IAIN KELLY

ESCAPE

Labuki’s eyes adjusted to the dark room as the door closed behind her. She could smell dirt and dust. She felt the cold cement walls and slowly edged around the new space.

Her foot hit a round, hard object on the floor. Using her hands she felt the circular object. A handle protruded from the top of it. A traditional hand mill, she thought. Was she now expected to make food for her captors?

She picked up the heavy lid of the mill, she handled the wooden stick used for turning it, she beat the stick into her palm. Now she had the means to fight back.

Labuki crouched waiting for the door to open again.


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© Shaktiki Sharma

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE).  The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above, thanks to Sandra for the photo this week).

For more stories based on this prompt, visit HERE.

61 responses to “ESCAPE”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Strong action piece, Iain

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Neil.

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  2. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    If they’re expecting bread they could be wrong.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 3 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I think they’ll get more than they bargained for! Thanks Rochelle.

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  3. Sandra Avatar

    Resourceful and spirited. My kind of heroine. Nice one, Iain.

    Liked by 3 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra.

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  4. […] via ESCAPE — Iain Kelly […]

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  5. Claire Fuller Avatar

    I like a resourceful woman in a story. Nicely told.

    Liked by 3 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Claire.

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  6. Dahlia Avatar

    Way to go girl! Even I am waiting for the captors to open the door 😀

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A lot of love for the heroine in this, it’s nice that people are responding to a strong female character. Thanks for reading – and I too can’t wait for the door to open 🙂

      Liked by 3 people

      1. Dahlia Avatar

        😀

        Liked by 1 person

  7. ceayr Avatar

    No way I am going to disagree with all the ladies above!
    Excellent piece, credible character.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Quite right, always best to agree with those who know best! Many thanks.

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  8. shehannemoore Avatar

    Goon on Labuki. Bring it on girl I say. Another great piece Iain.

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  9. Caerlynn Nash Avatar
    Caerlynn Nash

    Tough lady. Let’s hope she wins out… and gets out. Well done.

    Liked by 3 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I get the feeling she will be okay… Many thanks.

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  10. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    It would indeed make a hell of a bludgeon. Nicely tense.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That’s what I thought when I saw it. Funny how the mind works… 🙂

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  11. Morgan Avatar

    OOOO Good for her (mischievous grin!) Nice twist on the prompt.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Morgan, glad you liked it.

      Liked by 1 person

  12. Clare Hempstead Avatar

    We are all rooting for her!

    Liked by 3 people

  13. Lynn Love Avatar

    Oh, my there’s going to be some serious trouble! A great take on the picture, Iain – seeing that handle as a potential weapon was a real brainwave. Great stuff and let’s hope she makes it out 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Lynn. Have to confess to struggling with this prompt so it’s nice that you like the direction I ended up going in!

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        I think a few people felt the same, but the initial obscurity of the objects in the room just meant we’ve written a lot of different stories this week, which is great.
        I loved your take on it – nicely done 🙂

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  14. Shawna Avatar

    I like this very much.

    Liked by 2 people

  15. nonsmokingladybug Avatar

    I am glad she is fighting back. I love this.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Many thanks.

      Liked by 1 person

  16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I really hope she could fight back and win too… great imagination.

    Liked by 2 people

  17. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    This is one resourceful lady. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      She sure is. Thanks Michael.

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  18. S.M.Peterson Avatar

    Nice! I can totally picture her crouching down all tense. Great work!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Many thanks.

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  19. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    Nice hope she escapes!

    Liked by 1 person

  20. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    Great action writing, Iain, I love it. And Labuki is tough, I like her. Never give up.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      She’s proving a very popular character! Many thanks.

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  21. wmqcolby Avatar

    I hope it’s not the room of the Giant from Jack and the Beanstalk because she won’t be grinding flour to make the bread!
    Terrifically written Iain. I like your descriptives and execution.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Many thanks, who knows where the bodies may end up!

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  22. creatingahome Avatar

    She’s not going down without a fight.
    🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  23. aliciajamtaas Avatar

    Oh! Her captors are in for a big surprise. Go team Labuki!

    Liked by 2 people

  24. seekeroftruthweb Avatar

    It’s the scene right before the action begins! If it were on TV, my mom would be shouting at the TV, “Hit him again!”

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  25. draliman Avatar

    One man’s mill is another woman’s blunt instrument… I think lunch is going to be punchier than they’re expecting. Great story!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ha, indeed. Many thanks.

      Liked by 1 person

  26. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Good for her. Fight back hard! I hope she succeeds.

    Liked by 2 people

  27. Melinda Kucsera Avatar

    I love your take. Are those hand mills? I couldn’t figure out what they were.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yeah, I think so. Took me a while to figure it out and I struggled to think of a story. Glad you liked it 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Melinda Kucsera Avatar

        It’s brilliant!

        Liked by 1 person

  28. spicedmullings Avatar

    Guess our thoughts flowed in the same lines!
    Hi5

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      🙂 Hi5

      Liked by 1 person

  29. Sonny Price Avatar

    I almost feel sorry for her captors! But not really. 🙂 Great story Iain

    Liked by 2 people

  30. Carol Cameleon Avatar

    Ooh good plot. Makes me want the door to open so the captors can get their comeuppance (I hope!). Love how you open the story. #FridayFictioneers

    Liked by 1 person

  31. Margaret Avatar

    I love the way you have her discovering the details of her prison by feel. And the final discovery with its potential for escape finishes the story perfectly. Very good.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Margaret, much appreciated.

      Liked by 1 person

  32. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    I wait with her…ready to pounce!

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      🙂 Thanks Dawn.

      Liked by 1 person

  33. Inside the Mind of Isadora Avatar

    A resourceful heroin in your story. Let’s hope she can overpower them and be able to escape. I like where you took the prompt. Well done …
    Isadora 😎

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you. I get the feeling she will do okay 😉

      Liked by 1 person

  34. patriciaruthsusan Avatar

    Seems she’s not giving up without a fight. Good writing, Iain. —- Suzanne

    Liked by 2 people

  35. rgayer55 Avatar

    Well written. As we say in the South, “You can’t beat that with a stick.”

    Liked by 1 person

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