IAIN KELLY

BYSTANDERS IN A BORDER TOWN

Mamá Renata lifted the washing basket and hobbled down the stairs. She looked out onto the cobbled street.

Javi was there, running around with the other niños in the dusty sunshine. Señor Augusto swept his step.

A Moorish Gecko skittered down a shaded wall and across the street.

‘Javi, diez minutos,’ Mamá Renata called. Her grandson waved.

An alien sound stirred. A growing growl, mixed with loud, sharp cracking thuds.

Renata dropped the basket. ‘Javi, rápido!’ she beckoned him inside. His friends scattered. The gecko flitted into a crack in a wall. Señor Augusto ducked inside and closed his window shutters.

The noise exploded as a motorcycle flew down the hill and disappeared round the corner. A car followed, gunfire emanating from the passenger window, orange sparks flying, accelerating in pursuit.

And then the street was quiet again. The gecko poked his head out from the wall, Señor Augusto opened his window.

‘Diez minutos,’ Renata reminded Javi as he ran out to greet his excited friends.

Mamá Renata picked up the washing basket and headed to the courtyard.


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Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story or poem in around 150 – 175 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

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31 responses to “BYSTANDERS IN A BORDER TOWN”

  1. talesfromthemindofkristian Avatar

    Thank you for introducing me to a new challenge. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      You’re welcome 🙂

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  2. Divya Avatar

    Very poignant Iain! Loved it!

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  3. Sonia Chatterjee Avatar

    I attempted FFfAW for the first time today. Your post served as a major inspiration for me to start this.

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  4. Anagha Yatin Avatar
    Anagha Yatin

    What a drama in a flash of seconds! Oh gosh… And then the life turns to normal as if nothing has happened ever.
    Engaging take.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Anagha

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  5. James Avatar

    That would be a terrifying way to live. Actually, the main reason my family moved from Southern California to Idaho over twenty years ago is the nearest drive-by shooting to our home was about a mile away. My wife didn’t want our children to get shot, so we re-located. I know that’s not an option for a lot of people for many reasons, but while the transition was difficult, it was worth it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I can understand why your family moved. Unfortunately for some – not just at borders – it just seems to be a way of life.

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  6. yarnspinnerr Avatar

    A lot of action in few words.

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  7. Priceless Joy Avatar

    Wow, so realistic! I thought I was right there in the middle of the story! Great story, Iain!

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  8. joyroses13 Avatar

    I can’t imagine having to live like this! Too bad its not pure fiction!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      No unfortunately there are some places like this. Glad I have avoided them so far in life.

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        Same here.

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  9. Sheena Avatar

    Like James said – what a terrifying way to live. And how unfortunate that we can actually become immune to violence and terror.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sheena

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  10. notestowomen Avatar

    A delightfully action packed story, Iain. It’s uncanny how they return to how things were before the gunfire erupted. It’s obvious that they are used to the violence, unfortunately.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, that was the idea to show they are used to this happening, and it clearly has happened before.

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  11. Jennie Avatar

    That is terribly sad, yet a way of life for some. Well written, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jennie

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You are welcome, Iain.

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  12. Akshata Ram Avatar

    What on earth was that? Was it some gangsters passing by? And the villagers are so used to it that they treat it as a normal part of life?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I was thinking maybe some sort of drug gang war, pretty common along certain borders it seems.

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  13. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    And life goes on…as usual!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Just another day…

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  14. Dahlia Avatar

    A vividly painted picture!

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  15. Sarah Ann Avatar
    Sarah Ann

    Wow, the change in energy from the opening to the middle and the end again is so well done. Really enjoyed this.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Sarah Ann 🙂

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