IAIN KELLY

STOLEN WEEKEND

Hustle and bustle. Amongst it all I sit alone.

Many come and go: commuters, tourists, pleasure seekers and shoppers.

Smiling faces and laughter, serious looks with purposeful strides, blank expressions and automatic motions: all accumulate into the life of the station.

The whistle signals an arrival. Her arrival. Loud squealing brakes and steam fill the air.

I watch expectantly. Will she be alone?

I see her, my heart leaps.

Then it sinks. He is with her today. She spots me and bestows a glance in my direction: stay away.

I watch them leave.

Our train departs, I take it alone.


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Copyright Sandra Crook

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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84 responses to “STOLEN WEEKEND”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Like the aftermath of Brief Encounter

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That’s what I saw in the prompt. Thanks Neil

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  2. Tannille Avatar

    Well, that would make for an uncomfortable train ride…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Certainly not what he had in mind.

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  3. ceayr Avatar

    Aye weel, nae houghmagandie this weekend!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Maybe next week!

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  4. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    A rather disheartening story. I felt for him.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      These are disheartening times it seems. Thanks Rochelle

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  5. Sandra Avatar

    I imagine there have been many such disappointments throughout the ages. A beautiful capture of a truly disappointing moment.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra

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  6. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    Ah, the sad and lonely end. Well told.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks J Hardy

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  7. trentpmcd Avatar

    Perhaps it is time he sets his eye on another lady….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I hear there are plenty out there 😉

      Liked by 1 person

      1. trentpmcd Avatar

        So I’ve heard.

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  8. Liz Young Avatar

    He’d do better to find someone free to love him!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      If only unrequited love were so simple!

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  9. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Well that’s too bad. Wonder how long before he gives up.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Perhaps he already should have! Thanks Janet

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  10. magickmermaid Avatar

    Unrequited love is sad. Great story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  11. notestowomen Avatar

    I’m with Trent. It’s time for him to move on.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I wonder if he can though – the heart is a complicated thing!

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      1. notestowomen Avatar

        You’re spot on about the heart.

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  12. michael Avatar

    In sad story which reminds me of the film Brief Encounters.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That’s where my mind went, so glad it seems to have worked!

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  13. Russell Gayer Avatar

    Ah, a new twist on “two ships that pass in the night.”

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It was the third ship that caused the problem!

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  14. pennygadd51 Avatar

    The emotion of your story made me feel sympathetic towards the star-crossed lovers. Still, there is hope for subsequent meetings. Nice writing, Iain.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Penny

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  15. granonine Avatar

    Poor guy, I hope there will be another opportunity. Although, if she’s married to the man she’s with, it may not be worth the risk.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Perhaps he is willing to risk more than she is.

      Liked by 1 person

  16. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    Ouch! I feel his pain, which is probably the highest compliment a writer can get.

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  17. Danny James Avatar

    Almost but not quite.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Danny

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  18. plaridel Avatar

    it wasn’t his day. perhaps he would be lucky next time.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He certainly hopes so

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  19. Dawn M. Miller Avatar

    Oh my…please don’t let her do this again!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Maybe she could not help it. Thanks Dawn.

      Liked by 1 person

  20. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    Excellent story!

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  21. Dale Avatar
  22. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    Awww, poor guy!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Maybe next time!

      Liked by 1 person

  23. draliman Avatar

    Full of ups and downs, the life of the “other man”.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s never simple.

      Liked by 1 person

  24. jillyfunnell Avatar

    Something about trains brought us both to a similar theme again, Iain – Brief Encounter has a lot to answer for in my opinion, though my thoughts were rather with Charles and Camilla in 1981 🙂 Excellent pace in your story. Lovely.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jilly

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  25. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Maybe next time, or maybe not. Perhaps it’s not meant to be.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I hate it when that happens!

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  26. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    He’s stuck in a tragic situation. I felt for him, seeing her with the other and taking the train alone. Nicely done as always!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Brenda, as always!

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  27. bearmkwa Avatar
    bearmkwa

    Sorry i had to leave so quickly before I could reply this morning. Doc called me in to get my stitches out! YEAH! I can now use my point and click finger again! Love your story.Such a sad relationship. Either romantic or spy… reminds me of when my Foster Dad was working undercover, and I walked into the college cafe to see him there… he gave me that same kinda ‘don’t talk to me, you don’t even know me’ kinda look. Later, he sent me a message via another foster dad about what he was doing. It was weird.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Glad your finger has recovered. That does sound like a weird experience, especially for a child or teenager to discover.

      Liked by 1 person

  28. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Ooooo here’s a mystery. Clandestine meeting foiled. Hopefully they meet up again on another ride

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I don’t think they are going to give up. Thanks Laurie

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  29. mjlstories Avatar

    It is strange that despite the everyday hustle and bustle of train travel it can still be highly romantic…or so sadly not as in your ending. You capture both the ordinary world and the other emotional one happening at the same time.

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  30. patriciaruthsusan Avatar

    Very sad, Iain but not all stories have happy endings. He’ll just have to find someone else he can be happy with. I’ve found things often turn out for the best. Well written. —- Suzanne

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A nice attitude, thanks Suzanne

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  31. Fatima Fakier Avatar

    Secret love affairs have to be especially cruel to the third party. Hopefully, he gets enough self-respect to move on into healthier situations.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A nice thought, thank you Fatima

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    2. Rising Star Avatar

      Yes Fatima, secret affairs always hearts a lot on its reveal, it breaks the walls of trust badly.

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  32. Woman walking Max Avatar

    The excitement, the precarious hope, soon dashed – I felt for him. Vividly captured Iain, well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  33. JoHawkTheWriter Avatar

    A heart-breaking story, Iain. Lovely.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  34. James McEwan Avatar

    That warning glance says it all. clearly a woman who is playing a dangerous game.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I dread to think what happens if they get caught. Thanks James.

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  35. Abhijit Ray Avatar

    May be another day, when she is alone two of you can take the train together. Today is not your day.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – that’s what he hopes for.

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  36. Alice Audrey Avatar
    Alice Audrey

    I guess she made her choice.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Or maybe she had no choice

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  37. msjadeli Avatar

    Triangles always have those sharp angles that hurt…. Well-told story, Iain.

    Liked by 2 people

      1. msjadeli Avatar

        You are welcome, Iain.

        Liked by 1 person

  38. Margaret Avatar

    I love the pace and feel of this story. His expectancy, and disappointment, all come through so well.

    Liked by 2 people

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Margaret

      Liked by 1 person

  39. magarisa Avatar

    You set the scene so well. How heartbreaking it must be for him to see her with the other man.

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  40. lisarey1990 Avatar

    So heartbreaking & sad. Captured well.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Lisa

      Liked by 1 person

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