IAIN KELLY

JUDE

The last note faded on the strings. The gathered handful of listeners gave polite applause. One guy flipped a coin into my bag.

People bustled past on their commutes. As I was about to begin my next song I saw her. She was exiting the train station in a hurry as usual.

For the last three months I had seen her every weekday morning. She never stopped to listen, just kept on walking without pausing. I had tried different songs: fast and slow; loud and soft; romantic and angry. Nothing seemed to interest her.

Last Friday, as she sped past, a piece of paper had fallen from her pocket. I stopped mid-song to pick it up.

Now it was time to put my weekend’s work into action. I struck the opening chord on my guitar and sang as loudly as I could.

‘Hey Jude…’

I saw her stop and turn. Our eyes met. She smiled, turned and walked on.

Tomorrow she will be back. Maybe she will smile at me again.


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Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

46 responses to “JUDE”

  1. joyroses13 Avatar

    Awh!! Good song 🙂 Hope she comes back!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Joy, I’m sure she will 🙂

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  2. Jade M. Wong Avatar

    Aww, maybe tomorrow she’ll stop and listen to a whole song, and maybe the day after, she’ll have a small conversation with him 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      And so their story begins… Thanks Jade 🙂

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  3. Singledust Avatar

    this was a very touching tale from you Iain, not something I think I have read from you before. The emotions from both persons so beautifully clear and evident in its simple connection through music.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you. You are right, i don’t tend to write much romance or emotional love stories, but it is always nice to try something different. Glad you liked my effort 🙂

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  4. John Davis Frain Avatar

    This one really resonated. You know what would be cool. A companion piece written from Jude’s perspective! But hey, it’s not like you announced the all-request hour or anything, so I’ll shut up now.

    BTW, Iain, you should strongly consider participating in the A to Z blogging challenge. I’m playing along this year, and it promises to be great fun!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks John, that’s a good idea, I wonder what Jude would say? Where can I find out more on the A to Z blogging challenge? Sounds intriguing.

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      1. John Davis Frain Avatar

        If I do this right, this link should get you there: http://www.a-to-zchallenge.com/

        If that didn’t show up like a link, try atozchallenge.com. Runs the month of April with Sundays as a day of rest. You’re perfect for it.

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      2. Iain Kelly Avatar

        Thanks John, the link worked. Now checking my calendar to see if I have time and mulling over a theme….

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  5. maria Avatar

    Awweee… i can’t wait for the next morn! And I love that song from The Beatles. 😀

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Maria 🙂

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  6. susmitamukherjee Avatar

    Lovely romantic story Iain. Loved reading it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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  7. shivamt25 Avatar

    Hats off to you for making just 150 something words so romantic!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you very much!

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  8. shehannemoore Avatar

    What a sweet tale x

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, it’s nice to be sweet occasionally 🙂

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      1. shehannemoore Avatar

        Yeah…Just now and again…

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  9. Lynn Love Avatar
    Lynn Love

    Thank the lord she had a name he could find a song for ! Lovely tale and well told as always, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Not sure what he would have done if her name was Ethel or Agnes… Thanks Lynn 🙂

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        My pleasure Iain 🙂

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  10. Priceless Joy Avatar

    This story is so touching. It is almost as though he lives to see this girl every day. I’m glad that he played a song that made her take notice. Great story Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks PJ, I imagine he does get a lift every time he see her.

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  11. neelwritesblog Avatar

    Never knew you could also string such a romantic story too. Hats off, Kelly.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, nice to be a romantic occasionally.

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  12. Vaidehi Soni Avatar

    Love is in the air. Beautiful tale. 😊

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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  13. James Avatar

    Wonder what was on the piece of paper that told him she was a Beatles fan?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Or was it her name?

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  14. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    This was cute Ian, the effort this guy put into get a reaction out of this girl. I’m glad she dropped that paper so he could play that famous song and make her smile. I hope she keeps smiling and more. Great title too, I’m sure most of us reading thought of the Beatles tune. I’d say it’s one of my favs but I’m sure most people say that as well 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Mandi. Such a recognisable song and easy to sing along too. Glad you liked it 🙂

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  15. Shivangi Avatar

    Wow… what an interesting love story in the making. Enjoyed every word!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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  16. Michael Avatar

    Its those moments of recognition that we hang onto isn’t it..one year at Christmas when I was particularly down and rather lonely a lady I would see out walking drove past and waved, it made my day…great piece Iain…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Michael. I agree it’s those little moments of kindness that you remember.

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  17. Chris C. Avatar

    I’m both sort-of glad you didn’t use Hey There Delilah, and a little disappointed you didn’t! But nevertheless, Hey Jude’s a lovely song, and I’m glad it got her attention. A lovely story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Haha! Keeping it sweet and light this week. Thanks Chris 🙂

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      1. Chris C. Avatar

        And it’s an equally good piece of writing, dark or light! 😀 Have a good week.

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  18. jupitermagic Avatar

    thats true love ! a sweet romantic story ,Iain !

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, glad you liked it 🙂

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  19. Kay Morris Writes Avatar

    Great story! Love your take on the prompt. I LOVE “Hey Jude” 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Kay, glad you liked it 🙂

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  20. jacquelineobyikocha Avatar

    Aww this is cute and sweet. Someone is almost in love. Let’s hope they keep playing and smiling. Lovely take Iain.

    I am leaving a link of my YouTube video in the comments. Thank you for checking it out.

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  21. athling2001 Avatar

    Great story. I like how you wove fiction and reality together.

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