She thought the first time would have been an epiphany, a glimpse at paradise.
Instead, here she was underneath the overpass, among squalid dirt and mud.
The climactic moment had come with a rush of adrenaline, but it was over too quickly.
Her breathing returned to normal, she fixed her rucked top and smoothed her hem down.
Her clothes were impractical, what had she been thinking wearing heels and a short skirt?
She hefted another rock and threw it on top of the body bag. He sank further into the water.
Maybe her next murder would be more enjoyable.

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).
To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
My new novel, ‘A Justified State,’ is now available on Amazon in Paperback and on Amazon Kindle.
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109 responses to “HER FIRST TIME”
Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.
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Well done, completely different from what I was expecting…
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Good, then it worked 😉
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Clever twist, Iain
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Thank you Neil
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Hehe very clever and unexpected! – Love the cover of A Justified State btw – best of luck with it.
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Thank you Louise – not a patch on your exciting news, but I’m pleased with the cover and the story, even if only a small number give it a read!
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Everything should be celebrated Iain. The blood, sweat & tears getting there is exactly the same, however we publish.
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Sounds a grim start to a life of crime
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It can only get better!
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Masterful redirection! Congratulations on the publication of A Justified State. Hope the sales are going well.
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Thank you Clare, glad you enjoyed it. Sales are slow but steady so far. If you do have time, do check it out! 🙂
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I will do, Iain. I’ve just finished what I was reading, so need something new!
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Perfect timing, let me know what you think if you give it a go!
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Just downloaded it! 🙂
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Fantastic, thank you so much ♥
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My pleasure! I will let you know what I think and will leave a review. Anything to help a fellow Friday Fictioneer!
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So kind. I am finding the self promotion just as difficult and time consuming as writing the novel in the first place – and not really as enjoyable!, so every little helps and I’m very grateful to all those who give a bit of their time 🙂
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It’s difficult getting the exposure needed to create the sales.
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Which is why every little helps and every sale makes a huge difference – if only to keep the motivation up! Hope you enjoy it and I look forward to hearing what you think 🙂
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Yikes! I wasn’t expecting that. Deliciously grisly story, Iain.
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Thank you Susan
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Ah..lovely dark piece! 😀
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Thank you
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Excellent piece of misdirection! 🙂
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Thank you Sandra, always pleasing to manage a surprise.
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Dear Iain,
I guess there’s a first time for everything. But eeeeew. Well written. Great twist at the end.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle – we all have to start somewhere!
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Ha ha. If she doesn’t do a better job hiding the body, there won’t be a next time 😉
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She’s still learning 😉
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Creepy!
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Indeed!
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Great suspense. I knew it wasn’t rock ‘n’ roll she was doing but did think maybe sex or drugs. I think I have heard or read that the first killing is the hardest, though she seems fairly cool-headed as it is. Good story.
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Everything just takes practice until you get it right! Thanks Jilly 🙂
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You always put that twist at the end! Well done! 😉
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Thank you Courtney 😉
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That too a rather, unexpected turn. Great story, Iain! For some reason, this reminded me of Dexter.
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I imagine it is how he started out 🙂
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I thought I was getting used to your twisted endings and yet you surprised me again!
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Always good to know I can still keep you guessing 😉
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Just downloaded your book. Looking forward to reading it!
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Fantastic Janet, thank you so much. I hope I haven’t let you down! Do let me know what you think of it or leave a short review on Amazon and really hope you enjoy reading it ♥ 🙂
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Again. You did it again. Lovely misdirection. Great start to a career in crime.
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Thank you so much Neel
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He really shouldn’t have pushed her. Now it looks like she is on a mission to take care of everyone like him. Nice job
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Oh yes, he was only the first…
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Not what I was thinking at all. I thought she doing drugs. Very chilling and very well written, as usual. I read the first eight pages of your book on Amazon. Very captivating. A page turner, for sure. I can see this being made into a movie. You stand among political thriller greats as such Robert Ludlum, John La Carre, Tom Clancy and Frederick Forsyth. Congratulations on your book. I have no doubt that it will be a success.
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Thank you so much, very kind words and so lovely to hear. I do hope you get the chance to read more of it 🙂
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You’re welcome, Iain. I hope so too.
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Very skilful misdirection Iain.
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Thank you JS
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Ouch… it’s always the wet part of a murder that takes down the joy. 🙂 you really fooled me what she had been doing…
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You don’t appear to be the only one fooled Bjorn 😉
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Ah, Iain, you do like to hint at naughtiness then give us pure badness instead.
Cleverly done.
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Thank you CE – naughty, bad, everyone’s a winner!
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I wasnt sure you’d be able to keep a pg rating on this one, Iain but when it became clear it was violence and not sex, well, we all know our standards tend to be much lower. 😊nice surprise at the end and i thought of a subtitlefor you: Overdressed for murder! (Of course im sure someones already written that one!)
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Ha, yes I managed to keep my writing PG, only the reader’s mind makes it adult-only!! Nice subtitle 🙂
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It’s not exactly the predictable first time I was expecting, though even a murderer has to start somewhere.
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Indeed they do.
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you never fail to amaze. one of your best. 🙂
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Thank you, too kind 🙂
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Person with some dark thought. Getting an epiphany moment after killing someone!
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It’s a good time to have an epiphany
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Great story – great shock ending.
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Thank you Liz
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Excellent misdirect, Iain! This was great! What was she thinking… skirt and heels… silly murderess
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She’ll learn 😉 Thanks Dale.
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Of course. One learns best from one’s mistakes… 😉
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Ha! There’s so much anticipation over your first time, the reality’s often a bit of a let down. I’m glad it hasn’t put her off trying again, though, and maybe next time in some sort of ninja outfit.
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It’s like her origin story, with each success she will adapt and add a new weapon or piece of uniform 🙂
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Wellie boots and jeans next time – practice makes perfect!
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Good tip Keith, I’ll pass it on 😉
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I take it that she raped him, then killed him. These women murderers can be so devious.
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I hadn’t really had in mind exactly how she had done it, but devious, absolutely!
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Oh my goodness, awesome twist. I’d lose the heels for sure!
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Thank you Brenda. They’re just not practical are they? But sometimes you do want to look your best while at work 😉
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Great last line. You really shouldn’t wear heels to a body disposing. If she’s going to make a career of it, she’ll have to learn these things fast. P.S. Book was great. Intending to post review by the weekend
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She’s a quick learner 😉 . Really glad to hear you liked the book Michael, look forward to reading your review! Hope all is proceeding well with your own launch.
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Ooooo gosh clever twist. Indeed heels are totally impracticable
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Trainers next time 🙂
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Hmmm.. if she didn’t enjoy it, what motivates her?
Very intriguing!
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Thanks Dawn, she’ll give it another go and see if she gets a kick out of it next time!
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Such a clever twist – you turned the reader’s expectations upside down – victim to perpetrator so deftly. Well done.
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Thank you 🙂
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Oh wow, I loved it man. Makes you think, how many of the worst things that people have ever done were just chasing a fleeting high?
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Good question, I would guess quite a lot! Thanks Jacob.
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Oops that was quite a twist Iain! And congratulations on your new book, i am sure it will do very well 🙂
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Thank you Dahlia – do give it a read if you get the chance and let me know what you think!
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Dressed to kill – so to speak. It is not often we get a serial murderer in a mini skirt and heels. I expect that is her bait.
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It may well have played a part…
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A clever twist and a macabre finish. Excellent.
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Thank you Kristian
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Well done, Lain. That title was a real red herring. It wasn’t until the rock and the body bag that I knew you weren’t talking about what I was thinking about 🙂
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Funny, it appears everyone’s mind seems to work in a very similar way when reading this story! 🙂
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Isn’t that what you intended ? You did a masterful job of convincing us. . .
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Brilliant twist and perfectly executed – one of my favourites this week.
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PS ‘executed’ wasn’t supposed to be a pun, but let’s both pretend it was 🙂
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😉
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Thank you, very kind 🙂
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Very clever twist!
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Thank you Lisa 🙂
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Interesting take on her first time, i thought it was something else which shows how my mind works!!
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You and a few others it seems 😉
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The twist in the tale was unexpected.
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Thank you
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Surprise ending! What was her motive though?
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Good question!
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Drugs? Sex? No. Murder. And “Her First Time”, with plans for more.Good writing and great twist. Very clever with so few words. Masterful
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Thank you so much 🙂
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