IAIN KELLY

AMONG THE REMAINS

She brought the axe down on the bird’s neck. The body, until then a squirming, panicked, struggling handful went limp. The last few feathers floated to the ground and all was still.

She wiped the sweat from her brow. The sun continued to beat down relentlessly. They all said the weather would break soon, it had to. Jacobs, MacDonald and Guthrie at the Mill all swore they had never seen a season like it.

The other crofts, with fields on the wetter ground down near the burn still clung to hope that a downpour could salvage their yield.

It was too late for their crop this year. The fields were a dusty carpet, the gentle breeze creating small clouds of dried earth floating over the cracked soil. The few stalks that had broken the surface were dry, brown and shrivelled. They were all that remained of the toil and effort from ploughing and seeding and working the land for the year.

And now Bessie had stopped laying. Maybe she was dehydrated in the warm drought too. At least she had the means to give them a nice meal tonight, chicken pie with a few vegetables. The rest she would stew and that would sustain them for the rest of the week.

Robert would be down from the hills that evening, the lambs and sheep would be brought in to go to market by the weekend. She would have to ask him to pick up more grain and vegetables while he was in town.

She placed her hands on her back and stretched the aching joints. She felt movement in her belly and fondly responded to the life burgeoning inside her. She hoped Robert would be overjoyed when she told him. It would make life harder for them, but next year the crop may be bountiful.

She picked up the remains of Bessie and made her way inside to the kitchen to start cooking the dinner.


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Copyright Sue Vincent

This is a response to the Thursday Photo Prompt – Remains curated over at Sue Vincent’s Daily Echo. Click on the link to read other stories inspired by the image.

I have recently been filling a gap in my reading by finally getting round to ‘Sunset Song’ by Lewis Grassic Gibbons, one of Scotland’s most famous novels. I think it may have influenced this short story.

32 responses to “AMONG THE REMAINS”

  1. joyroses13 Avatar

    I can feel her aching muscles! Wonderful story and now makes me curious to read the book that you mentioned. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Just finished it, a lot of schools teach it in Scotland, a wonderful read, I recommend it, although some of the Scots dialect might be tricky for non-Scots!

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        Thanks! I did wonder about the dialect but I am learning through reading some other Scottish books. 🙂

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  2. Jane Dougherty Avatar

    A great story to come out of a feather! Just one point I’d make though, if she could feel the baby wriggling and her old man still didn’t know she was pregnant, I’m wondering why and how she’s been hiding it all these months 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A similar thing happens in Sunset Song, back in those days the rural men were simple crofters and not so educated, and women wore layers of clothing that covered such things more. Likewise, I often find stories where women give birth without realising they are pregnant unbelievable too, but apparently it does happen.

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

        That’s true. But why would she hide it? I think we should be told 🙂

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  3. Antoinette Truglio Martin Avatar
    Antoinette Truglio Martin

    So vivid. Great work

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Antoinette

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Sue 🙂

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  4. StuHN Avatar

    Was the hubster up in the mountains for awhile? Was this HIS baby? Did she just not realize (yeah, that one I doubt). If he was around all the time, wouldn’t he have noticed, or was he the Man’s Man, and didn’t put up with no women fuss.?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Or all of the above?

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  5. willowdot21 Avatar

    A great story, sad and hopeless until you give us the glimmer of hope at the end. I wonder how the news was received.💜

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I think it was received well 🙂 Thank you

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      1. willowdot21 Avatar

        I do hope so 💜

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks for the reblog 🙂

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  6. tidalscribe Avatar

    I love this story, starting with the killing then revealing the lives and why Bessie must die. Perhaps she had waited in vain for a good moment ( such as rain arriving ) to tell her husband about the baby.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That is similar to the novel I was reading when I wrote this, just trying to find that right moment to tell him. Thank you

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  7. James Pyles Avatar

    Bessie’s going to feed them one way or another.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      One last time…

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  8. Liz H Avatar

    Rolls out with the rich textures of a classic film..loved this one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Liz

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  9. Jennie Avatar

    Really good, Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Jennie

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome.

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  10. Jennie Avatar

    This was excellent, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jennie

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You are welcome, Iain.

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  11. Sarah Ann Avatar
    Sarah Ann

    I hope Robert is pleased and doesn’t fly off the handle. I hope too they have the funds to buy food they can’t produce. This is a really bitter sweet tale, new life entering a stretch household, and the descriptions of the drought have me fetching a glass of water.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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