Iain Kelly

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UNITED IN LOVE

UNITED IN LOVE

‘Meet me at our favourite spot,’ she wrote two weeks ago.

Today was the appointed time. She sat by the river watching the water rushing along, mirroring the tumult in her heart.

Here they had first fallen in love, before circumstance and war had torn them apart.

She lay on the grass, listening to the birdsong, and waited.

***

He stood with his chilli dog and coke looking round the stadium.

This was their favourite spot, where they had first met, watching the Mets beat the Yankees.

No sign of her.

Still, the ball game was about to start. He took a seat.

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Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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105 responses to “UNITED IN LOVE”

    • I will try, although the forecast does not look good! I am working all weekend, so if you see the big BBC Scotland building beside the river, I’ll be inside there. Congratulations on the new arrival! 🙂

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  21. Lack of communication is the culprit behind many misunderstandings (and breakups, too). I really like what this says about perspective, and about how we can never know what someone else holds dear… at least, not without asking them.

    And yes, the twist gave me a giggle.

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  23. Silly woman: you always have to tell the guy exactly what you mean/want. Unless it’s stated outright, we are clueless. Clueless, I say.

    Oh, and I looked at this differently on a second read: Two different time periods; two different couples. Still stands as a good read.

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    • You were right first time with my intentions, nothing as fancy as different time periods, just 2 people getting crossed wires – but I like both ways of looking at it, so I will take all the credit 😉

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  24. Oh wow Iain. I love this. What a great demonstration of the importance of clear communication, that each of us has our own unique perspective — Forgiveness and perception checking are such keys to bridge this. Can I share this post for #ForgivingFridays? If yes, it would be great if you can link back to my post from last week. And if not, no worries. Blessings to you Iain!

    (Note that I may not do a post this Friday b/c of the Thanksgiving holiday.)

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  31. Oh Dear. I guess it would have been wiser to say, “meet me by the river” or “let’s meet at the stadium.” I wonder how long each of them will wait before they realize that they got their wires crossed? Great read, Iain 🙂

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  34. Serious communication gap! Are these two people waiting at different places expected to meet or are they waiting for different partners?

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  35. Looks like i missed the party doing the turkey yesterday. Agree with all of the above. Its funny because its so familiar and believable.

    As for the points on clear communication: I’m convinced this message was an email or text!

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  40. I can see it happening! She really should be more specific though. Great read!

    btw – I wanted to say thanks for your comment on my story. I’m not sure how, but I deleted it while replying. It’s somewhere in the WordPress wormhole now, and I can’t get it back.

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  43. Iain, this was fantastic, even if rather tragic for the participants. I’d imagine a lot of couples could face this confusion. Hope they meet up.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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