GLISTENING WAVES

‘You never listen.’

Glisten. The sun dancing on the water.

‘You’re never there.’

Dare. The cold water round his ankles.

‘I’ve been having an affair.’

Stare. A line of rocks breaking the water in the distance.

‘The children will stay with me.’

Free. His body weightless in the water.

‘I want you out.’

Doubt. Arms and legs treading, tired.

‘It’s over.’

Drove her away. His head slips under the waves.

Listen, glisten.

The sun dancing on the empty water.


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Copyright Sue Vincent

This is a response to the #writephoto Prompt: Glisten curated over at Sue Vincent’s Daily Echo. Click on the link to read other stories inspired by the image.


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38 responses to “GLISTENING WAVES”

  1. This is very good, Iain. Very sad though.

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    1. Thank you Roberta, something about that lonely figure by the sea seems to be inspiring some sad reflection this week.

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      1. You’re welcome Iain

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  2. Hi Iain. A very clever take on the prompt. Well written.

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    1. Thank you Kim, hope you are well.

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      1. Everything fine with me. I hope it is with you too.

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  3. Cleverly and very effectively done, Iain. The assonance seems to catch the heartache.

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    1. Thank you Sue – I couldn’t get glisten / listen out my head, so just took it from there!

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      1. It worked perfectly 🙂

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  4. Oh that is sooo sad, but yet written so well! You can feel his emotions in your words. Very good!

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    1. Thank you so much, yeah I saw something sad in the photo prompt.

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      1. It is really interesting how pictures can bring out so many different thoughts. I love using them for stories, for they do inspire.

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  5. Wow, that’s a sad one.

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    1. Thanks Janet, hope you are keeping well.

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  6. Wow, this is something different from you Iain. It’s very effective.

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    1. Thank you Di, good to hear it worked.

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  7. A poignant piece indeed, and beautifully written Iain. Not your usual style and all the more refreshing for being so.

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  8. 😢 but of course beautiful piece…

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  9. A sad story so beautifully written ! 👌

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  10. Sad story, beautifully told.

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  11. Beautifully written. I could feel his sorrow.

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  12. That’s deep. Beautiful to read. Thank you for sharing.

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  13. this is beautifully depressing. 😉

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  14. So sad ! Well written

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  15. How to participate

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