IAIN KELLY

THE ROMANTIC

He scrawled the heart on their bench, the tears streaming down his face matching the grey sleet that slashed across the sky. She would know, she would see what she had done to him. This was where they had met, on this bench. This was where she had told him it was over, that she had met someone else. He climbed the fence and looked down into the swirling river below, and jumped.

The municipal worker sighed and took out the paint remover from his van and set to work. These young kids, their graffiti messing up the city.

Twenty minutes later, the black heart was gone.

Copyright RogerBultot

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read more stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

In other writing news, I finally made it to the end of another first draft this week, only a month or so behind (my self-imposed) schedule. On to the editing and rewriting for a couple of months, but at somewhere, somehow, there will be another book!

‘The Barra Boy’ is available now. You can find all the information for getting a copy HERE.

68 responses to “THE ROMANTIC”

  1. OIKOS™- Art, Books & more Avatar

    Impressive also for Valentine. Thanks for sharing, Iain! Have a nice week! xx Michael

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I had forgotten about Valentine’s Day! It does tie in I suppose!

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  2. neilmacdon Avatar

    Lovely, Iain

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  3. Sadje Avatar

    Oh no! Now she’ll never know

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I wonder if she will realise when she finds out

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      1. Sadje Avatar

        Perhaps she will.

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  4. Mason Bushell Avatar

    Poor guy!
    You got a lot of emotion in for so few words. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Mason

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  5. Anita Avatar

    Heart & him both erased…
    Wish he didn’t have to commit suicide.
    Life is for living. Hope all understand this.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Anita

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  6. Sandra Avatar

    He’ll doubtless get carried downstream and no-one will know where he entered the water. And it doesn’t sound as though she’d care enough to find out either. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra

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  7. Tannille Avatar

    Someone is always cleaning up after vandals. I guess she didn’t see the heart.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Nope, all his effort for nothing

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  8. Heather Musk Avatar

    So much emotion here. The sadness he’s feeling and the drastic action he takes, only to be wiped away by a stranger. I enjoyed this very much, thank you.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Heather

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  9. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    So sad. The contrast of his emotion and the lack of the emotion of the other man who removed the heart added to the tragic effect. Well done. I feel you on the edits.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Rochelle, hope your edits are progressing well!

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      1. rochellewisoff Avatar

        They are…sometimes it’s two steps forward and six backward. At times it’s emotionally painful. Slaughtering those darlings and telling myself the reader will never miss them. 😉

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  10. Rowena Avatar

    Oh golly Iain, this was so beautifully and poignantly written, but absolutely devastating.
    My story was based on a suicide note which was found by a coroner’s assistant. It read: “‘I’m going to walk to the bridge. If one person smiles at me on the way, I will not jump.’” How tragic. Somehow we need to reach out to those around us who are struggling. Yet, at the same time, they’re often not responding or they’re really difficult to deal with. Yet, I’m sure we can each do a little to make someone else’s life a tad more bearable and to feel cared for and maybe even loved.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  11. granonine Avatar

    Our stories are similar, Iain, only mine doesn’t have a cold-hearted municipal worker to take off the heart 🙂

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  12. James Avatar

    That’s just plain tragic.

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  13. msjadeli Avatar

    Sick at heart after reading this. I’m glad she’ll never know.

    Happy you’re on to another book, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      1. msjadeli Avatar

        You’re very welcome.

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  14. Michael Avatar
    Michael

    A powerful piece of writing Iain,

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Michael

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  15. CGraith Avatar

    That photo was sure to spawn some broken hearts. Your story has more than just that behind it though. The character wished to inflict pain as his last act but even that was denied him.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Danny

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  16. trishsplace Avatar

    How sad! A huge moment in one person’s life, a mess to clean up for another. Perspective.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Trish

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  17. authorfleurl Avatar

    So sad, with so much emotion and two different perspectives. In just 100 words. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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      1. authorfleurl Avatar

        You’re welcome 😊

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  18. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    The municipal worker will never know what he actually did. A sorrowful story, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith

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  19. Liz Young Avatar

    What a sad tale, a wasted life as well as a wasted gesture.

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  20. Dale Avatar

    Oh these heartsick fools… All for naught (as they always are). Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Dale 🙂

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  21. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar

    I like how you basically erased this young man by using the clean-up crew.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yep! Thanks Alicia 🙂

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  22. Bill Avatar

    Love. What harm could it do?

    Well told and deep, Iain.

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  23. Dawn M. Miller Avatar

    That black heart has brought some sad stories.
    Good one Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It has indeed. Thanks Dawn

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  24. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    How easily we’re erased. Nothing seems quite as Earth-shattering as a broken heart.

    Congratulations on finishing your draft. It’s odd how it still seems like it’s an accomplishment and just the beginning at the same time.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you.

      Yes, relief to have made it to the end end, despair that it’s time to go back to the start!

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  25. Justawriter Avatar
    Justawriter

    That was intense and packed with emotion. I loved the piece.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  26. plaridel Avatar

    sad story. too bad it ended that way. 😦

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Some stories are just sad. Thank you!

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  27. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Oh. This is very tragic. And then the message left behind is scrubbed away. Truly sad. No one will know.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Laurie

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  28. Nan Falkner Avatar

    Poor Guy, he lost his love and his message was erased. So very sad.

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  30. britcanwrites Avatar

    OMG, Iain. So sad. I’m half-shocked, half-heartbroken. Nice one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  31. Patricia Clair Avatar
    Patricia Clair

    So good, so original – and heartbreakingly true. Some romantic gestures are just never seen, known, understood.

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