IAIN KELLY

PRACTICE MAKES PERFECT

‘Man, all three of you couldn’t hit a barn door. Try again.’ Hank loaded a clay into the thrower. ‘Ready?’

‘Pull!’

The clay disc fired out over the field. Three shots fired off. The clay landed in one piece a hundred yards away.

‘Dammit, these guns is useless,’ whined Dwight. ‘How we expected to hit those itty-bitty things flying about anyway?’

The others yucked at Dwight’s outburst.

***

The smoke cleared round the classroom. It was eerily quiet and still as all the screaming and running died away.

They could hear the police arriving outside.

‘How many you get, Dwight?’ Hank asked, crouched behind the desk.

‘I think I got me four, including that stuck up Darcy,’ Dwight grinned. ‘Won’t see her sniggering behind my back in Maths anymore.’

The others yucked at Dwight’s outburst.


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31 responses to “PRACTICE MAKES PERFECT”

  1. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar

    Shit, that’s grim. Doesn’t sit well, makes me think dark thoughts, but is brilliant. Well done Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Exactly as it was designed to work, thank you.

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  2. visionarytrailblazin Avatar

    This was quite a twist. I agree that this was pretty interesting. Thanks for sharing it.

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  3. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    How does society deal with that. Guns and humanity just do not sit well together.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      They certainly do not. Thanks Michael.

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  4. Liz H Avatar

    Oh that one was dark. And spot on target.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Liz, dark and unfortunately real.

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      1. Liz H Avatar
  5. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    So dark, and so relevant unfortunately.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  6. Sascha Darlington Avatar

    Well, that escalated quickly. Nice balance between the two.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sascha, mass shootings have been escalating for a while now it seems…

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      1. Sascha Darlington Avatar

        Unfortunately.

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  7. Fandango Avatar

    Very grim, very sad.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yes it is, and very real.

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  8. Akshata Ram Avatar

    that was sinister. never saw that coming.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Gun culture in America, and elsewhere, is quite sinister I think.

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  9. Darnell Cureton Avatar

    Practice does make perfect, but wow! I didn’t see that coming, or the kids.
    Outstanding Iain, outstanding.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Darnell, I hope people will see the point I am trying to make here.

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  10. Tannille Avatar

    Chilling. You could expand and go deep with this one Iain.

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  11. ttay213 Avatar

    Wow, I was not expecting that. It was really funny, too! Awesome work.

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    1. ttay213 Avatar

      Looking at a few of the other comments- I wasn’t taking it as seriously as others were. It’s definitely something that is realistic nowadays.

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      1. Iain Kelly Avatar

        I think the humour is there for them, part of how they don’t fully comprehend the horror of what they are really doing.

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  12. James Avatar

    Yikes. I went skeet shooting with my Dad plenty of times when I was young. I never became a firearms hobbyist like he was, but my brother and son did.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I have never tried it, I would admit to being curious enough to give it a go.

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  13. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    Dwight shot a few students in school? That is why he was practicing? Scary, when people get angry and have access to a gun.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Perhaps not why he was practicing, but it was where it ended up taking him.

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  14. ForgivingConnects Avatar

    Iain, this is really really good. I love how you went outside the box to give attention to the shootings in our society. It was jarring and that can be so important. Thank you! You made me think. Blessings, Debbie
    ps – I’ll be out of town for the next two weeks at a peace retreat. Just wanted you to know in case you didn’t see me visiting your blog!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Debbie, enjoy your peaceful retreat!

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