She’s not in my orbit. She’s untouchable.

Would she be interested in a guy like me? Doubtful. I’m not one of the cool kids.

She doesn’t know I exist.

She doesn’t see me.

All I can do is watch from a distance.

Every night.

Until she draws her bedroom curtains.

Written for the Weekend Writing Prompt, hosted by SammiScribbles. This week’s prompt was: Orbit. Click on the link to read more stories by other writers.

31 responses to “UNREQUITED”

  1. Oh, I feel the pain of unrequited love.

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    1. It happens to so many.

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  2. Love the creepy last line.

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    1. Yep, that’s what I was going for 😉


  3. Hari OM
    …yeah, that last line is a killer! YAM xx

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  4. Ew, creepy.
    Nice job, tho’.

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  5. Well said and penned Iain. Thank you.😊

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    1. Thank you Suzette 🙂

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  6. Oh that peeping Tom! I wonder if she does know he is watching?

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    1. Oh, that would be a good twist 🙂

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      1. Ah hah! The plot could thicken 😉

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  7. Oh, the poor yearner …
    And … just a tad creepy … 😉
    Perhaps, instead of the unrequited
    They can mingle in friendlier pastures …

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    1. Yep, just a little bit creepy… probably best to avoid him!

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  8. I trust you are not using a telescope!

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    1. Don’t be silly Keith, the binoculars will do the job!

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  9. Dear Iain,

    I felt for him until the end. Then I shuddered. Well done.



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  10. Oh this is a really good one–there’s nothing worse than unrequited love, in my book.

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  11. A brilliant but creepy response to the prompt! A solid little short story 🙂

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  12. Yes creepy is a good description but l love it

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