THE NEW KING

He looked down upon his ragtag army of waifs and strays, born and reared in the streets, just like him.

Now they had organisation and purpose. No longer fighting among themselves, no longer squabbling over meagre scraps. He had brought them together, united against their common enemy.

From the rooftop he looked at the skyline of the distant metropolis. The tall, modern skyscrapers gleamed under the calm blue sky. This was where the war would play out.

Inside them the rich and powerful had only heard hints and rumours about the coming storm. Murmurs of a leader among the poor who had given up hope in negotiations and politicians and religious salvation. A boy who had decided the only way to achieve real change, real social justice, was through force.

Here, among the colourful concrete, he was king among his people. Now, the time had come to lead them to a new life where they could all live like kings and queens in the tall palaces of the rich.

Above him, clouds swirled and the sky grew darker.


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Copyright Grant-Sud

Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.

To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

48 responses to “THE NEW KING”

  1. I love your stories, always different

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    1. Thank you, so pleased you like them 🙂

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  2. Great use of a small amount of words to develop a really good theme. The sense of building foreboding is palpable.

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    1. Thank you, I was going for that sense of foreboding, glad it came across.

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  3. Beautifully portrayed, Iain!

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  4. Another great take on a prompt! I find this really interesting considering the current widening divisions between the poor and the rich/young and the elderly that recent politics is bringing us… how far from the truth could this be? Great story, thanks for sharing it with us 🙂

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    1. Thank you, the current situation all over the world between the rich and the poor was definitely in my mind while writing this.

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  5. Novel and wonderful, as always .

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  6. Reminds me of the famous Jack Weinberg quote: “Never trust anyone over 30”. Oh, by the way, I loved your Batman sketches and interestingly enough, my take on today’s prompt factors in.

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    1. Thanks James, been a long time since I had done any drawing, glad you liked them. Look forward to your story.

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  7. This is amazing, definitely thought provoking and hugely successful for such little words. I definitely want to read more about this world, this ruler and what his rule will mean for the rich.
    I love how different this is, I enjoyed writing from this prompt and it looks like you did too.

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    1. Thank you so much, glad you liked my take on the prompt. Definitely room for a longer story hee. Look forward to reading your effort too 🙂

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      1. Would love to read this if you extended it! Thank you, should be posted tomorrow (I learnt my lesson about posting immediately- silly spelling mistakes!). 🙂

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  8. Well done! Definitely believable in this day and age. I see a book or a movie.

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  9. I love the metaphor of the dark clouds and storm coming! They are going to wage a war with the rich! Great story, Iain!

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  10. Very interesting with a powerful undertone. The winds are about the change.

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      1. Absolutely incredible how you fabricated that entire piece from 1 picture. I very much enjoyed this! Thank you.

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        1. Thank you Sandi, really appreciate your comment.

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          1. lain you’ve been to my site a few times, and I hadn’t really had a chance to spend time on yours. I DO try to be sincere with my comments. I really don’t go around “liking” posts – I like a lot of “comments” to acknowledge I got their response or we are bantering back and forth and I’m cracking up. Most of the time, I try to avoid the common generic responses of “well-done,” “Well-written,” “Great post.” “Good job.”

            Although positive – everyone writes that – almost identical response on each post. Makes me wonder if they truly read it.

            And honestly, I haven’t come across a lot of material I thoroughly enjoy, so I was very excited to read a piece creative and well-written. I felt like it was an excerpt from a book.

            thank you!

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            1. Thanks Sandi. I do try to visit a lot of sites, especially when taking part in a group prompt. Sometimes that can lead to the occasional generic response, but I still like to acknowledge someone’s work, even if it is to say ‘well done’! I agree though, it is nice to get a comment that really shows someone has read your work and taken time to think about what you have written. 🙂

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  11. And Rome shall burn..and we will be the new kings…

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  12. Beautifully written, Iain. The write-up about the protagonist matches the picture perfectly. You should spin this one into a longer tale. Cheers, Varad

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  13. good stuff, and very relevant today in our current political climate.

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  14. This one had it all. A great theme to begin with, great characterisation between the haves and have nots, a dark, foreboding tone and to top it all your usual brevity of words, succinct to the core. Very well written, Lian.

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    1. Very kind Neel, I must admit did think this was a good one too! 🙂

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    1. Thank you Pamela 🙂

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  15. Great take on the prompt: it made me look at the photo in a whole different way, suddenly more powerful and portentous.

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    1. Thanks Joy, glad it had that effect.

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  16. Whaaat. Okay, there’s such a great sense of suspense and buildup but I was a little confused at the ending as to what exactly the story was building up to. Is it a revolution? Are there supernatural forces at work?

    Regardless, you always write so well Iain! It’s a pleasure to read your work every week 🙂

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    1. Nothing supernatural going on, it is the start of the Revolution 🙂

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      1. Thank you for clearing it up!

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  17. This has something scarily prophetic. Awesome!

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    1. Thank you. Let’s hope it doesn’t come to this, but something has to change.

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  18. Interesting story reminds me of both “Lord of the Flies” a novel we read in school a lot and also a British/Irish movie called “The War of the Buttons.” Great writing

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    1. Thanks Mandi. I have read the book but not familiar with the film.

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      1. Worth a see, well for with of book actually, in movie form.

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  19. I liked this very much.
    Lead them unto victory.
    Off with their heads.

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