Christenson fell to his knees, his hands raised to the skies, his face a scream of agony.
‘Show yourself!’ he cried.
Outside the storm tore at the earth. Debris battered against the protective dome. Trees, buildings, animals – all tossed asunder.
Inside the palm trees were still, the climate pleasant. Only the constant howling noise broke through.
How could anyone believe? No one had faith anymore. It was the end of times and He was absent.
‘For our sake, show yourself!’ Christenson beseeched the heavens.
A dark shadow passed over the sky.
Christenson watched in horror as the giant hand reached down and the first panes were crushed.
Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).
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Dark and apocalyptic, Iain
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Thanks Neil
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A dark and vengeful god, with a cynical sense of humour.
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I like the idea that God would be amused by the struggles of humankind. Thanks Penny
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Dear Iain,
A perfect example of “be careful what you ask for.” 😉 Chilling and oddly funny at the same time. Sort of like Slim Pickins riding the bomb like a cowboy on a bucking bronco in “Dr. Strangelove.” https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3edi2Wkr5YI
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Ah, I love that movie Rochelle 😉
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Suspenseful and sad. And it make you think, be careful what you wish for.
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Absolutely, I’m sure any God would have a few questions to ask about how we humans have been behaving!
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Don’t tempt fate. I would love to know more about this giant, this world.
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Yes, be careful what you ask for. I don’t believe in a God, but if there is one, surely they can’t be happy with what we’ve been up to!?
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Yeah the odds aren’t great. I swing to the agonist middle and try to play it safe.
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Oh man. The dude is doomed. Good pacing here.
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Thank you – maybe it was all just a dream…
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He might be okay, maybe there’s no giant person attached to the giant hand?
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I believe that’s called ‘clutching at straws’ 😉
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I’m glad I didn’t read this while my pad was being battered by the storm last night!
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Pretty wild up here too. No sign of a giant hand though!
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What the hell… If it is raging outside of the dome, be glad you are inside…Why ask for such trouble?
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Some people are never happy! 😉
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LOL!
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Sometimes we need to be careful what we ask for. Good one, Iain.
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We certainly do. Thank you
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Sounds like a perfect idea for an episode of The Twilight Zone. Good story, Iain.
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Thank you
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A bit apocalyptic, Iain. Nicely done! 🙂
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Just a bit 😉
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Well, it was good writing. 🙂
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Which is why we need to build better and stronger domes, to keep gods out. They’ve been messing with us since the beginning of mythology. This is our world. We don’t need illegal immigrants coming down from the heavens.
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Yes (ignoring the fact that we didn’t originally belong inside the domes in the first place, we took them over and kicked out the natives!)
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Natives don’t know how to use domes properly.
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The hand of god, or perhaps a giant mechanical drone controlled from somewhere in the universe.
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Or just a Giant. Thanks Mike
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I suppose we should be careful what we ask for, aye? Great story Iain!
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Always! Thanks Russell
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Well he did ask! This was actually very graphic, and quite unnerving.
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Thanks Sandra. Unnerved is good 🙂
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I’m not sure that’s exactly what he had in mind 🙂
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No, God doesn’t do subtle.
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Puts the phrase ‘be careful what you ask for’ to shame. Great one!
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Thank you!
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The terror and desperation of the guy are beautifully described. He should better have stayed quiet though. I love the humorous horror of the ending.
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Thank you, I thought it quite amusing too! 😉
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Be careful what you pray for.
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Or who you pray to. Thanks Liz
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Apocalyptic! Good story
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Thanks Neel
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Be careful what you wish for, eh? You managed to evoke the end of the world in very few words – well done Iain. Cracking story
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Part of me – even as a non-believer – would quite like something like this to happen at the end 🙂
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It certainly would fill the places of worship – not for long of course
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Oooooo that giant hand… I so want to know more. Perhaps the little human was complaining too much.
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They do like a moan – I wouldn’t be surprised if any God was a bit fed up with them!
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At first glance I mistakenly read: Christendom fell to its knees, which would have been apocalyptic enough. 😊
I like you retributive God, busy destroying the world, but not too busy to lend a hand to this modern Noah, who I assume is a favorite.
But you twist the knife with the consequence of God’s answer –it means Christenson is no longer protected from the whirlwind.
Very Oedipal–consequences for pride–for the impertinence of demanding individual special treatment.
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Yep, basically God has had enough of the lot of us. I like your mis-reading, the name was supposed to give that hint.
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Be careful what you wish for – the End was inevitable. The dark shadows cast by some gigantic invading monster. Your story strikes fear into the world.
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Thank you James
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Wonderfully dramatic- I love the description of trees, buildings and animals being flung against the dome, I can imagine the man cowering inside. It could be a fire and brimstone sermon about man’s hubris !
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Thank you – it would be good if someone could come and have a word with our leaders anyway!
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Scary! Such vivid writing.
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Thank you
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Reminds me of Lot’s wife looking back at the destruction of Gomorrah. Maybe it’s worse to be left behind than to burn.
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Thanks Bjorn
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Be careful what you ask for.
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Thanks Dawn
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Be careful what you ask for. Maybe now is the time to a palm but I am guessing that he is fingered anyway.
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*time to read a palm*
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I agree with Laurie Bell – ooooooo! Spooky!
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Thanks Trish
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