DELIRIOUS

I follow her into the house.

I grip the axe tightly with both hands.

The door bangs behind me and the cold night air evaporates.

It is claustrophobic and dusty and dark. With each step, old floorboards creak.

I hear the laughter of a small child. It sounds like my Jasmine, dead these last ten years.

A flash of bridal-white dress. A floating veil. I turn and look.

She rushes towards me. I swing the axe.

‘My darling,’ she cries, before the heavy metal blade slices through her jugular.

Blood sprays everywhere.

This time I prey she stays dead.


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Copyright Ted Strutz

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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106 responses to “DELIRIOUS”

    1. That was the reaction I was looking for 🙂

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  1. Intriguing tale! Was it a spirit or living bride? And did that liberate Jasmine?

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    1. Many questions. Thanks Reena

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  2. Gruesome ghouly one, Iain. Was the misspelling of pray deliberate?

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    1. I’m going to say subconsciously deliberate. Thanks Neil

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  3. Bloody tale. Spine tinglingly good!

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    1. Thank you Trish 🙂

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    1. Thank you Shweta 🙂

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  4. Dear Iain,

    It seems Ted’s photo has brought out the ghosties this week. 😉 Creep-tastic story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. It’s a great prompt. Thanks Rochelle, hope you enjoyed your well=earned break 🙂

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  5. Intriguing. The bridal flash was inspirational.

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    1. Thank you Sandra, much appreciated.

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  6. So good, Iain. Love the feel that this is an on-going “problem”… even if we don’t know the why.

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    1. Thank you Dale, he does seem to know what he’s doing, as though he’s had plenty of practice.

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      1. So interesting…

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  7. I hate it when they don’t stay dead. 😀
    Gripping story.

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    1. Pesky, those ghosts that keep hanging around 🙂

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  8. Wow! Good and creepy.

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  9. Ouch! That was graphic! And well-told. The child’s laugh was a nice touch.

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  10. She was for real?
    Real blood?
    Terrible to stay with such memories and experiences…

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    1. Or all in his head? An innocent victim? I’ve created more questions than answers!

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  11. Wow. Didn’t expect that end. Nicely done. Hopefully this isn’t an eternal loop.

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    1. Thank you Michele – he does seem to be a bit stuck.

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  12. I’m not sure what happened here – did he kill both bride and child ten years ago?

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    1. It’s one possibility. You can decide.

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  13. Creepy tale and the last line tells me that he’s been there before. It reminds me of that Star Trek: TNG episode when they were caught in a loop.

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    1. I haven’t seen much Star Trek, but he could have a space age stun gun instead of an axe in a future episode 🙂

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  14. Horror story, indeed. How many times had he killed her before? What a terrible way to live!

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    1. Perhaps never, perhaps lots, perhaps it’s all in his head, perhaps he kills a different woman each time. Could go a few ways. Thanks Linda.

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  15. Gripping tale.
    PS: In the last line shouldn’t prey be pray?

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    1. It should, but as Neil pointed out, it kind of adds something to it worth the double meaning 🙂

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  16. I still have goose bumps. Wonderful creepy tale. Hope he’ll finally have some peace.

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    1. Thanks Brenda – but I don’t fancy his chances! 😉

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  17. Chilling tale. Made me think for a moment about “Kill Bill” and the bridal massacre. ~Dora

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  18. You did this horror story up right. Between you and Sandra, I’m already seeing a trend. Ted gave us a good one to use for the genre 🙂

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    1. Yep, I was aiming for a good old fashioned bit of gory horror 🙂

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    1. Going all out this week! 🙂

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  19. Who’s really the prey in this story? They seem to be hunting each other.

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  20. devilish! might want to change prey to pray though.

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    1. Thank you. Might, but might not – see the earlier comments! 😉

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  21. Oh my gosh!!! I kept telling myself it wasn’t as it seemed, he wouldn’t hurt her that you would have a twist! But……!

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    1. Nope, just a full on bit of horror 😉

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      1. Haha! Just when I thought to know what to expect from you!

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        1. Yes, I don’t do horror and gore much, but it’s nice to try once in a while 🙂

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          1. Always good to branch out 🙂 even if it shocks your readers! LOL!

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    1. I was going for a bit of full on gory horror 🙂

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      1. Excellent, I can read it but couldn’t watch it.

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        1. Not a fan of horror films either!

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          1. me neither, Mrs T watched Hostel which I bought for a fiver in Tescos years ago, we had to give it away it was so awful

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  22. Frightening – Like watching a scary movies with ears covered but eyes wide open – I was waiting for the ghost child to appear, but glad she didn’t. Well done.

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    1. She hasn’t appeared…yet 😉

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  23. feels like a Halloween movie. don’t know if i can sleep well tonight. 🙂

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    1. Ha, hope I haven’t given you nightmares!

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  24. Well, the last line kind of made me forgive him!

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    1. It does seem like he’s been through a lot 🙂

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  25. Great atmosphere. Love the contrast of “‘My darling,’ she cries, before the heavy metal blade slices through her jugular.”

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  26. Crumbs! A previous failed attempt? A ghost hunter? He seems quite practised at this task anyway!

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    1. Very adept with an axe – you have to wonder why?!

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  27. Oooooooo great twist, Iain… good and evil twist and dance in the shadows… but which is which?

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    1. Maybe there is no good on either side!

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  28. I feel she is going to haunt him…again.

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    1. And again. Thank you 🙂

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  29. Wow, a hundred words of horror! Absolutely brilliant Iain.

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    1. Oh definitely! Thanks Danny.

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  30. ooh, what a shocker! Love a gory take on the prompt, this was great.

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    1. Thank you Siobhan, glad you liked it 🙂

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  31. Super story, with a great and thought-provoking twist. There was an echo of CE Ayr in the use of short staccato sentences (but only an echo – the style was all your own)

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    1. Oh yes, this was firmly in CE territory this one 🙂

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  32. I was on the edge of my seat as I read this, Iain. YIKES … I hope that did the trick since blood was everywhere. Next time, perhaps, a stake through the heart. 😳
    Have a wonderful day … Be Safe
    Isadora 😎

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    1. He may have to try a new tactic. Thanks for the suggestion 🙂

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  33. A story befitting the prompt indeed. Prey works quite well with the story 😉

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    1. A happy mistake 🙂

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  34. Wow! I love a good thriller! That last line was brilliant 😊

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    1. Thank you so much Sue 🙂

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  35. Wow! Talk about having a bad day …

    I went a similar route on this one, too. Lots of good stuff in there, Iain. Very “cutting” edge. 😀

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  36. Excellent, Iain. The story does intrigue with wonder of the backstory. I like the visual structure and layout. Well done.

    “This time I prey she stays dead.” Indeed.

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    1. Thanks Bill, much appreciated.

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  37. Very creepy. How many times has he tried to get rid of her?

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    1. I’m not even sure he’s still counting 😉

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  38. Aaaaaaaahhhhhhh! Wow, what a short story. And this time she “stays” dead. Super creepy.

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    1. Thank you – just the reaction I was looking for! 🙂

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      1. Don’t you love it when someone reacts exactly the way you had envisioned?

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        1. I do – I wish it happened more often! 🙂

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          1. I guess you need the right followers! I’ll stop back more often.

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  39. I doubt she will leave him alone now.. next time she will be even more haunting

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    1. It’s developing into an eternal battle I feel.

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  40. Chilling tale, the mood inside the house was claustrophobic and airless. Made me think of vampires – perhaps she needed a stake through the heart ?

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    1. A change of tactic maybe what he needs!

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  41. Very atmospheric, Iain, I felt as if I was watching it happen!

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