IAIN KELLY

INVITATION

‘Do come in,’ she beckoned to the people passing her gate.

They veered away from the old crone. When she was younger they had come more easily, enticed by her warm, youthful face.

Back then the community had been poorer. Beggars who lived on the streets and cripples returning from the war had gladly accepted her charity. She wanted to do some good, to end some of the suffering and misery she saw among the less well off.

Now the town was affluent, the poor cared for by society, it was harder to find anyone who would accept her invitation.

Teenagers laughed and joked, parents gave sympathetic smiles and averted their eyes, young children backed away in fear. Perhaps they could sense the truth. No one complained, the local policeman left her alone, even giving a polite greeting as he passed by on his regular beat.

Until she had become desperate.

Until the dark voices in her head pushed her to break her vow: Never take them unless they volunteered.

Until she had snatched the little girl.

Now the police entered the gate uninvited.

Now they would discover the graveyard all of her own making.


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Copyright Sue Vincent

This is a response to theΒ #writephoto Prompt –  Invitation curated over atΒ Sue Vincent’s Daily Echo. Click on the link to read other stories inspired by the image.

42 responses to “INVITATION”

  1. joyroses13 Avatar

    OH dear! What a way to start my morning! LOL!
    I did like it, and very glad that the police finally are on to her, good ending. πŸ™‚

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Just beware those strangers inviting you into their homes out of kindness! πŸ˜‰ Have a great day

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        Hahaha! Gee, thanks!

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  2. Reena Saxena Avatar

    I kind of suspected foul play πŸ™‚

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      You guessed it!

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  3. Sue Vincent Avatar

    ‘How does your garden grow?’… hmmm….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very good source of fertiliser…. πŸ˜‰

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      1. Sue Vincent Avatar

        Green too πŸ˜‰

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  4. quiall Avatar

    Enticing story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Don’t give in to her invite! πŸ˜‰

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      1. Pamela Read Avatar
        Pamela Read

        Fortunately she’s not my type!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  5. Hélène - Willow Poetry Avatar
    HΓ©lΓ¨ne – Willow Poetry

    Oh, the gates hide a sad secret. Excellent story Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Helene

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      1. Hélène - Willow Poetry Avatar
        HΓ©lΓ¨ne – Willow Poetry

        πŸ™‚

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  6. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Knowing you I sensed there would be an issue here. I love that gate though!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Isn’t it a lovely gate? I so wanted to write an uplifting story to go with it! Maybe next week! πŸ™‚

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  7. notestowomen Avatar

    Very well written horror story, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you πŸ™‚

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  8. willowdot21 Avatar

    Ian I just knew you’d twist this brilliantly ❀️

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much πŸ™‚

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      1. willowdot21 Avatar

        πŸ˜œπŸ€­πŸ’œπŸ’œ

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  9. trentpmcd Avatar

    Hmm, she should have been more careful about who she chose πŸ˜‰ From the description of her now, I’m sure nobody was surprised. Great story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’m sure all the neighbourhood gossips will be nodding and saying ‘I knew there was something odd about her!’

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  10. Michele Jones Avatar

    This is a great piece. I would pick up this book.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Michele

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  11. ForgivingConnects Avatar

    Wow, Iain, this is riveting! Your writing really pulled me in. πŸ™‚ Thank you.
    Blessings,
    Debbie

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Debbie

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  12. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Let’s hope the cops don’t end up in the graveyard too!

    Here’s another invitation Iain! I was tagged by Fandango to continue a story, which I just have. I now need someone to add a bit more and I thought of you! Please don’t feel obliged to do so.

    Finish the story – parts 1 to 3

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith I will try and check it out

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  13. Ennle Madresan Avatar
    Ennle Madresan

    Oh gosh, spooky-good!

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  14. patrickprinsloo Avatar

    I just love DIY stories. Great build up to the omnious ending.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  15. Dnyanada Kulkarni Avatar

    Wow…… You sure like dark stuff and I like to read that…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, glad you like it!

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  16. Kate | everywhere and nowhere Avatar

    a little on the dark and creepy side…but I like it ☺️

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Kate πŸ˜‰

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