JOURNEY

There he was again. Always in the same seat, always at the same time, always on the same bus route.

Did the old man notice her the same way she noticed him? Did he wonder where she went everyday?

Of course not. Her uniform gave it away.

Him though? Where did he go?

He never met her eyes, even though she willed him to, always looking straight out the window.

***

The young girl who looked at him everyday approached him. He had been expecting it.

She introduced herself, he smiled at her. He knew what she wanted to know.

‘This was where we met,’ he told her.

Copyright Brenda Cox

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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36 responses to “JOURNEY”

  1. Some days you can’t get into my local cafe for time travellers. Fun story, Iain

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    1. Thanks Neil, just a simple tale of an old man and a young girl on a bus – but time travel could be an interesting place to take it.

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  2. Intriguing last line 👍🏼

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      1. You’re welcome Iain

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  3. A variety of back stories here – just the way I like it. Sorry if this posts twice.

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    1. Thanks Sandra, glad you liked, and just the one post!

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  4. Dear Iain,

    It sounds like they were meant to meet. LIke Sandra says, a variety of back stories could be worked in. You left me wanting to know more.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, good to leave a bit of mystery

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  5. More time travel. Good.

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    1. Funny that people are reading time travel into it. I wrote it as just a simple tale of an old man and a young girl.

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  6. Intriguing. I can’t quite pinpoint what’s going on but I know something is.

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    1. It’s a simple tale really.

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  7. My initial thought was that he was her estranged father. I think I’m reading too much into it though!

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    1. That would make for a great story. Thanks Keith

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  8. Oh, time travel. He must love her very much if he travels back to that place. But where is his younger self? Or does she now travel with the old man? Intriguing story.

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    1. Thanks, another seeing time travel – I hadn’t intended it as such, but intriguing ideas!

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  9. More questions than answers in this intriguing tale.

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  10. I like the fact that we both focused on the man in the right-hand window of the upper deck of the bus. I agree with Elizabeth, more questions than answers in your story and that’s a good thing.

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    1. Thank you Alicia 🙂

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  11. Oh my goodness was not expecting that, Iain. Good storytelling.

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  12. I’m glad they finally met. Good story.

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  13. I like the time travel.angle.

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  14. So much left to the imagination. I’m with Neil, in that it took me down a time travellers storyline. Loved it!

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  15. Aw … loved this. It makes me want to know what happens next. Nicely done.

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  16. Ooooo time travel. I love it!

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