50/50

Todd cursed himself. He inched out further. The frame and glass creaked. He froze.

He peered down, trying to make out the room below. It definitely wasn’t Lacey’s bedroom.

She had told him the skylight on the left. Only now did he realise he didn’t know if that was left as he faced the house, or left if he was on the roof.

He had to pick one.

A light went on. Now Todd saw it was a kitchen. A figure looked up.

Todd stared into the raging eyes of Lacey’s father, just as he heard an ominous sound and the glass panel gave way.


overhead-window
Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.


‘STATE OF DENIAL’ PUBLISHES IN ONE WEEK

My second novel is released globally in paperback and on Amazon Kindle on Friday, 27th September. Watch the trailer here:

You can pre-order the Kindle version here: AMAZON.CO.UK     AMAZON.COM

90 responses to “50/50”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    At least he picked the girl right. Fun story, Iain

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  2. kzmcb Avatar

    You’re always so clever. Another great story, Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Too kind, thank you

      Like

  3. jenanita01 Avatar

    Really clever, Iain…

    Liked by 1 person

  4. ceayr Avatar

    Laughing.
    Is she worth it, I wonder…

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Aren’t they always?

      Liked by 1 person

  5. Colline Avatar

    Oh dear! Could not help but laugh. Good one!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Colline, glad you laughed!

      Like

  6. Tannille Avatar

    BUSTED!
    Fun read!

    Liked by 1 person

  7. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    Oh man. And what comes next, I wonder?

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A lot of apologising I expect

      Like

  8. trentpmcd Avatar

    oops. I hope she comes visit him in the hospital…

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Hopefully he and Dad aren’t in beds next to each other!

      Liked by 1 person

  9. bearmkwa Avatar
    bearmkwa

    Busted! Literally and figuratively! Loved it!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  10. joyroses13 Avatar

    OH dear, poor Todd! LOL! Hopefully Lacey’s Dad is a compassionate man, with a great sense of humor! 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      One day they may look back and laugh about it.

      Like

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Neel

      Like

  11. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Oops. I don’t think this is going to endear him to Lacey’s dad. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He has a lot of hard work ahead of him to make it up 🙂

      Like

  12. magickmermaid Avatar

    Super story! The course of true love never did run smoothly. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Not for poor Todd anyway! Thank you 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  13. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

    Oh shucks … 😉
    (this was very well done fun! I could ‘hear’ him creaking above there … not that I blame Lacey’s father … )

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – I think the father might see this as confirming his worst suspicions about Todd!

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

        Yep. … (and I have a slight feeling that the gal might end up being grounded … 😉 )

        Liked by 1 person

  14. pensitivity101 Avatar

    oops! Bet the father didn’t say ‘Thanks for dropping in’!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ah, a classic line – I’ve missed a trick there! 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. pensitivity101 Avatar

        ha! Good fun though Iain.

        Liked by 1 person

  15. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Yikes! Hope he has good insurance 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Janet 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  16. tedstrutz Avatar

    This is excellent, Iain. I could feel myself lying on the glass.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I hope you didn’t feel it start to give way…

      Like

  17. Girl in Niagara Avatar

    Ouch! Poor Todd. Hopefully he didn’t come crashing down into her father’s arms.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That would add insult to injury 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  18. Dale Avatar

    Poor bugger. So difficult to get to the girl when the dad doesn’t want.
    Methinks he won’t be visiting her again any time soon.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Certainly not through the skylight anyway 😉

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Dale Avatar

        Obviously not…

        Liked by 1 person

  19. plaridel Avatar

    ouch, he got some fixing up to do. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      In more ways than one!

      Liked by 1 person

  20. msjadeli Avatar

    Oh dear, he’s in the middle of it now.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Slap bang in the middle 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  21. draliman Avatar

    Falling through the skylight was probably a bit of a relief. Attempts to staunch the bleeding and whatnot will likely distract dad from his reasons for being there in the first place… 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That’s true, it may buy him some time! 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  22. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Not the way he expected to meet her parents! Nice one Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      At least he made a lasting impression! Thanks Keith

      Liked by 1 person

  23. Abhijit Ray Avatar

    Should have paid attention when direction was given. More so when you have an angry father to confront.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It couldn’t have worked out much worse!

      Like

  24. patriciaruthsusan Avatar

    A good story and well written, Iain. Uh, oh, now he’s in trou–ble. —- Suzanne

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Big time, thanks Suzanne 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  25. Fatima Fakier Avatar

    Now that’s a story to tell the grandkids. If he gets out of it in one piece, that is.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Fatima 🙂

      Like

  26. pennygadd51 Avatar

    Great piece of action, Iain, and a nice touch of humour.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Penny

      Liked by 1 person

  27. Liz Young Avatar

    That’s not going to end well.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Not for anyone.

      Like

  28. Woman walking Max Avatar

    I got the feeling early on that he was doomed to fail, not knowing which left to take. Better off with the girl next door ?

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Better off using the front door I think 😉

      Like

  29. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Oooooo this has great tension and drama. What happens? We’ll done

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  30. granonine Avatar

    Uh-oh. Creaking glass and a mad dad. Things can only grow worse!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      For Todd, I’m afraid so!

      Liked by 1 person

  31. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar

    Oh dear! Funny take on the story, classic bit of slapstick too!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

      Like

  32. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    I heard the sound of a double barrel shot gun being fired.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ouch, that takes it in a different direction!

      Like

  33. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    The ridiculous things we do for women, especially in our teenage years. Good one!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Was it worth it in the end is the question.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Nobbinmaug Avatar

        Sometimes. There are those women who are worth anything and everything. Sometimes we’re just dumb.

        Liked by 1 person

  34. Kelley Farrell Avatar

    Whoops. Maybe he can think of a creative lie at the very least. Great take on the prompt.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s a tough one to think of a convincing excuse! 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  35. gillyflower Avatar
    gillyflower

    Oh dear! He may have landed in the kitchen, but there’ll be no sugar in Todd’s coffee tonight!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ha, definitely not! 😉

      Liked by 1 person

  36. 4963andypop Avatar

    Laughed out loud. Great example of timing. We could all see the train wreck coming, but we couldn’t look away!😊

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  37. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    At least you will make a smashing first impression…

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      🙂 Nicely done

      Like

  38. Natasha Avatar
    Natasha

    Not the best way to greet the parent, but this was a riot!

    Hope he lands up in his good books, by hook or crook.

    Good to be back on your blog after aeons, Iain.

    Congratulations on the second book!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Good to hear from you Natasha and thank you! Hope you get the chance to enjoy the book 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  39. Akshata Ram Avatar

    Ouch this sounds bad, poor guy. Nice to read your post Ina, I havent been reading for quite a while

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Nice to hear from you Aks, good to have you back 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  40. Dawn M. Miller Avatar

    Ha! This made me smile.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Dawn 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  41. shaktikisharma Avatar

    Now that’s dangerous… He gonna get booked for breaking in!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      At the very least 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

Leave a comment

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.