IAIN KELLY

LETTER OF DESTRUCTION

It was a beautiful morning. The sunshine streamed in through the window. The flowers were in full bloom and gladdened her heart. Dolores put on her favourite lace dress and took care over her make-up and hair.

Today, Thomas was expected back and she was sure he would come with a proposal.

 Then Matilda had brought the letter.

‘Dear Dolores,’ he had written. Not his usual loving opening, Dolores thought. ‘I hope this finds you well.’

Dolores felt a knot in her stomach. She scanned the rest of the page. Words jumped out at her: ‘ill-advised;’ ‘drunken;’ ‘one night;’ ‘pregnant;’ ‘duty.’

She slumped in a chair. Another victim of the war.

Everything that had seemed beautiful moments before seemed ugly to her now. She rose from her chair and picked up a fine China teapot. She let it fall onto the wooden floor. It smashed. The destruction felt good. A teacup followed. Saucers. A coffee pot. Finally, the vase of flowers.

It may not bring Thomas back to her, but Dolores felt much better.


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Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story, in around 150 words based on the weekly photo prompt. For more information visit HERE.

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39 responses to “LETTER OF DESTRUCTION”

  1. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    So many are left single by war, but this was cowardness.

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  2. jac forsyth Avatar

    You smash that damn crockery, Delores. Man I love how you write her frantic reading, it’s brilliant.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jac, felt good just writing about smashing stuff up! 🙂

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  3. Lynn Love Avatar

    Oh, this is very good. Love the way you hint at his indescretion, without having to spell it out for us. And a bit of crockery smashing is the perfect response. Great tale

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Lynn, sometimes it helps just to smash something up 🙂

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        A good feeling – and better than aiming that frustration at the cat! 🙂

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  4. neelwritesblog Avatar

    Love the slow buildup like a lamb being led to slaughter. Also the last acts, her way to lessen the pain. Iain, well done, your usual self.

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  5. James Avatar

    Only much later did Dolores realize she’d have to clean up the mess, alas.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very true, but I reckon she thought it was worth it!

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  6. Lorraine's frilly freudian slip Avatar

    Smashing crockery is a great relief. Too bad she can’t take a swing at Thomas!
    Great response to the prompt and so very true of the era!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      In the absence of Thomas, crockery will have to do! Many thanks 🙂

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  7. Priceless Joy Avatar

    I know that type of anger and you described it very well! This story is awesome, Iain! All of her anger and disappointment taken out on the fine china. Love it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks PJ, it was fun just writing about smashing up the fine china 🙂

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      1. Priceless Joy Avatar

        LOL! I’m sure it was fun! Hahaha!

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  8. shehannemoore Avatar

    Excellent, especially the crockery smashing.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Shehanne 🙂

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  9. Jade M. Wong Avatar

    Heartbreaking. I love how you made Dolores go into a smashing frenzy. It really brings out the pain that she must have been feeling in that moment.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jade, pain and a need to get rid of her anger I think.

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  10. Michael Avatar

    Its what makes you feel better isn’t it….sad when these things happen to take away from a life…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks for reading Michael. Sometimes everyone just needs a release.

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  11. sailajaP14 Avatar

    A heart rending take on the prompt…so very effective…and the crescendo of breaking crockery…cannot think of a better way to end it. Beautiful, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very kind, many thanks.

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  12. Dahlia Avatar

    I loved this! Comedy in tragedy – very well done 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Dahlia, glad you saw the comedy in there as well as the downside 🙂

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  13. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    She must have really loved this guy. It would be disappointing and hurtful to find out he had to do his duty due to a one night stand. I bet you she thinks he’s more than a moron. Can completely understand her throwing stuff and breaking it. The fact that it’s fine China, all the better smash. Great job 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Many thanks, it helps to let some frustration out, although she might regret it when she calms down…

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  14. milliethom Avatar

    ‘Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned’. Dolores has lost the man she loved due to a one night stand, and has made a great start in venting her anger. The best China didn’t stand a chance! I love the scene you describe here, Iain. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Many thanks Millie.

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  15. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    I would imagine this did happen, right down to the broken dishes.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Dawn, I like to think so.

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  16. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    A smashing story! Really enjoyed it.

    My story is called Dear Jane

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith

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  17. athling2001 Avatar

    Sad take on the prompt and nicely done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  18. momtheobscure Avatar

    well, what a perfectly good waste of china! Good story though

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, it made her feel better at least.

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  19. rogershipp Avatar

    I loved how you had her vent the anger! Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Roger. Something about the picture made me want her to get up and break things!

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