The last note faded on the strings. The gathered handful of listeners gave polite applause. One guy flipped a coin into my bag.

People bustled past on their commutes. As I was about to begin my next song I saw her. She was exiting the train station in a hurry as usual.

For the last three months I had seen her every weekday morning. She never stopped to listen, just kept on walking without pausing. I had tried different songs: fast and slow; loud and soft; romantic and angry. Nothing seemed to interest her.

Last Friday, as she sped past, a piece of paper had fallen from her pocket. I stopped mid-song to pick it up.

Now it was time to put my weekend’s work into action. I struck the opening chord on my guitar and sang as loudly as I could.

‘Hey Jude…’

I saw her stop and turn. Our eyes met. She smiled, turned and walked on.

Tomorrow she will be back. Maybe she will smile at me again.

© Sunayana MoiPensieve

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

46 responses to “JUDE”

  1. this was a very touching tale from you Iain, not something I think I have read from you before. The emotions from both persons so beautifully clear and evident in its simple connection through music.

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  2. This one really resonated. You know what would be cool. A companion piece written from Jude’s perspective! But hey, it’s not like you announced the all-request hour or anything, so I’ll shut up now.

    BTW, Iain, you should strongly consider participating in the A to Z blogging challenge. I’m playing along this year, and it promises to be great fun!

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  3. This was cute Ian, the effort this guy put into get a reaction out of this girl. I’m glad she dropped that paper so he could play that famous song and make her smile. I hope she keeps smiling and more. Great title too, I’m sure most of us reading thought of the Beatles tune. I’d say it’s one of my favs but I’m sure most people say that as well 🙂

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  4. Its those moments of recognition that we hang onto isn’t it..one year at Christmas when I was particularly down and rather lonely a lady I would see out walking drove past and waved, it made my day…great piece Iain…

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  5. I’m both sort-of glad you didn’t use Hey There Delilah, and a little disappointed you didn’t! But nevertheless, Hey Jude’s a lovely song, and I’m glad it got her attention. A lovely story!

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  6. Aww this is cute and sweet. Someone is almost in love. Let’s hope they keep playing and smiling. Lovely take Iain.

    I am leaving a link of my YouTube video in the comments. Thank you for checking it out.


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