IAIN KELLY

THE PIANIST’S SET LIST

A typical midweek night in the hotel bar. The usual collection of travelling business men and insipid locals.

I stuck to the set list, occasionally adding a meagre jazz interlude.

Gwen was sitting at the bar. Her cheap perfume stank the place out, the attempt at an alluring red dress screamed desperation.

By eleven it was deserted. Behind the bar, Sam was clearing up and wiping down.

I stopped playing.

‘Early finish?’ I asked Sam.

He shrugged. ‘Might as well. There’s no one gonna notice.’

‘Thanks Sam.’ I pulled the fallboard down over the keys and the cover over the piano. I pocketed my tips. A measly ten bucks.

Walking out I saw a small crowd gathered. As I passed I recognised the cheap scent. I saw the red dress and the pool of blood. Gwen had turned one trick too many.

I would miss her in the bar each night. I wondered if anyone else would.

This desolate town would carry on regardless. The set list would remain unchanged.


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© Mike Vore

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

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45 responses to “THE PIANIST’S SET LIST”

  1. Jade M. Wong Avatar

    Oh no, poor Gwen. But I like the subtleties in this story. It’s amazing how invisible, some people can be or perhaps how unobservant the rest of us can be. I really liked the line when the character wondered if anyone else would miss Gwen.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It sounds like you picked up on the sort of tone I was aiming at. Thanks for commenting Jade 🙂

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  2. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    That took a dark turn. There’s something very bleak in how nothing seems to be affected by Gwen’s death at all. Great story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, bleak was exactly where I meant to go!

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  3. Priceless Joy Avatar

    Wow, great story! Poor Gwen! Your story really pulled me in.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you PJ

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      1. Priceless Joy Avatar

        My pleasure!

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  4. Rosemary Carlson Avatar

    I like dark. Good job!

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  5. Singledust Avatar

    sounds like a dead town and dead people if she was not even going to be missed, lying outside not even noticed until he comes out and finds her, how sad to have lived a life as such, good story though.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Nice description, dead people in a dead town. That’s exactly it! Thank you.

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  6. draliman Avatar

    Gone and immediately forgotten. A very “anonymous and uncaring big city” feel to your story, nice one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, much appreciated as always.

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  7. Joyfrida Avatar

    Reminded me of la la land a tiny bit at the beginning. Loved it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, I was thinking a little of that scene, but then took a darker turn!

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  8. neelwritesblog Avatar

    You have painted a very gloomy picture. The voice comes alive, poignantly. Well done Lain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  9. Chris C. Avatar

    No one misses the downtrodden and the desolate – although I think they feel less human and more ghosts from a bygone age. Poor Gwen, at least she’ll be remembered by someone.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Chris, I like the image of them as ghosts.

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  10. The Voice Avatar

    A gritty little tale. Had sort of a film noir feel to it. Nice.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, aiming for a bit of noir, glad you got that sense.

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  11. James Avatar

    Surprised no one’s mentioned it yet, but the first thing I thought of was Billy Joel’s “The Piano Man” which is his description of his early days playing in a piano lounge before becoming famous. It’s the story of futile dreams in a dead end world.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Sounds appropriate although I don’t know the song.

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      1. James Avatar

        Just Google “Billy Joel Piano Man”. It’s on YouTube.

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  12. Vaidehi Soni Avatar

    It’s sad that Gwen’s life or death had no affect on anyone. 😢Nicely done 😊

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  13. Fun Simplicity (Funsie) Avatar

    At least one person will remember her. Sounds like human lives are so unimportant and murder is common in the desolate town, where everybody minds their own business. A sad story well told!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you. It doesn’t sound like a great town to live in, I admit!

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  14. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    A sad piece of reality there. Nice write 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Mandi 🙂

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  15. LaRonda Moore Avatar

    Iain, I love the imagery in this piece. “Sam was clearing up and wiping down.” I could see a man standing behind the bar cleaning off the countertop with one towel while another is thrown over his shoulder. You painted the scene! Nice job.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks LaRonda 🙂

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  16. luckyjc007 Avatar

    Sad story and depressing, however, real to life for a lot of people. I’m sure there are people that work and do not seem to get the recognition they want or deserve and those that get noticed for the wrong reason. It’s a shame this type of life is often times just accepted and becomes the norm. Great job in portraying this.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, such a nice comment.

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      1. luckyjc007 Avatar

        You’re very welcome.

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  17. rosemawrites Avatar

    woooah! this is haunting!!! love the dark turn.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Rosema

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      1. rosemawrites Avatar

        you’re welcome! ❤

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  18. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Until I reached the tragic ending, your story took me back to when I employed a resident pianist in my bar in Eastbourne. Fortunately, I didn’t have a Gwen!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank goodness! Eastbourne may have it’s faults but it’s not this bad I hope! 🙂

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  19. Martin Cororan Avatar
    Martin Cororan

    DARK! I salute you…

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  20. athling2001 Avatar

    Well done. Reminded me of Casablanca. I liked that the bartender was named Sam:) Great job.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, i like that the mood made you think of that classic film 🙂

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