NEMESIS AND THE BEAUTY QUEEN

She checked behind her. The dilapidated shack stood there.

She looked back at the mirror. The shack was reflected in it.

The mirror seemed to work as a mirror should.

She bent down and peered into, her breath clouded the smooth surface, but still the mirror did not show her reflection.

She pinched herself, poked her sides, pulled her hair. She was real, she existed.

From the shack a man appeared, surrounded by a glow.

He spoke: ‘Can you discover a beauty that lies within? Can you live without the ardour that your appearance provokes in others?’

With that, he vanished.


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Copyright Dawn M. Miller

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

The original Nemesis myth: Wikipedia, and particularly the encounter with Narcissus, upon which this story is based around.

118 responses to “NEMESIS AND THE BEAUTY QUEEN”

  1. Dear Iain,

    “Mirror, Mirror on the wall…” Evocative and thoughtful piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. Nice mirror. Does not show reflection. But talks back. Magical!

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  3. Brilliant writeup Iain

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  4. A mirror that doesn’t show your reflection, jolly good idea, Iain.

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    1. Thank you Roberta 🙂

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  5. Can we live without admiring our own refelctions? I’m convinced that some people could not!

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    1. I am convinced of this too – quite a few people in fact!

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  6. Mirror mirror. Good story. Is the misspelling of Nemesis intentional?

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    1. It wasn’t, just a misspelling, which no one else seems to have noticed, or at least mentioned!

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  7. Oh yes Iain! Another thought provoking post.

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  8. Quite a nightmare for the beauty queen, to live without the ardour her appearance provokes in others.

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    1. Perhaps she will learn and adapt her ways. Thanks Penny

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  9. This is is so cool! I Great creative post.

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  10. An apt take for this prompt.

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  11. This may begin a soul-searching transformation for her true self.

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    1. Let’s hope she uses the opportunity. Thank you.

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  12. Ah, the magic of mirrors, if you stare into them long enough does your soul emerge?
    I would say, Iain, you have given us a mystical horror with a touch of self centred vanity from the character,Beauty.

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    1. Thank you James, reflections are indeed magical things.

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  13. a very deep question for many a human beings…
    the beauty within….

    beautiful message here and could feel it in a collection with something on Narcissim

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    1. Thank you Prior, Narcissism was the starting point from which this story sprung.

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  14. The only thing worse than being looked at is not being looked at? Nice one, Iain

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    1. Better to be known for something than not known at all.

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  15. I loved that! One of your best.

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    1. Thank you so much Sandra 🙂

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  16. A good fairytale. Can we indeed see past our physical appearance? I wrote about this yesterday. I’m trying to see past my weathered face.
    Tracey

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    1. Weathered faces have good stories to tell 😉

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  17. I thought she was going to discover that she was a vampire, because, as you know, vampires can’t see their own reflections.

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    1. I did think about that at first, but thought there might be a few vampire stories this week.

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  18. Oh yes… maybe we need to find ourselves inside… a mirror showing that would be great…

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    1. It would be good if they showed us more than our external appearance. Thanks Bjorn.

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  19. But until he said something she ddn’t seem to be thinking about her personal beauty at all. Merely the reality of her existence. He is unfair.

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    1. Hmm, I think he might be trying to teach her a lesson based on her life so far.

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  20. Pinch her rosey check.
    Stop in from Alice and hope you can stop in for a cup of coffee.

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  21. I can think of a few people in need of such a mirror.
    I really loved this one, Iain.

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    1. Thank you Dale, much appreciated 🙂

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  22. What a nice take on the Narcissus myth, Iain. It was an overdue refresher course for me, to peruse the wikipedia links. I did not know Nemesis was a goddess of retribution for those with too much hubris ( havent used that word since college!) and she was the one who set Narcissus to looking at his own reflection till he pined away, for love of himself.
    What nice twist, rather than to punish with the reflection, punish with the lack of it. And switching the sexes of the punished and punisher also makes the story more your own. Let us hope she does better than Narcissus, and does further provoke her Nemesis to restrain “the frivolous insolences of mortals”.

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    1. Thank you. A little bit of research for me too. does make me think that the modern use of ‘nemesis’, such as in sport, an ‘arch-nemesis’ is actually inaccurate based on the myth it comes from.

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  23. A mirror that doesn’t reflect vanity… Brilliant idea.

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    1. Thank you Anshu 🙂

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  24. The mirror as the reflection of the soul. Nice take on the photo.

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  25. If I do not Instagram, do I even exist?

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    1. A modern moral dilemma!

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  26. Beautifully written, Iain!

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  27. Nice – without your appearance to rely on, is there inner beauty enough? Something like this would turn the world on its head!

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    1. It really would, which is why it would never be allowed!

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  28. I wonder if she can? Most of us have a streak of vanity through us – some greater than others! An imaginative spin on the myth, Iain

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  29. I suppose the title infers that Nemesis was responsible for turning the mirror into a magic one. It is a story that makes you think.

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    1. Indeed it does, glad it got you thinking.

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  30. I’m trying to come up with something deep and meaningful to say about this, but I give up! Nice one Iain

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    1. Thanks Keith, I’m happy for you to keep it shallow and meaningless 😉

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  31. That was a thought-provoking post. Can we live with a mirror that doesn’t show our reflection? I doubt that.

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  32. A mirror that shows the real you. Interesting story, Lain.

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  33. Mirror can’t reflect the inner beauty. Wise man!

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  34. Beautifully written, in a cleverly understated way. Lots to ponder -‘ can you live without the ardour your appearance provokes in others ? ‘ That is some challenge. Well done.

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    1. Thank you so much, a question for all ages, but especially today;s society I think.

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  35. Shiver me bones a good un’. Loved it!

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  36. A magical mirror fit for a fairytale. I enjoyed where you took the prompt, Iain.
    Isadora 😎

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  37. I have an inkling that while beauty is only skin deep, vanity lies much deeper,. A most original and interesting take, Iain.

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    1. Thank you Jilly, you have nailed my thoughts.

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  38. she should try another mirror. perhaps she would have better luck. 🙂

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    1. Hmm, I wonder if he has thought of that and applied his spell to all mirrors?!

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  39. Aha! Magic mirror speaks a truth she may not hear

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    1. Maybe after a few months or years she will get the message…

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  40. Deep stuff. Nicely written!

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  41. Very clever piece & thought-provoking.

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  42. Your story gave me goosebumps! And so, I read it more than once!

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    1. Thank you Jan, very kind 🙂

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  43. Such a thought provoking piece!

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  44. Very well done, Iain. There’s so much depth and clearly a mythical feel, which I really love.
    Every now and then, I intend to explore the Greek myths in more detail and sit down and read the Odyssey and the Iliad, as they’re inspired so many creatives through the centuries. Yet, another part of me, wonders about going so far back in time these days and whether there’s enough inspiration around me.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena
    PS There’s also another issue these days and that is that the public isn’t as familiar with these stories as they were in the past. So, do they manage to communicate in quite the same way as they did in previous times?

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    1. I agree, I managed to get through the Iliad when at University, but it was more an academic exercise than an enjoyable one! But I felt the need to include the Wikipedia links with my story because I wasn’t sure everyone would pick up the link.

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  45. I enjoyed your story as always, and I learned a bit more of mythology to boot. We all have a bit of narcissism inside us, it’s all degrees though and as long as it doesn’t define us, it’s okay I guess. Nicely done!

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    1. Thank you Brenda. Yes, there’s taking a little pride in your appearance, and then there’s caring about nothing else apart from that.

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  46. Wonderful mystical fable!

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  47. Oh, I love this, this is such an original variation on the magical mirror theme. Just imagine all mirrors spoke to us like this. Would the world be a better place or would there be a lot of broken mirrors?

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    1. It would certainly be different. Thanks Gabi.

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    I think those 2 questions are going to haunt her for the rest of her life.

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    1. Hopefully it gets her to think about her life at least. Thank you.

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