IAIN KELLY

AMERICANA

Every Friday night: finished school for the week they gathered at diners before hopping into their daddy’s cars and cruising through the streets, then drag-racing over at the abandoned drive-in on Parsons Street.

Every week the private guard at the abandoned drive-in complained at the police station. ‘Teenagers,’ he was told. This new breed of young adults. They all wanted to be like James Dean.

He bought a fresh padlock. They brought bolt cutters. The first time he had confronted them they laughed and pushed him aside. His employers demanded he stop them. They were just a bunch of kids.

In they came, tyres screeching, young voices screaming.

A race about to begin, the guard stepped out in front of the headlights. This time they would listen to him. He unholstered his sidearm, shouted and fired one shot into the air.

Panicked, they dived back into cars, engines gunned, they scrammed. The guard smiled. Just kids, he thought, that gave ’em a scare.

He didn’t spot the teenager who hadn’t left, who had borrowed something else cool from his daddy that night.

The gunshot echoed across the abandoned drive-in. The teenager ran through the open gate.


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Copyright Sascha Darlington

Written as part of Sunday Photo Fiction. Write a story of around 200 words based on the photo prompt given (above). Hosted by Al Forbes. For more details visit HERE.

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39 responses to “AMERICANA”

  1. JS Brand Avatar

    Another example of what an enviable imagination you have, Iain. Good take, well written.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much, too kind.

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      1. JS Brand Avatar

        Not kind – envious!

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  2. Reena Saxena Avatar

    Teen violence is no longer a prerogative of Americana. It is spreading across. The online games do their bit, and the indifference of parents completes the task.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Reena, not something to be celebrated.

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  3. michael1148humphris Avatar

    Iain I enjoyed this story, it is topical. At times we have boy racers aping top gear. So sad. Iain at the beginning of the last line but one, I think there are two extra words [see the]

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Good spot Michael, thanks for pointing it out.

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  4. Fandango Avatar

    “…who had borrowed something else cool from his daddy that night.” If parents insist on having guns in the house, they need to take responsibility for making sure they’re under lock and key and that their rebellious teenage kids can’t get access to them. A sad tale of Americana these days.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s the parents insisting on having the guns that I can never understand, and the ease of access for anyone who wants one is frightening.

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      1. Fandango Avatar

        I agree!

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  5. Liz H Avatar

    Only, or as recent statistics seem to show, mostly in Amerca. 😦

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Afraid so 😦

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  6. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Very sad that this is so easily believable.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Janet, I’m afraid so. I was actually reluctant to write about this topic again having touched on it a few times after similar events.

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      1. scr4pl80 Avatar

        But don’t we HAVE to keep talking about it? I can’t help but believe that something will change if we keep making our voices heard. I know I’m going to pay more attention to what my elected officials think about gun control before I vote next.

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      2. Iain Kelly Avatar

        It would be good to know if there has been a shift in public opinion on the matter, but among the politicians there seems to be no appetite for change, no matter how bad the next atrocity. I can only hope you are right and that one day soon the voices will be heard.

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  7. James Avatar

    I remember cruising down Fremont street in Las Vegas when I was in high school in the early 1970s. I’m sure there were kids who did drag racing but I wasn’t part of the “in” crowd. I know that firearms were just as accessible then (if not more so) than they are now, but no one back in those days would ever have dreamed of shooting someone. I keep wondering what’s really changed in the past thirty or forty years or so.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Something certainly has, especially with the school shootings. I’m sure it’s impossible to point to one thing.

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    2. C M Smile Avatar

      Hello James, I think what has changed are people’s morals.

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  8. Journeys Through Pre-World War 3 Britain Avatar

    Great work man, very believably realised.

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  9. Rosemary Carlson Avatar

    Great one, Iain. Our thoughts were running in the same direction.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Rosemary. A shame we have to keep writing about in response to these events.

      Liked by 1 person

  10. joem18b Avatar

    well done.

    just finished my walk. only had to duck twice.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ha – be careful out there.

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  11. ceayr Avatar

    I have nothing to say, Iain, you said it all.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you CE

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  12. Sunday Fiction Avatar

    Great story Iain. I like how you stripped the content to fit it into the 200 words. Very believable as well.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, enjoyed the challenge.

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  13. joyroses13 Avatar

    I so wish that this was really purely fiction! Sadly its become all too real! Good job. Powerful ending.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – like you I wish this wasn’t inspired by topical events.

      Like

  14. goroyboy Avatar

    Americana is right…something’s never change.. relevant post..

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Unfortunately so. Thank you.

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  15. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    Powerful and topical… Ohh so topical. Unfortunately.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’m fed up with it being topical too. Thanks for reading.

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  16. Dahlia Avatar

    A realistic take Iain and nicely set up.

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  17. Sascha Darlington Avatar

    Well done! For some reason I had this image from West Side Story where Tony gets shot when someone brings a gun.

    guns. sigh. An unfortunate part of American culture. And stupidity.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sascha, that’s not a bad image, but without the catchy songs 🙂 And yes, guns 😦

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