He appeared naked, emerging from the mist hanging over the loch.
Mhairi stopped scrubbing the shirt. His torso was chiselled, the hair a dark mane, his eyes a piercing green. When the water no longer covered the top of his legs she knew she should look away, but she stared, as in a trance.
He spoke to her in a soft, lilting voice, ‘An exquisite creature.’ He took her chin in his hand, tilting her head up to look into his eyes. His skin felt smooth.
Mhairi could have dived into those green pools. She felt desire, lust. She opened her mouth, beckoning towards him. Take me, she insinuated.
He bent down towards her, his hands cupped her fulsome bust, his mouth opened inches from meeting hers. Her hungry tongue waited to receive his. Mhairi’s eyes were wide in anticipation. Just as she was about to close them and give herself fully, the man’s tongue flicked towards her – long, black and forked.
Mhairi recoiled. Now she saw the hooved feet of the engorged beast. She screamed and fell backwards as the man transformed before her into a huge horse. He galloped away, baying through the morning mist.
Mhairi picked up her basket and ran to the village. Someone had to warn them. The Kelpie had risen.

Written as part of Sunday Photo Fiction. Write a story of around 200 words based on the photo prompt given (above). Hosted by Susan Spaulding. For more details visit HERE.
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The Kelpies statue in the picture from JS is about half an hour from where I live in Scotland and has become a top tourist attraction. A kelpie is a shape-shifting water spirit in Scottish folklore, often associated with demons or Satan, and with seducing mere mortals – Wikipedia.
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33 responses to “THE KELPIE”
Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.
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Wow Iain!
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Thanks Di, something invigorating for a Sunday 😉
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Exellent Iain. I feel like I’ve been there before!
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Thank you Jordan 🙂
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Here I was getting drawn into what I thought was a nice romantic tale, SURPRISE! Good job!
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Thank you – I’m not sure I’ve ever written a romantic tale without a twist 😉
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LOL! I know, I should have been prepared. 🙂
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Ohh she’d better warn the others before the Kelpie claims a victim! Loved the narration, Iain! Well done.
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Thank you Shweta 🙂
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Just when it was going so well! I saw the Kelpies in July whilst visiting my youngest. Truly magnificent.
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Thanks Keith, they are quite spectacular, especially when seen in situ.
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Raunchy stuff Iain, well written (as always). However, I wont be able to see Ross Poldark now, without thinking, “Watch out, he’s a Kelpie!”
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Something a little refreshing for a Sunday! Hope you enjoyed the visit to the Kelpies, they are quite a sight.
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Yes, they’re magnificent.
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Whoa, Iain, this is some steamy story. Didn’t expect that twist. Phenomenal writing, as usual 🙂
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I did and you’re welcome 🙂
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Magical, I enjoyed it, until the forked tongue arrived.
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Thank you Michael
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I like how you build the tension and attraction and then drop that twist at the end. Looks like she really should have looked away earlier — or looked *down* earlier — but then, how could she control herself? She was ensorcelled!
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I think her mind was not her own for those few seconds 😉
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Phew, Iain, racy stuff here.
It’s not like that in Falkirk!
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I don’t know, a few drams on a Saturday night and you can see some sights…!
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Very good. 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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Very good.
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Thanks Neel
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Nice story! Poor Mhairi her love and lust remained unquenched. May be in some other avatar.
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Best to have avoided this one though.
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Wow! Told in a real folklore style!
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Thank you!
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