ABSOLUTION

It was only after she had left that he remembered the Deli store had closed down last week.

‘Just popping to the Deli store,’ she had called up the stairs.

He already knew where she was going.

It was just that the lie was so barefaced this time.

He decided to head out to the bar even though it was only noon.

He would pass her on the way.

He would pretend not to see her outside the clinic, demanding the right to life.

It was her way of dealing with the guilt.

His way was to drink away his own life.


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Copyright Jean L. Hayes

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

112 responses to “ABSOLUTION”

  1. More lives sacrificed to a single incident. Sad indeed.

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  2. Bitter stuff, Iain, nicely done.

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  3. Iain, such a tragic tale of grief and loss. Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  4. Dear Iain,

    And nobody wins. How sad. Nicely written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yep, no winners in this one.

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  5. The damage choices can make…

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    1. That’s the thing with choices, you have to live with them.

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  6. Poignant. I’ve been there.

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    1. Thank you. Glad you managed to come out the other side.

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  7. How people pretend! Reality expressed well.

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  8. There are so many layers here. I think the main feeling in this story is just a sense of desolation. Well done, Iain.

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    1. It has that feel to it. Thank you Linda

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    1. Afraid so, thanks Keith

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  9. A sombre story. Both of them are suffering and in their own personal dark spaces. Nicely told.

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  10. Choices made not by choice, it would seem… So very sad.

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    aheartforafrica641064503

    What a sad and sobering story, Iain. We see how two people deal with the same situation differently. Extremely well written story.

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    1. You’re welcome, thanks Ronda

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  12. Powerful story, Iain. Very heartbreaking. Each is trying to deal with their pain in their own way. And added to her pain is the guilt of what she had done.

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  13. However justified the choice, the memory never quite dies.

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    1. Not something you’re ever likely to fully recover from

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  14. Wow – that was so powerful, Iain. Loved it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Very kind, thank you Susan

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    deborahsdeliberations

    Sad story, Iain and very moving. Well done!

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  16. Well done and sad. I don’t know the circumstances of the choice she’d made but I hope she comes to terms with her choices and that she doesn’t lose sight of the reality that other women may have choices they need to make, and should be given the space and respect to do them.
    IMO, it is always a sad choice. It is not always the wrong choice.
    Na’ama

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      1. Thank you! I’d protect the right of any woman or girl to carry to term if she chooses to. I’d also protect the right of any woman or girl to make decisions about their body … It is ALWAYS a difficult position, all the more so why it requires the right to choose.
        Na’ama

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  17. This was very well written and thought-provoking, Iain. That’s why our decisions should be our decisions and not mandated by anyone else. We’re the ones who have to live with the choices we make.

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  18. So much loss here. A well written story of grief.

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    1. Thanks Russell, and thanks for your kind review of my novel on Amazon and Goodreads – made my day 🙂

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      1. All I did was tell the truth and try not to give anything away in the process. I look forward to the sequel, if there is one in the works.

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      2. The first words of the sequel should be typed in the next few weeks – hopefully sometime late summer it will be finished!

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      3. Awesome! Good luck with the new book! Hopefully, one of these days I’ll join you on the marketplace.

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      4. Look forward to it Russell 🙂

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  19. Sad, I hope they find a way to come to terms with their (or her) decision.

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    1. I wonder if anyone can ever really come to terms with decisions as huge as this?

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  20. What a choice to have to make, not good for anyone involved. Gritty stuff Iain

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    1. Indeed, and not one with an easy answer for anyone either. Thank you

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  21. There are some decisions which can’t be unmade, nor can they be put behind you. It sounds like there may be more than one such here.

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  22. Tragic story and a timely message right now. Powerfully done!

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      1. You are very welcome!

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  23. Instead of coming together in their grief and apparent regret, they seek distraction. I dont see this as a longterm strategy.

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    1. I wonder if either of them thinks much beyond making it through the day.

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  24. May they be reconciled in their mutual brokenness.

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  25. You’ve written about a big, serious subject, highlighting the pain that can be left after a difficult choice. You’ve structured the story very well. The rather exclamatory style, with many short sentences, allows you to show different facets of the troubled couple. In particular you highlight how their pain leads to blatant falsehoods in their marriage. The title, “Absolution” is excellent, pointing to the solution that both your characters need.

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    1. Thank you so much Penny, so very kind. It is a difficult and complex topic to tackle, especially in 100 words. So pleased you think it worked well.

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  26. It says a lot that she has to sneak off to protest.

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    1. There is a lot between the lines here.

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  27. it seems people deal with issues differently. still, the guilt doesn’t go away.

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    1. I don’t think it ever will

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  28. Interesting how they each had their own way of dealing with the issue. Well done, Iain.

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  29. So sad, and well written.

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      1. You’re welcome, Iain.

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  30. And, neither sees that the way through the pain is a ‘together’ thing. Great writing!

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  31. So sad. I’d be drinking too.

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  32. I really like the understated way you tell the story, about two tragic lives. Makes it powerful. Well done.

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  33. Oh gosh. This one has a bite in it. Very subtle and well layered here Iain

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    1. Thanks Laurie, always appreciated 🙂

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  34. This is very tragic and layered. I think there’s a book in it. Great job.

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  35. Wow. Nice spin. I felt the the different emotional responses to the unspoken issue that they’re each coping with – without you’re spelling it out.

    Randy

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    1. Thank you Randy, much appreciated

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  36. Society often burdens people with guilt over what should be a personal decision. The title says it all. Nice one.

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    1. Thank you, and I agree

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  37. How sad and beautifully written. Great job!

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  38. There’s a twisted history here and you capture it very well, Iain. Something makes me think, there’s a chasm between these two that might never be bridged. Very well done

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    1. I think never bridged, never discussed, and they will carry on like this sadly for a long time… Thanks Lynn

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  39. There’s a bitter history between the lines here. Very well done Iain!

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  40. A difficult and sad story. I’m not sure the choice was hers alone. Apart from that, what Na’ama said. Great writing.

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    Ennle Madresan

    Oh my, hard-hitting. Well done.

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  42. You’ve captured their tragedy perfectly, with subtlety and empathy.

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  43. Such a shame. Maybe if they could just talk, if not to each other, to someone.
    Good story about guilt. It does make people do all kinds of things.

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    Bernadette Braganza

    Such a tragic tale 😦

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