50/50

Todd cursed himself. He inched out further. The frame and glass creaked. He froze.

He peered down, trying to make out the room below. It definitely wasn’t Lacey’s bedroom.

She had told him the skylight on the left. Only now did he realise he didn’t know if that was left as he faced the house, or left if he was on the roof.

He had to pick one.

A light went on. Now Todd saw it was a kitchen. A figure looked up.

Todd stared into the raging eyes of Lacey’s father, just as he heard an ominous sound and the glass panel gave way.


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Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.


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90 responses to “50/50”

  1. At least he picked the girl right. Fun story, Iain

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  2. You’re always so clever. Another great story, Iain.

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  3. Laughing.
    Is she worth it, I wonder…

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  4. Oh dear! Could not help but laugh. Good one!

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    1. Thank you Colline, glad you laughed!

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  5. Oh man. And what comes next, I wonder?

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    1. A lot of apologising I expect

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  6. oops. I hope she comes visit him in the hospital…

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    1. Hopefully he and Dad aren’t in beds next to each other!

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  7. Busted! Literally and figuratively! Loved it!

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  8. OH dear, poor Todd! LOL! Hopefully Lacey’s Dad is a compassionate man, with a great sense of humor! 🙂

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    1. One day they may look back and laugh about it.

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  9. Dear Iain,

    Oops. I don’t think this is going to endear him to Lacey’s dad. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. He has a lot of hard work ahead of him to make it up 🙂

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  10. Super story! The course of true love never did run smoothly. 🙂

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    1. Not for poor Todd anyway! Thank you 🙂

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  11. Oh shucks … 😉
    (this was very well done fun! I could ‘hear’ him creaking above there … not that I blame Lacey’s father … )

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    1. Thank you – I think the father might see this as confirming his worst suspicions about Todd!

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      1. Yep. … (and I have a slight feeling that the gal might end up being grounded … 😉 )

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  12. oops! Bet the father didn’t say ‘Thanks for dropping in’!

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    1. Ah, a classic line – I’ve missed a trick there! 🙂

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      1. ha! Good fun though Iain.

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  13. Yikes! Hope he has good insurance 🙂

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  14. This is excellent, Iain. I could feel myself lying on the glass.

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    1. I hope you didn’t feel it start to give way…

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  15. Ouch! Poor Todd. Hopefully he didn’t come crashing down into her father’s arms.

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    1. That would add insult to injury 🙂

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  16. Poor bugger. So difficult to get to the girl when the dad doesn’t want.
    Methinks he won’t be visiting her again any time soon.

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    1. Certainly not through the skylight anyway 😉

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      1. Obviously not…

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  17. ouch, he got some fixing up to do. 🙂

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  18. Oh dear, he’s in the middle of it now.

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    1. Slap bang in the middle 🙂

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  19. Falling through the skylight was probably a bit of a relief. Attempts to staunch the bleeding and whatnot will likely distract dad from his reasons for being there in the first place… 🙂

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    1. That’s true, it may buy him some time! 🙂

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  20. Not the way he expected to meet her parents! Nice one Iain.

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    1. At least he made a lasting impression! Thanks Keith

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  21. Should have paid attention when direction was given. More so when you have an angry father to confront.

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    1. It couldn’t have worked out much worse!

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  22. A good story and well written, Iain. Uh, oh, now he’s in trou–ble. —- Suzanne

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    1. Big time, thanks Suzanne 🙂

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  23. Now that’s a story to tell the grandkids. If he gets out of it in one piece, that is.

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  24. Great piece of action, Iain, and a nice touch of humour.

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  25. That’s not going to end well.

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  26. I got the feeling early on that he was doomed to fail, not knowing which left to take. Better off with the girl next door ?

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    1. Better off using the front door I think 😉

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  27. Oooooo this has great tension and drama. What happens? We’ll done

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  28. Uh-oh. Creaking glass and a mad dad. Things can only grow worse!

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    1. For Todd, I’m afraid so!

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  29. Oh dear! Funny take on the story, classic bit of slapstick too!

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  30. I heard the sound of a double barrel shot gun being fired.

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    1. Ouch, that takes it in a different direction!

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  31. The ridiculous things we do for women, especially in our teenage years. Good one!

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    1. Was it worth it in the end is the question.

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      1. Sometimes. There are those women who are worth anything and everything. Sometimes we’re just dumb.

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  32. Whoops. Maybe he can think of a creative lie at the very least. Great take on the prompt.

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    1. It’s a tough one to think of a convincing excuse! 🙂

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  33. Oh dear! He may have landed in the kitchen, but there’ll be no sugar in Todd’s coffee tonight!

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    1. Ha, definitely not! 😉

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  34. Laughed out loud. Great example of timing. We could all see the train wreck coming, but we couldn’t look away!😊

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  35. At least you will make a smashing first impression…

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  36. Not the best way to greet the parent, but this was a riot!

    Hope he lands up in his good books, by hook or crook.

    Good to be back on your blog after aeons, Iain.

    Congratulations on the second book!

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    1. Good to hear from you Natasha and thank you! Hope you get the chance to enjoy the book 🙂

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  37. Ouch this sounds bad, poor guy. Nice to read your post Ina, I havent been reading for quite a while

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    1. Nice to hear from you Aks, good to have you back 🙂

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  38. Now that’s dangerous… He gonna get booked for breaking in!

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