IAIN KELLY

BURN OUT

The people burn. Bright flames of white heat in the darkness.

They are everywhere, surrounding him, closing in.

He shrinks back, covering his face with his hands, cowering in the depths of his own black mind.

Make them stop. Make them stop.

Faces crowd him. Searing orbs. Skulls with eyes of deep black emptiness.

They screech at him. Urging him to do it.

They will only leave his nightmares if he does what they ask.

His resistance falters. He screams back.

He looks at the scared mother and child huddled in the corner.

‘I’m sorry.’

He drops the match into the pool of petrol.


Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more detailsย HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above). I hope everyone is coping with the new WordPress editor. I’m finding it quite frustrating, but getting there!

To read stories of 100 words based on this weekโ€™s prompt, visit HERE.

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84 responses to “BURN OUT”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Being sorry is some mark of redemption

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Neil. Alas I fear, not enough.

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  2. quiall Avatar

    WOW . . . I did not see that coming. OMG! I want it to be only in his mind.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Some of it is only in his mind, alas, not all of it. Thanks for reading ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    Powerful imagery,

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  4. Rowena Avatar

    Yikes, a reminder of some of the impossible choices people are sometimes called to make. Quite chilling.
    I hate the block editor and have actively avoided it until I was forced to cross the divide. I might just be keeping my posts very simple with one photo until I find the time to nut it out. Meanwhile I’ll be singing If I can Turn Back Time with a lot of other bloggers.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      The block editor is a big change. I can see a couple of advantages, but mainly drawbacks so far. Just pleased I managed to get my post out successfully this morning! Thanks Rowena, hope you are well.

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      1. Rowena Avatar

        I agree with you about just getting the posts out. It was more of an issue with my Weekend Coffee Share post yesterday, which has a range of topics and usually has quite a few photos throughout. Just keeping it all very Simple Simon at the moment.
        Hope you’re keeping well and safe atm. Melbourne is in lock down but we’re good but treading cautiously here. Trying to focus on enjoying the outdoors and went for a lovely beach walk today.
        Best wishes,
        Rowena

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  5. ceayr Avatar

    Cheese on toast last night, Iain?
    Jings, that was dark and fearsome!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s not been a great few days so I’m taking it out on my writing.

      Like

  6. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Such a deep dark story…well told. Despite the heat of the fire, it made me shiver.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Rochelle. Next week, a comedy! ๐Ÿ˜‰

      Liked by 1 person

  7. Michele Jones Avatar

    Oh, no. How scary to be troubled by such demons. The end is very sad.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Michele. Much like a lot of things in the world to day, burning it down seems to be the only conclusion people reach.

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  8. Tina Stewart Brakebill Avatar

    disturbing! I like it ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Tina ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  9. Beck Avatar

    How do you pack so much using so few words! Itโ€™s a giftโ€” Bravo!!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks you so much Beck. Hope you are well ๐Ÿ™‚

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  10. Shweta Suresh Avatar

    Such a dark one. Great take on the prompt, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Shweta

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  11. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    Rather like the Buddhist monk. Scary stuff.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yes, for the modern generation.

      Like

  12. notestowomen Avatar

    Very well told story, Iain. The imagery/the description is so palpable.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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      1. notestowomen Avatar

        You’re welcome ๐Ÿ™‚

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  13. pensitivity101 Avatar

    OMG Iain. Another great take.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Di, good reaction!

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  14. Sandra Avatar

    Wow, that was savage! I wasn’t expecting that.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yeah, it’s a dark place this week. Thanks Sandra

      Like

  15. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar

    I love the pace of this and how you portray his confused thoughts in so few words. Kudos.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thakns Alicia

      Like

  16. Dora Avatar

    This so nicely constructed, a descent into the mind of evil and madness. The imagery resonates with desperation, fear (the cowering mother and child), and depravity. Also shows how lame “I’m sorry” can be.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Dora, much appreciated. Yep, it’s easy to say ‘I’m sorry’ without meaning it at all.

      Liked by 1 person

  17. plaridel Avatar

    obviously burned out, he needed professional help. too late now.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Beyond help I’m afraid.

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  18. msjadeli Avatar

    It’s why they call firebugs maniacs. VERY difficult to treat. He needs to be welded into a cell, alone, while he gets his treatment. Excellent telling, Iain.

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    1. Stine Writing Avatar

      At the school where I used to work we had only a few fire starters. One little girl burnt the whole house down. It is a sad thing because it doesn’t go away.

      Liked by 2 people

    2. Iain Kelly Avatar
      1. msjadeli Avatar

        You’re welcome.

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  19. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    Dark and terrifying. I hope there comes a day when we can treat people for this kind of illness.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      We can, if they have enough money to get the help they need.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Nobbinmaug Avatar

        Excellent point! It always comes down to money.

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  20. pennygadd51 Avatar

    Grim and vivid. What horrors had your protagonist witnessed to drive him to such behaviour?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That back story may be even more horrific than his final act. Thanks Penny.

      Like

  21. Bill Avatar

    Wow. Indeed those inner demons bring out the dark side of many. Well told, Iain.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Bill, much appreciated.

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      1. Bill Avatar

        You’re welcome, Iain.

        Liked by 1 person

  22. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar

    Wow! Intense stuff, “searing orbs” I love, brilliant stuff Iain

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very kind, thank you.

      Like

  23. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    Intensely written. The short sentences and fragments give the story a real energy.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  24. Stine Writing Avatar

    Wow, that was pretty intense. The poor guy is probably hallucinating and his wife and child will find him and never know why he did it.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He’s definitely not in the real world, that’s for sure. Thanks ๐Ÿ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

  25. justjoyfulness Avatar

    That was dark and powerful Iain. Probably, it’s happening somewhere too. Sad times we live in.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yep, many people are going through a lot of trauma and many are getting no help.

      Like

  26. draliman Avatar

    A chilling peek into a disturbed mind.

    Liked by 1 person

  27. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    A dark tale with a killer last line. Wow!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith. Maybe a bit too dark this week!

      Liked by 1 person

  28. Liz Young Avatar

    A real horror story.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  29. doodletllc Avatar

    Every word can be savored in this tale…what an outstanding piece of writing. Wow!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Too kind, but thanks you!

      Like

  30. Danny James Avatar

    Goes out in a flame I guess. Glory, not so much!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ha, yeah, not so much! Thanks Danny.

      Like

  31. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    Powerful imagery and prose. A chilling tale incredibly well written, Iain!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Brenda

      Like

  32. granonine Avatar

    Oh, Iain! This is too terrible! What an awful scene, hard to understand–especially when your tortured character doesn’t seem to want to do it!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Linda – I think it is hard to understand how anyone could take a life like this – and yet it does happen.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. granonine Avatar

        I know. And it’s appalling. Man’s inhumanity toward man knows no boundaries.

        Liked by 1 person

  33. Tannille Avatar

    Wow, this story leaves a lingering icky feeling. Well done!

    Liked by 1 person

  34. Tina Stewart Brakebill Avatar

    Wow. Thatโ€™s powerful. And disturbing. Nice job.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  35. siobhan1967 Avatar

    Lord, that was a dark one! To be gripped by madness like that must be terrifying.And with such tragic results too. Spine-chilling.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  36. Laurie Bell Avatar

    OMG how horrible. A man with terrible demons. Well written

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Laurie

      Like

  37. subroto Avatar

    Really dark this time, a sacrifice to appease his demons. Nicely done.

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  38. Sascha Darlington Avatar

    Whooosh! So dark. Way to go…..I retreated just a speck from going that dark but it was a temptation. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yeah, I just went with it this week!

      Like

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