CLOISTERED

~ Iain Kelly

The ridiculous habit made it difficult to clamber down the bush-covered arch into the cloister.

From there it was a sprint across the lawn to the door, where she knocked four times.

The door was opened. They paused at the gateway. Was this what they really wanted? Would the Lord be watching them?

No time to delay, it was now or never. Each of them de-robed, revealing modest everyday clothing.

With determined looks they stepped across the street.

This week the cinema was showing ‘Fifty Shades of Grey’ and the secret Carmelite Nuns Film Society of Rome had heard it featured a Christian storyline.

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Copyright Roger Bultot

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

For those not aware – many Carmelite nuns live within their nunnery and as part of their strict religious vows never venture out into the rest of the world. ‘Fifty Shades of Grey’ is a popular, preposterous erotic novel and film with a leading male character named Christian…

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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Published by Iain Kelly

39 year old writer, avid film viewer and book reader, employed in the media industry as a television editor.

114 thoughts on “CLOISTERED”

  2. Oh no! They are going to get the shock of their lives. (not because of the erotic parts, but just the inane story and acting) This was very funny, Iain.

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      8. And I told him something that I wanted to happen with the characters so don’t know what’s taking so long, I gave him an idea. LOL! 🙂
        No rush Iain! 🙂

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    1. Hey, so nice to hear from you and thank you for thinking of me! Unfortunately not able to find the time to do A-Z this year for various reasons, mainly family health related. I am using the time to get in a bit of writing of my 2nd novel, so not being lazy! Do check out my first book on Amazon if you get the chance – it’s called ‘A Justified State’. Writing the sequel now. Hope you are well and will pop over and see what you are up to for your A to Z this year 🙂

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  12. OOOH those poor nuns! I do believe they will be struck speechlesss!
    One movie that I have never seen and don’t have intentions too, but this story was quite creative and your last line was great!

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  16. What a fun story, Iain. Those poor nuns, I hope they leave the cinema running and screaming.
    I read somewhere that Fifty Shades is constructed in the ideal way with all the major plot points at the right place, and so I worked my way through volume 1– I did know what I was getting into. This is so bad on so many levels… yeagh. Cliché, cliché, cliché… and pretty boring.

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  17. LOL. I haven’t seen the movie and was under impressed with the book (only read the first one) but I would love to see the look on the nun’s faces in the theater, unless of course they knew EXACTLY what kind of story it was! Hoping all is okay with your family.

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  24. I can just picture the looks on the nuns faces when they realize what they’ve walked into… guffaws of laughter guaranteed to get me banned from the library (again!) ensue… ah, but it’s worth it! Loved it!

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  25. Thank for explaining the “Christian plot-line.” I love the idea of nuns sneaking out to see “50 Shades Of Grey,” but I’m completely ignorant of the details. That enhanced the humor. Good one.

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  36. Great story, Iain. I would love to be there to see their reactions when they discover that the movie isn’t at all what they thought. They’ll be turning fifty or more shades of red.

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  48. Ha ha ha! Not quite the christian storyline they were expecting I bet. I’ve not read or watched any of te fifty shades stuff myself – it just never drew my attention. It is very popular though.

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  49. The ending caught me by surprise! A delightful tale. 🙂

    Great to hear you’ve started the sequel to A Justified State, which I just finished reading last week. What a page-turner… I shall write a review soon!

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    1. Thank you so much for reading it and glad to hear you liked it! Look forward to reading your review and I will keep you updated on the next one – hoping sometime around the end of summer it will be ready 🙂

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