HIDDEN GEM

The jagged edge of a smashed decorative glass hangs in the doorway. A gust catches it, sending it swinging into the wall. Another piece of blue shatters.

Progress through the dark house, flashlight highlights: furniture upturned, crockery smashed, cupboards ripped open.

Had they found it? Move upstairs, lift the floorboard. Still there, safe and sound. Sparkles in the torch beam: The Dauphin’s Sapphire.

A creak. The wind? Or a tread on the floorboard?

You fool, you led them straight to it.

Glimpse of a masked face, before thudding pain and darkness descends.

A final glint of blue, snatched away.


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Copyright Jean L Hayes

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above). Come on everyone, just wear a mask.

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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76 responses to “HIDDEN GEM”

  1. Great work, Iain. Atmosphere, tension and a denouement

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  2. Wow… a complete story in so few words…

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  3. Terrific pace, well maintained. Excellent.

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    1. Much appreciated Sandra

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  4. Great stuff Iain, what a fool!

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  5. Galloping pace, Iain, and clever thieves.

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    1. Thanks CE, Tony would be proud of them.

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  6. Ooooh! The atmosphere! The intrigue! The tension! The plot thickens and resolves. Very well-done!

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  7. Dear Iain,

    You kept me on the edge of my seat for a hundred word wild ride. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Loved how you built the tension. Inventive take on the photo prompt, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  9. Never, ever check the hiding place until the light of day when you are sure you are alone… Good one.

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    1. Good advice, too late for this one though!

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  10. Wow! Great writing

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      1. You’re welcome 😉

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  11. I’ve never read a hundred words as quickly! Absolutely brilliant Iain.

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    1. Too kind Keith, thank you very much!

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  12. Great take Iain. Fool indeed for leading them to it.

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  13. Great suspense, great ending.

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  14. I enjoyed the suspense and the twist at the end. I wonder if the owner got the sapphire in a similar manner.

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    1. True, they must have some reason for hiding it under the floorboards!

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  15. A lot of suspense in so few words! Great story!

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  16. Cue the spooky music, build to a crescendo, cut the lights!

    Great opening for a creepy movie 🙂

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  17. Spooky and well crafted. I kept yelling at him in my mind … oy. Nicely done!

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    1. If only he had heard you!

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      1. yeah. he had his ear-buds on … 😉

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  18. Great story! Fast-paced and atmospheric.

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  19. Iain good work. You wrote a whole chapter in 100 words! Alive with imagery and action!

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  20. at least, he acted like a professional. he only went for the jewel and kept him alive.

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    1. Amateur jewel thieves don’t last long in this business.

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  21. Iain! Another fantastic piece. Always so very captivating.
    Btw, I finished your series. What a great story. I loved it to the end. This is one where in ten years I will think of the characters and wonder how they are getting along. At least the ones who made it 😢. I will leave reviews for the last two books on Amazon.
    Thanks for writing such a great series. I look forward to the day when I walk into Barnes and Noble and there, by the front door, is a book tree featuring Iain Kelly!!!

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    1. Wow, you read them quick! I’m a long way from a front door display in a book store, but I like the dream 🙂 Thanks so much for reading and so pleased you enjoyed them, and look forward to your reviews, they really do make a difference.Hope you’re having a great day! 🙂

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      1. I read them quick if they compel me to do so. Yours did!

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  22. I like how you got the dolphin (dauphin) in there! Very evocative.

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    1. Thank you Paula – I’m not sure how many people have made the connection, but I liked it! 🙂

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  23. Oh my no…beautifully told…love this tale.

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  24. I want! Maybe they can lead me to it? I can see this as a movie!

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    1. Thanks so much, unfortunately they slipped my tail, so I have no idea where it’s gone…

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  25. A piece of action packed writing. As is always the case, anything of great value attracts the thugs of society.

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    1. Thanks James, much appreciated.

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  26. A tense one. Moves quickly. Enjoyable reading Iain. Good one.

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  27. Always wait a couple of days before going back to check, that’s my motto.
    I like the way you wrote this!

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    1. Your motto? Are you a jewel thief in your spare time?!

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  28. Oh, dear, that did not end well.

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    1. No, indeed. Thanks Bill

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  29. Incredible how you managed to get us captivated in 100 words.
    BRAVO !!! Excellent story this week, Lain.
    Be Safe … Isadora 😎

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  30. Ooooo dramatic. Sounds like they found the prize they were searching for! Great tension in this.

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  31. Fantastic! A complete thriller in 100 words, very well done.

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  32. This reminds me of the old Humphry Bogart noir movies. I love it.

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    1. Excellent, love a good bit of Bogart!

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  33. A small gem of a story! Great work.

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  34. I enjoyed reading this Iain

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