CAN’T SEE THE WOOD FOR THE TREES

‘There,’ Archie called, as he swept up the final leaf and dropped it in the bin.

‘Will you come in now?’ Agnes called, her voice rising over the howling gusts of wind.

‘It’s nothing but a strong breeze. Doesn’t it feel better to have the garden clean and pristine?’

‘Does it matter? The forecast says it’s a severe gale.’

‘A bit of wind is no reason to let standards slip!’

He heard the first ominous creak.

He turned and looked at the tall birch tree.

A louder creak, then a snap, then a thump as the tree landed across the lawn.

Agnes closed the door.

Copyright J Hardy Carroll

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61 responses to “CAN’T SEE THE WOOD FOR THE TREES”

  1. Let’s hope the door is enough to protect them if trees are being torn up by the roots

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    1. It was an old tree. Thanks Neil

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  2. Time to hunker down it seems, good one, Iain.

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  3. Too late for Archie, but Agnes gets a fresh start, eh! 😏

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    1. I’ve not killed him off yet, Agnes isn’t that lucky! 😉

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  4. Dear Iain,

    So much for that pristine lawn. Does Archie shovel his walk during blizzards, too? 😉 Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Of course he does! 😉

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  5. I have the feeling it’s a never-ending job…

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    1. He makes it that way for sure

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    1. Yeah, when you’re obsessed about something, you can’t just let it go.

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  6. I hope that branch didn’t fall on him…
    Sweeping fallen leaves in a breeze…sounds like a bit of a losing battle. Good story!

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  7. I hope he finally listened.
    Unless his dead.

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    1. No plans to kill him off yet, but also, he never listens! 🙂

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  8. I hope Agnes closed the door after Archie went inside! 😀

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    1. 🙂 No, left him to his own devices! 🙂

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  9. I guess he was underneath the tree?

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    1. Trapped, but hopefully not mortally wounded!

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  10. I love how Agnes shuts the door on him – tells us so much about both of them! There’s a blizzard starting up here and I need to get the snow blower out later – maybe I’ll take her approach though and shut the door instead.

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    1. Good luck – sometimes it’s best just to hunker down and wait until the storm passes!

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  11. I feel sorry for Archie, he I expect has a tidy mind

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    1. Yes, a little obssessive perhaps.

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  12. The big question that tinges this little discourse with some creepies…did Agnes shut the door glad to be rid of him or did she just give up getting the wind in her face?

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    1. A little of both I suspect!

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  13. Since we live in the woods, this happens to us just about every time there’s a strong wind. Makes for a BIG clean up in spring. Nicely done.

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  14. I know Agnes is biting her tongue so as not to say “I told you so”.

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  15. Does Mother Nature laugh when people behave like this? 🙂

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    1. I imagine so, in hysterics!

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  16. He’s going to need more than a bin and a brush to sort that out, but I’m sure he’ll find a way!

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    1. He will not be defeated!

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  17. she’s lucky to have a husband who doesn’t have to be told to clean up the yard. 🙂

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  18. One thing’s for sure – if the tree didn’t get’im, there would be plenty of leaves to clear up once the gale’s done … Nice one!

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    1. He’s got his work cut out!

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      1. Yep! Raking leaves on a windy day in the fall often is a good exercise in perceived futility … 😉

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  19. That’ll spoil a pristine lawn. I’m sure there are more leaves to come, as well.

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    1. It’s a never ending task for him 🙂

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  20. Sometimes you just have to wait until it’s over, then clean up. I loved the interaction between the two. The last line is very telling and amusing!

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  21. Love the title, Iain.
    I feel sorrow for people who are obsessed with neat & tidy. I suppose they’re hoping it’ll be the byline on their obituary.

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    1. Perhaps on their neat and tidy gravestone.

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  22. I’m glad he lives to fight another day – although he might not be, when he takes stock of the mess in his beloved garden!

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    1. The shock of that may be what gets him after all!

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  23. Gives a whole new meaning to diehard, which he may soon do if he doesn’t let up on that OCD.

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    1. Some things just can’t be left!

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  24. Woah! Did he get in or is he under the tree? Good one!

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    1. Under the tree, but alive, I think!

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  25. Oh, that’s gonna be a brutal wind I think. Did he survive I wonder? Trees can cause such damage so quickly. Great piece.

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  26. Haha. Agnes expected he’d be out there for several more hours with that tree. Good on her. Make a cuppa and watch some telly while he gets on with it. 😁

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    1. 🙂 You know Agnes well !

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