Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

THE DISAPPEARED

P for Protection. That’s what he thought anyway, huddled under the El track. Every ten minutes the shudder of the metal stanchion and the clackety roar reminded him he was still alive.

Frank from the Pizza place came out and nodded to him. Handed him a coffee and a leftover slice. Their evening routine. ‘Any luck today?’ Frank always asked.

He always shook his head. Not today, maybe tomorrow. Always maybe one day in the future. She might come back, she might step off the El and stop at Frank’s for a coffee. Like they used to do.

Maybe one day.

Copyright Ted Strutz

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Iain Kelly

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62 responses to “THE DISAPPEARED”

  1. Margaret Avatar
    Margaret

    Poor man…I can sense his loneliness and vulnerability. I wonder how long he’s been waiting there. Lucky he’s got such a good friend in Frank.

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    1. Liz H Avatar
      Liz H

      Very sad, but thank god for people like Frank. Perhaps he’s known a similar love, once upon a time…

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      1. Iain Kelly Avatar
        Iain Kelly

        Thanks Liz, an interesting thought – Frank may know what he is going through – I like that idea.

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    2. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Margaret. I get the feeling it’s been a while.

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  2. OIKOS™- Art, Books & more Avatar
    OIKOS™- Art, Books & more

    Reblogged this on NEW BLOG HERE >> https:/BOOKS.ESLARN-NET.DE.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks for the reblog 🙂

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      1. OIKOS™- Art, Books & more Avatar
        OIKOS™- Art, Books & more

        🙏 You are welcome, Iain! I hope all is right. Best wishes, Michael

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  3. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    Such yearning. Hope can be a cruel mistress.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      But it’s what keeps us going. Thank you!

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  4. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    So much longing in this piece. Perhaps it’s time for him to move on. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rochelle. I wonder if it will be Frank that has the heart to tell him one day…

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  5. Alana Mautone (@RamblinGarden) Avatar
    Alana Mautone (@RamblinGarden)

    What a lonely waiting. I don’t think the person he is waiting for is ever going to return. I hope, though, that Frank doesn’t give up on him. Alana ramblinwitham

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Alana. It does seem a little hopeless, but I don’t see him giving up.

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  6. Yamini Ali MacLean Avatar
    Yamini Ali MacLean

    Hari Om
    …and a delicious slice you served us, Iain! YAM xx
    W=Window

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  7. pensitivity101 Avatar
    pensitivity101

    Lovely piece Iain.
    Good luck with the new book.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Di, we’ll see how it goes, hopefully finds a few readers.

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  8. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    Beautifully done, Iain. I felt the rumble of the train

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Neil, much appreciated

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  9. Lynn Love Avatar
    Lynn Love

    Really lovely, Iain. Touching, heartfelt stuff. A little tragedy

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks so much Lynn, always lovely to hear from you 🙂

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  10. Michael Avatar
    Michael

    Life can be sad… but perhaps fate intends a different future for him.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Michael – maybe so.

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  11. magickmermaid Avatar
    magickmermaid

    A very poignant story. Hopefully something good will happen. Thank goodness for Frank.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much – there is always that glimmer of hope! 🙂

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  12. Sadje Avatar
    Sadje

    Such a poignant story Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Sadje

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  13. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    Nicely done Iain. I could feel his loneliness through your words.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Mike, much appreciated

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  14. Sascha Darlington Avatar
    Sascha Darlington

    Sad, the feeling of loneliness is palpable. I wonder what happened to her . . .

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Sascha. I have a few ideas…

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  15. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    Nice use of the cafe in your story as a place of memories and maybe future meeting.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Frank

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  16. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    Thank heavens for such allies. Good story, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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      1. msjadeli Avatar
        msjadeli

        You’re very welcome.

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  17. CGraith Avatar
    CGraith

    Making me cry with this one! Have to believe one day someone new will get off the train and kindle a new love.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      That’s a nice thought. Thank you.

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  18. Kimber Templin Avatar
    Kimber Templin

    One can always stay hopeful! Well done!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  19. trishsplace Avatar
    trishsplace

    Great. You’ve encapsulated the history and a comraderie very well.
    I love it when the local business reaches out to those in need.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      They do rally round in a time of crisis. Thanks Trish.

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  20. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Maybe. Will she? Maybe not.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He can but hope and wait. Thanks Keith

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  21. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    i guess, hope springs eternal. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      We need more of it at the moment!

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  22. Danny James Avatar
    Danny James

    Bet the wait will be long.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      But will it be worth it? Thanks Danny

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  23. notestowomen Avatar
    notestowomen

    What a moving story, Iain. I can feel his longing and the hope he has that she would return one day. I hope for his sake that she does. Great friend, that Frank.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks so much 🙂

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  24. Rowena Avatar
    Rowena

    Such a poignant story, Iain. We judge those who cheat and are disloyal and then you get folk like this character who never let go. I feel his pain and sorrow. I am so grateful for the Franks of this world. We need more of them. They usually fly under the radar and don’t seek glory but they are life savers doing what many of us would like to do.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rowena. Here’s to more Franks 🙂

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  25. GHLearner Avatar
    GHLearner

    Maybe she’ll be back… depending on how and why she disappeared in the first place. Sad mood but with a bit of hope through the friendly gesture from the coffee shop owner.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  26. pennygadd51 Avatar
    pennygadd51

    It’s amazing how little can sometimes be enough to knock a whole life off-course. I fear she won’t be back, though.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I fear not, thanks Penny

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  27. Bill Avatar
    Bill

    One can hope, but not forever. One must move on with life, eventually. One hopes. I enjoyed the scene setting, Iain. Creative.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Bill

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  28. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Wow, a lot of lost hope here yet it still feels somewhat hopeful at the end. Well written Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Laurie

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  29. Nobbinmaug Avatar
    Nobbinmaug

    Sometimes, we have to cling to hope like a liferaft because that’s exactly what it is.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Very true. Thank you

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