would have done if her name was Ethel or Agnes… Thanks Lynn 🙂

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      1. My pleasure Iain 🙂

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  9. This story is so touching. It is almost as though he lives to see this girl every day. I’m glad that he played a song that made her take notice. Great story Iain!

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    1. Thanks PJ, I imagine he does get a lift every time he see her.

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  10. Never knew you could also string such a romantic story too. Hats off, Kelly.

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    1. Thanks, nice to be a romantic occasionally.

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  11. Love is in the air. Beautiful tale. 😊

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  12. Wonder what was on the piece of paper that told him she was a Beatles fan?

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  13. This was cute Ian, the effort this guy put into get a reaction out of this girl. I’m glad she dropped that paper so he could play that famous song and make her smile. I hope she keeps smiling and more. Great title too, I’m sure most of us reading thought of the Beatles tune. I’d say it’s one of my favs but I’m sure most people say that as well 🙂

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    1. Thanks Mandi. Such a recognisable song and easy to sing along too. Glad you liked it 🙂

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  14. Wow… what an interesting love story in the making. Enjoyed every word!

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  15. Its those moments of recognition that we hang onto isn’t it..one year at Christmas when I was particularly down and rather lonely a lady I would see out walking drove past and waved, it made my day…great piece Iain…

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    1. Thanks Michael. I agree it’s those little moments of kindness that you remember.

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  16. I’m both sort-of glad you didn’t use Hey There Delilah, and a little disappointed you didn’t! But nevertheless, Hey Jude’s a lovely song, and I’m glad it got her attention. A lovely story!

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    1. Haha! Keeping it sweet and light this week. Thanks Chris 🙂

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      1. And it’s an equally good piece of writing, dark or light! 😀 Have a good week.

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  17. thats true love ! a sweet romantic story ,Iain !

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    1. Thank you, glad you liked it 🙂

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  18. Great story! Love your take on the prompt. I LOVE “Hey Jude” 🙂

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    1. Thanks Kay, glad you liked it 🙂

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  19. Aww this is cute and sweet. Someone is almost in love. Let’s hope they keep playing and smiling. Lovely take Iain.

    I am leaving a link of my YouTube video in the comments. Thank you for checking it out.

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  20. Great story. I like how you wove fiction and reality together.

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