IF YOU GO DOWN TO THE WOODS TODAY

He straightened from examining his ancient car engine as she approached. ‘Evening, ma’am. Can I help you?’

‘I’m a little lost. Is the road to Ashville around here?’

‘Sure is, you’re standing on it. You just follow it straight on ahead.’

Hilda looked perplexedly at the thick, untrammelled forest.

‘When you get to town tell the garage Bert needs a new carburettor.’

‘I sure will.’

‘And if you see my wife, ask her what’s taking her so long.’ The man smiled and turned back to his car.

Only then did she notice the gaping red hole where the back of his head should have been.


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Copyright Ted Strutz

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.


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130 responses to “IF YOU GO DOWN TO THE WOODS TODAY”

  1. And he seemed like such a nice man too

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    1. Perhaps he was… once.

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  2. Did not expect that last line Iain!

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    1. Thank you Di, good to know I can still catch a few people out!

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  3. A great piece, Iain. I liked the twist at the end.

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    1. Thank you Roberta, glad you liked it 🙂

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  4. Oooh not such an innocent story was it! I am thinking she got out of there pretty fast! 🙂

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    1. I would if I was her! Thank you

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  5. Ah! a ghost story. Nicely told.

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  6. Yikes! Didn’t expect spooky! Very cool

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    1. Thank you, good to hear from you 🙂

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  7. Wow! You brought me up short there! Good one.

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    1. Good to know I can still manage a surprise, thanks Sandra.

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  8. U ended it spooky.. That was very creative 👌👏

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  9. I guess he’s been waiting for that carburetor for a very long time… and I can see why the wife didn’t bring it back all of those years ago.

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    1. Yep, eventually he may give up waiting.

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  10. What a spooky twist in the end. Wasn’t expecting that at all. Well crafted tale, Iain.

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  11. Dear Iain,

    Apparently she sees dead people, but they don’t know they’re dead. Quite the unexpected twist at the end. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle, I wonder if it is only her who has seen him over the years…

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  12. So much to discover still: who killed him, where’s the road, where’s the wife? Nice

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  13. I love a horror story! Would love to read more if you build upon it.

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    1. Thank you, I will let you know!

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  14. Reminds me of “River” on Netflix, a cop drama where one detective cant get over the death of his partner and either hes hallucinating or she basically haunts him, but in the friendliest possible way. The back of her head is a bit gruesome, too.

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    1. Yes I remebered that one, had a hard time explaining to my mother what was going on!

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    2. Not one I’ve seen or heard of being without Netflix, but it sounds good!

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      1. If you have a strong stomach. I found it riveting.

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  15. Your title put me in mind of “The Teddy Bears’ Picnic,” which just goes to show you really shouldn’t assume anything 🙂

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    1. It was an intentional bit of misdirection 🙂

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      1. Worked like a charm 🙂

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  16. OH! So not where I thought that was going!! Loved it.

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    1. Thanks Dale, would love to know where you thought it was going!

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      1. Let’s Just say I was worried she could become lunch or a prisoner or something…

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  17. Excellent build up and great finale, Iain.
    Good one.

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  18. Whew… I was not expecting that twist at the end! I love it when a story is unpredictable.

    Great read!

    -Rachel

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    1. Thank you so much Rachel, glad you liked it

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  19. Excellent story, Iain. I guessed ‘ghost’, but you caught me with the extra turn that made him a murder victim of his wife.

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  20. When there are only ghosts to give directions, that might be a little too far off the beaten path.

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    1. She may have taken a wrong turn somewhere indeed

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  21. Even ghosts need a helping hand sometimes 🙂

    I wrote a similar story once, long ago: https://jagahdilmein.wordpress.com/2017/06/05/the-biker/

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  22. This was great, Iain. Fantastic twist at the end. I loved it.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena
    PS Your couple could well fit into my story.

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    1. Thanks Rowena – I noted we took a similar spooky direction this week!

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  23. If I was the wife I wouldn’t go back… maybe she put the bullet in his head.

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    1. I think she may have been involved!

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  24. Yeek! Poor guy, doomed to wait for his carburettor and wife forever. Maybe she was the one who yanked the carburettor out of the car and smashed the back of his head in with it…

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    1. Yes, I thought something like that may have happened. Whether he deserved it or not is the question…

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  25. Lordy! That took an unexpected turn. Reminds me of a Twilight Zone episode.

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  26. Aaaah! That was spooky. And great, I love it.

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  27. I love a good ghost story, and this was certainly one! Not all ghosts are malevolent, he was quite helpful and maybe a little confused as to his own reality. I’m sure the locals stay clear. Entertaining as always! 🙂

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    1. Thank you Brenda, yeah, he seems like a nice ghost guy! 🙂

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  28. Gosh! Hilda must have run like crazy after this ghost-encounter.
    Luckily, she now knows the way thanks to the friendly ghost!
    Car In Cyclone – Anita

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    1. True, he seems like a nice ghost!

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  29. Ooooh! Love the twist!

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    1. Thank you Vivian 🙂

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  30. it was an ending i didn’t expect. well done.

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    1. Good to know it was a surprise

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  31. A story that fits the picture, one of those ‘Tales of the Unexpected’ genre. Loved it.

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  32. Ahhhh she better run.
    What a fabulous piece, gripping last line… I want to read so much more. 🙂

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  33. A ghost! from a long time ago, I love it!

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  34. Number 10 this week!! I only scraped in at number 60 I think!

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    1. I’ll settle for top 10 🙂

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  35. Oh my, that gave me chills. Excellent work!

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  36. I’d be finding my way outta those woods!

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  37. I was expecting a picnic but this one had clever twist at the end instead.

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    1. Definitely no picnic! 🙂

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  38. A haunting tale for sure. Ghosts, stuck in time, travelling that road that is no longer a road. Guess that’s why we see them passing through objects? Nice one, Iain. and nice to see you, too, and I shall be checking your novel out too, although clicking on the graphic doesn’t take me there…

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    1. Thanks Kelvin, the links at the bottom of the post should take you to Amazon, or you can just search for it on there. Hope you like it, let me know what you think!

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  39. Didn’t expect that twist at the end. Great stuff.
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  40. I knew something was coming and I enjoyed waiting for it. Fantastic.

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    1. Thank you Margaret, glad you enjoyed 🙂

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  41. Oh, that last line! I wasn’t expecting that! Nearly finished A Justified State – will write a review – very good 🙂

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    1. Thanks Clare. Glad you are enjoying it, look forward to reading your thoughts 🙂

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  42. I knew there was something creepy going on, but that last line … Love how you build our unease wit the untrammelled woodland, but still sick us with a man with half a head missing! Lovely sleight of hand Iain

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  43. Zombie ghost story. Nice!

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  44. I guess he’ll be working on the damned thing for eternity. Good one, Iain.

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    1. Afraid so, thanks Russell

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