IAIN KELLY

JOURNEY

There he was again. Always in the same seat, always at the same time, always on the same bus route.

Did the old man notice her the same way she noticed him? Did he wonder where she went everyday?

Of course not. Her uniform gave it away.

Him though? Where did he go?

He never met her eyes, even though she willed him to, always looking straight out the window.

***

The young girl who looked at him everyday approached him. He had been expecting it.

She introduced herself, he smiled at her. He knew what she wanted to know.

‘This was where we met,’ he told her.

Copyright Brenda Cox

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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36 responses to “JOURNEY”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    Some days you can’t get into my local cafe for time travellers. Fun story, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Neil, just a simple tale of an old man and a young girl on a bus – but time travel could be an interesting place to take it.

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  2. Sadje Avatar
    Sadje

    Intriguing last line 👍🏼

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Sadie

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      1. Sadje Avatar
        Sadje

        You’re welcome Iain

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  3. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    A variety of back stories here – just the way I like it. Sorry if this posts twice.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Sandra, glad you liked, and just the one post!

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  4. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    It sounds like they were meant to meet. LIke Sandra says, a variety of back stories could be worked in. You left me wanting to know more.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rochelle, good to leave a bit of mystery

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  5. James Avatar
    James

    More time travel. Good.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Funny that people are reading time travel into it. I wrote it as just a simple tale of an old man and a young girl.

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  6. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    Intriguing. I can’t quite pinpoint what’s going on but I know something is.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It’s a simple tale really.

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  7. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    My initial thought was that he was her estranged father. I think I’m reading too much into it though!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      That would make for a great story. Thanks Keith

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  8. GHLearner Avatar
    GHLearner

    Oh, time travel. He must love her very much if he travels back to that place. But where is his younger self? Or does she now travel with the old man? Intriguing story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks, another seeing time travel – I hadn’t intended it as such, but intriguing ideas!

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  9. Elizabeth Young Avatar
    Elizabeth Young

    More questions than answers in this intriguing tale.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Liz

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  10. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar
    Alicia Jamtaas

    I like the fact that we both focused on the man in the right-hand window of the upper deck of the bus. I agree with Elizabeth, more questions than answers in your story and that’s a good thing.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Alicia 🙂

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  11. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    Oh my goodness was not expecting that, Iain. Good storytelling.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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      1. msjadeli Avatar
        msjadeli

        You’re welcome.

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  12. athling2001 Avatar
    athling2001

    I’m glad they finally met. Good story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks

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  13. The Sicilian Storyteller Avatar
    The Sicilian Storyteller

    So very romantic, Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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  14. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    I like the time travel.angle.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Dawn

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  15. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar
    Brenda’s Thoughts

    So much left to the imagination. I’m with Neil, in that it took me down a time travellers storyline. Loved it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Brenda

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  16. britcanwrites Avatar
    britcanwrites

    Aw … loved this. It makes me want to know what happens next. Nicely done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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  17. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Ooooo time travel. I love it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Laurie

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