OBSESSION

I watch the fire fading in the chiminea, poking at the dying embers with a stick.

Three in the morning and the party was winding down. Everyone else had gone inside half an hour ago.

Beth had gone inside, with Daniel’s arm draped round her shoulders. I wish it could have been me in Daniel’s place.

If only I could talk to her again. She no longer answers my e-mails, text messages or voice mails.

If only she would invite me to her parties again. then I wouldn’t have to creep around like this.

I have to get her to listen, to pay attention to me. That’s why I’ve come prepared tonight.

Car doors round the front of the house. Everyone is leaving. Except Daniel and Beth. And me.

I open the bag I have brought with me. The knife and rope are for Daniel and Beth. The hammer I take out.

If we hadn’t argued over this stupid chiminea things would have been okay. It smashes to pieces.

A light goes on in the house. I look up and see Beth and Daniel at the window.

I smile and wave. Our party has only just begun.


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© Dawn Miller

Written as part of Sunday Photo Fiction. Write a story of around 200 words based on the photo prompt given (above). Hosted by Al Forbes. For more details visit HERE.

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33 responses to “OBSESSION”

  1. Slightly confused is this about the hammer or the urns lol!

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    1. It’s about the hammer smashing the urns… 🙂

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  2. OOOH…. Nicely turned round from the opening line.

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    1. Thanks, it turned round as I was writing it!

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      1. These are the best stories.

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  3. Really enjoyed this one 🙂

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  4. Definitely sounds like an obsessive. You won’t find me arguing with him over the chiminea. 😦

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    1. Something must have happened in his childhood with a chiminea 🙂

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  5. He’s one seriously disturbed little toon.

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    1. He has some issues for sure.

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  6. You’ve put a nice gender twist on the old expression “Hell hath no fury…” I enjoyed the dark tone. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Thank you, appreciate your comment.

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  7. Evil and twisty, in the best way!

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  8. The world is a better place with one less chiminea. Thank you.

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  9. Titilating snippet, well done.

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  10. Nicely built story, Iain, and I like that I am not the bad guy this week!

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    1. It should be shared around now and then. Happy to take a turn!

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  11. Watch out Beth and Daniel! Nice one Iain.

    Click to read my story!

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  12. Oh my…I don’t think Daniel or Beth are going to have fun at this party!

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    1. No they won’t. He on the other hand sounds like he’s really looking forward to it!

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        1. Thanks for the prompt photo, sorry I made such a sinister tale from it 🙂

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  13. I have a feeling Beth and Daniel are wising up to his intentions. At least I am hoping! Nicely done 🙂

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    1. I hope so, but I’m not sure they can do anything to stop him!

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  14. That’s the way to win her back. What could go wrong? Good story Iain.

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    1. Well if she won’t listen to reason, how else can he convince her?! Thank you 🙂

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