‘Yer gonna be late,’ his ma shouted at him from the kitchen.

‘Ahm jist tryin’ tae get masel’ lookin’ right, ma,’ he called back.

‘It’s too late fer that, son,’ she replied, ‘about fifteen years too late.’

She didn’t understand, this was the night he would ask Justine. He should have done it before now. He’d had five years of school together. He’d wasted two of them plucking up the courage to even talk to her.

After the summer she was leaving for university in the city. He would stay behind and start down the pit alongside his father and older brother. The chances of him ever escaping to the city were slim, so he had to ask her tonight.

He took a last look in the mirror, adjusting the stray bit of hair on his crown that always misbehaved. It would have to do.

‘You’ve nae chance,’ his brother said from the bed where he was lying reading the newspaper.

‘How wud you know?’ he asked angrily.

‘Ah’ve bin there. They wans that are aff tae the city wi’ big ambitions have got nae time fer the likes a’ us.’


As the sun went down behind the mist, he sat alone in the field and wiped away a tear.

He hated his brother for being right.

Copyright Sue Vincent

This is a response to the #writephoto Prompt: Dance curated over at Sue Vincent’s Daily Echo. Click on the link to read other stories inspired by the image.


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34 responses to “THE DANCE”

  1. Heartbreaking…
    On a different note, just wanted to tell you that I really admire you for being so consistent with your writing.Your passion for writing shines through. Lots to learn from you.

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  2. Beautifully written, captures the sad truth that his heart’s desire will happen, he’s fixed in a society that will not let it. Love the last line : ‘he hated his brother for being right’. Well written.

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  3. Oh that is so sad! Tugs at the heart for him. You have such a way of putting such emotion into your writing that grabs the heart, and writing about things that aren’t so far fetched, even if we wish they were.

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