Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

50/50

Todd cursed himself. He inched out further. The frame and glass creaked. He froze.

He peered down, trying to make out the room below. It definitely wasn’t Lacey’s bedroom.

She had told him the skylight on the left. Only now did he realise he didn’t know if that was left as he faced the house, or left if he was on the roof.

He had to pick one.

A light went on. Now Todd saw it was a kitchen. A figure looked up.

Todd stared into the raging eyes of Lacey’s father, just as he heard an ominous sound and the glass panel gave way.

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Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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90 responses to “50/50”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    At least he picked the girl right. Fun story, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Neil

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  2. kzmcb Avatar
    kzmcb

    You’re always so clever. Another great story, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Too kind, thank you

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  3. jenanita01 Avatar
    jenanita01

    Really clever, Iain…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  4. jenanita01 Avatar
    jenanita01

    Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.

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  5. ceayr Avatar
    ceayr

    Laughing.
    Is she worth it, I wonder…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Aren’t they always?

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  6. Colline Avatar
    Colline

    Oh dear! Could not help but laugh. Good one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Colline, glad you laughed!

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  7. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    BUSTED!
    Fun read!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  8. J Hardy Carroll Avatar
    J Hardy Carroll

    Oh man. And what comes next, I wonder?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      A lot of apologising I expect

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  9. trentpmcd Avatar
    trentpmcd

    oops. I hope she comes visit him in the hospital…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Hopefully he and Dad aren’t in beds next to each other!

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  10. bearmkwa Avatar
    bearmkwa

    Busted! Literally and figuratively! Loved it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  11. joyroses13 Avatar
    joyroses13

    OH dear, poor Todd! LOL! Hopefully Lacey’s Dad is a compassionate man, with a great sense of humor! 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      One day they may look back and laugh about it.

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  12. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar
    neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

    Clever story, Kelly

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Neel

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  13. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    Oops. I don’t think this is going to endear him to Lacey’s dad. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He has a lot of hard work ahead of him to make it up 🙂

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  14. magickmermaid Avatar
    magickmermaid

    Super story! The course of true love never did run smoothly. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Not for poor Todd anyway! Thank you 🙂

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  15. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar
    Na’ama Yehuda

    Oh shucks … 😉
    (this was very well done fun! I could ‘hear’ him creaking above there … not that I blame Lacey’s father … )

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you – I think the father might see this as confirming his worst suspicions about Todd!

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      1. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar
        Na’ama Yehuda

        Yep. … (and I have a slight feeling that the gal might end up being grounded … 😉 )

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  16. pensitivity101 Avatar
    pensitivity101

    oops! Bet the father didn’t say ‘Thanks for dropping in’!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ah, a classic line – I’ve missed a trick there! 🙂

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      1. pensitivity101 Avatar
        pensitivity101

        ha! Good fun though Iain.

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  17. scr4pl80 Avatar
    scr4pl80

    Yikes! Hope he has good insurance 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Janet 🙂

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  18. tedstrutz Avatar
    tedstrutz

    This is excellent, Iain. I could feel myself lying on the glass.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I hope you didn’t feel it start to give way…

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  19. Girl in Niagara Avatar
    Girl in Niagara

    Ouch! Poor Todd. Hopefully he didn’t come crashing down into her father’s arms.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      That would add insult to injury 🙂

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  20. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Poor bugger. So difficult to get to the girl when the dad doesn’t want.
    Methinks he won’t be visiting her again any time soon.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Certainly not through the skylight anyway 😉

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      1. Dale Avatar
        Dale

        Obviously not…

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  21. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    ouch, he got some fixing up to do. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      In more ways than one!

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  22. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    Oh dear, he’s in the middle of it now.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Slap bang in the middle 🙂

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  23. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    Falling through the skylight was probably a bit of a relief. Attempts to staunch the bleeding and whatnot will likely distract dad from his reasons for being there in the first place… 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      That’s true, it may buy him some time! 🙂

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  24. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Not the way he expected to meet her parents! Nice one Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      At least he made a lasting impression! Thanks Keith

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  25. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    Should have paid attention when direction was given. More so when you have an angry father to confront.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It couldn’t have worked out much worse!

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  26. patriciaruthsusan Avatar
    patriciaruthsusan

    A good story and well written, Iain. Uh, oh, now he’s in trou–ble. —- Suzanne

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Big time, thanks Suzanne 🙂

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  27. Fatima Fakier Avatar
    Fatima Fakier

    Now that’s a story to tell the grandkids. If he gets out of it in one piece, that is.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Fatima 🙂

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  28. pennygadd51 Avatar
    pennygadd51

    Great piece of action, Iain, and a nice touch of humour.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Penny

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  29. Liz Young Avatar
    Liz Young

    That’s not going to end well.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Not for anyone.

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  30. Woman walking Max Avatar
    Woman walking Max

    I got the feeling early on that he was doomed to fail, not knowing which left to take. Better off with the girl next door ?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Better off using the front door I think 😉

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  31. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Oooooo this has great tension and drama. What happens? We’ll done

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks 🙂

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  32. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    Uh-oh. Creaking glass and a mad dad. Things can only grow worse!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      For Todd, I’m afraid so!

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  33. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar
    theministryofshrawleywalks

    Oh dear! Funny take on the story, classic bit of slapstick too!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  34. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    I heard the sound of a double barrel shot gun being fired.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ouch, that takes it in a different direction!

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  35. Nobbinmaug Avatar
    Nobbinmaug

    The ridiculous things we do for women, especially in our teenage years. Good one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Was it worth it in the end is the question.

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      1. Nobbinmaug Avatar
        Nobbinmaug

        Sometimes. There are those women who are worth anything and everything. Sometimes we’re just dumb.

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  36. Kelley Farrell Avatar
    Kelley Farrell

    Whoops. Maybe he can think of a creative lie at the very least. Great take on the prompt.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It’s a tough one to think of a convincing excuse! 🙂

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  37. gillyflower Avatar
    gillyflower

    Oh dear! He may have landed in the kitchen, but there’ll be no sugar in Todd’s coffee tonight!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ha, definitely not! 😉

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  38. 4963andypop Avatar
    4963andypop

    Laughed out loud. Great example of timing. We could all see the train wreck coming, but we couldn’t look away!😊

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  39. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    At least you will make a smashing first impression…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      🙂 Nicely done

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  40. Natasha Avatar
    Natasha

    Not the best way to greet the parent, but this was a riot!

    Hope he lands up in his good books, by hook or crook.

    Good to be back on your blog after aeons, Iain.

    Congratulations on the second book!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Good to hear from you Natasha and thank you! Hope you get the chance to enjoy the book 🙂

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  41. Akshata Ram Avatar
    Akshata Ram

    Ouch this sounds bad, poor guy. Nice to read your post Ina, I havent been reading for quite a while

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Nice to hear from you Aks, good to have you back 🙂

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  42. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    Ha! This made me smile.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Dawn 🙂

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  43. shaktikisharma Avatar
    shaktikisharma

    Now that’s dangerous… He gonna get booked for breaking in!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      At the very least 🙂

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      1. shaktikisharma Avatar
        shaktikisharma

        Yup

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