BABYLONIA DENIED

The sat nav assured him he was still on the best route.

The straight road seemed to roll on endlessly. Looming trees hemmed him in on either side.

‘In fifty yards, take the left turn onto the B436, Babylon Street.’

Babylon Street? He had never heard of that one. Named after the ancient city, perhaps?

He peered through the gloom trying to see the turn, but there was no sign of it.

‘Re-routing. Carry on for the next eternity.’

He looked at the screen. What was that?

Ahead the dark red sky seemed to open up and a glowing light appeared. He hit the brakes. Nothing happened. The car swept him onwards, into the shining.

Copyright Fleur Lind

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read more stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

‘The Barra Boy’ is available now. You can find all the information for getting a copy HERE.

85 responses to “BABYLONIA DENIED”

    1. Cool and mysterious!!

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  1. Lovely, Iain. I always knew those damn things were the devil’s work

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    1. Thanks Neil, I have to admit to being overly relient on them now. I should get back to reading road maps!

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  2. Oooh! Sci-fi at its most intriguing

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      1. You’re welcome

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  3. Dear Iain,

    This seems the beginning of a nightmare or, possibly, an adventure. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Tough to avoid the pull of the nav, but your character seems to be in for more than a bumpy sideroad!

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    1. The nav gets very angry if you ignore it!

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  5. Those devices can take you anywhere.
    When Apple Maps came out (they banned Google Maps), Apple Maps was taking people into the outback. The situation was becoming dangerous. The police weren’t happy.

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    1. There are many stories like this, I think things have improved a little now, but you still here of the odd strange turn!

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  6. Oops, this can’t be good…. Kind of funny, the other commenters seem to take this as a sci-fi adventure. I think the MC died and is on his last, eternal journey…

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    1. Yes, I think you could read it either way. Thanks Trent

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  7. […] an email notice that a very brilliant writer named Iain Kelly had published a 100-word story called Babylonia Denied. I didn’t read the story before writing this one but obviously the title inspired […]

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  8. Okay. You pulled me back in.

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    1. Great to see you back James, hope you have been/are well!

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  9. I just knew that with this picture someone was going to write a “rapture” story. I was tempted myself, but the path to intention, and all that. Great story,Lain! Have a great week!

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    1. Thank you! Hope your week is great too!

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  10. Can’t imagine driving for an eternity!
    Babylon Street is intriguing.
    UFO has done its work 🙂

    Mine also has one.

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  11. Great story! Off to update my sat nav!

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    1. Just be careful out there! 😉

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  12. I always thought satnavs were cursed, now I know for sure. Great story, Ian.

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    1. Thanks Mason, hope you are well!

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      1. You’re welcome. I had a tough few trials with my writing last year. But I’m better now thanks. Hope you’re well too!

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  13. The start of a wild adventure I’m sure!

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    1. Definitely something interesting ahead.

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  14. Ah yes, those doggone electronic nags! 😀
    Ronda

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    1. They appear to be universally disliked! Thanks Ronda

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  15. Aha! We had similar thoughts about this image.

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    1. It does lend itself to such ideas.

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  16. Your words capture the mood of the prompt with force. Your last word is particularly telling.

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    1. Thank you Penny, much appreciated.

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  17. Oh, what a great beginning for a new book!

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    1. Thanks Linda, I shall bear that in mind!

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  18. Seems like he is navigating the star now. But is he alive?

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    1. Follow the sat nav to find out!

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  19. Should be an interesting future.

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    1. Not your everyday future for sure.

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  20. Sounds like a frightening nightmare — if he’s lucky! You captured the terror well, Iain.

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  21. Woooo I like the sound of this! There has to be a part 2…
    Great take on the prompt, well done 🙂

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  22. It seems your sat nav is possessed, so will he be soon! Nice one, Iain.

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  23. Well done, Iain. Exactly why I prefer not to drive at night. When things go wrong, it is the worst of times.
    My mixed relationship with earthbound navigation systems includes being led astray and getting saved from being “lost” (as a former USAF navigator, I never admit that. It’s called “temporarily disoriented”). Recalculating. 🙂

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    1. Thanks Bill, I can see why your precious employment would lead to some embarrassment!!

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  24. it looks like he’s having a bad dream. he has to wake up quick. 🙂

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    1. Let’s hope that’s all it is!

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  25. The nav that leads you astray. I knew it would happen sooner or later. Mysterious, and possibly adventurous, story! I like to fuss about the technology, but I can’t read a road map to save my life.

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    1. It easier to follow without stopping the car to look at a map, one advantage at least!

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  26. Sounds like my GPS. Good luck to him.

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  27. I love a bit of Sci-fi 🙂

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  28. That photo basically begged for it, eh? 🙂 Fun one!

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  29. Hoo Ian spooky. Love the foreboding last sentence. Wishing you a restful weekend.

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  30. The planet has been taken over by …
    Great story.

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  31. Oooooooo spooky ! I love it. The satnav… and a mysterious journey he can’t escape from. Could be the start of a larger tale. Fabulous idea.

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  32. I thought my GPS was bad. It’s tried to lead me onto an offramp but has never opened the sky. Nice take.

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  33. Haha … he should have known when he hadn’t heard of the road and was directed on to eternity. Nice one!

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  34. Heheheh, I love this. The sat nav from hell. I know why I don’t rely on these things. 😂

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  35. Good one. Very mysterious. Blame it on the navigation system!

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