THE AWAKENING

He awoke as the earth started moving. He was rising, bumping his way up to heaven. He thought it would have been a gentler journey. Instead his head thudded with the sound of heavy machinery and he was tossed around the beat-up car he had fallen asleep in.

With a bang, everything stopped. The car hung swaying in the air.

‘You homeless bums are going to get me a manslaughter charge one of these days. Get the hell out of there!’

He scrambled out the broken door and fell six foot to the ground. He got up and ran.

He had nowhere to run to, he had no family to return to.

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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53 responses to “THE AWAKENING”

  1. He only wanted somewhere to sleep.

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    1. Don’t we all. Thanks!

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  2. Oh poor bugger! At least the junk crane operator saw him; even if he did make him jump the six feet!

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    1. It could have been a lot worse. Thanks Dale

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  3. Dear Iain,

    Sounds like it could be the beginning of a bigger story. At any rate, I felt for him.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Ian, what a good take on the prompt, if a little uncomfortable for character and reader, alike.

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  5. Six feet? That’s a broken ankle and a lawsuit for sure

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    1. Only if he can afford the lawyer.

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  6. There are so many homeless people these days. I’m clueless about how to help. Well done.

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  7. Good, and sad Iain. Amazing he didn’t break something in the fall though.
    Well done.

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  8. Brilliant take on the prompt!

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  9. Just looking for a place to lay his head.

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  10. Good thing he woke up and the operator noticed him. Well done.

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  11. oh my, he needs to find another place to sleep tonight.

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  12. A sad sign of our times. There are so many homeless people.

    Since it’s been a very cold winter up north, many homeless

    people have navigated their way to Florida. His fear and frustration

    are palpable.

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  13. Does any other species discard their own like trash? At least he wasn’t compacted like trash.

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    1. We are unique in so many ways!

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  14. I just love the notion of a ‘bumpy ride to heaven’. And then the ‘awakening’. Great title, and a very entertaining story (and also a bit sad – the poor man with no home to go to).

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    1. Thanks Margaret, glad you saw the humour in it as well as the tragedy.

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  15. After an uplifting start, he came back down with a bump. Sad.

    *I’m shortly off to sunnier climes for a few days of R&R, and be I’ll taking your new book with me!

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    1. Excellent, enjoy the book, and more importantly, the R&R!

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  16. I must be in the spam again…

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  17. Good job of describing his disorientation and showing empathy for your MC.

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  18. What a sad, sad world.

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  19. And now nowhere to sleep. Tough or what? But still, he didn’t make it as far as the crusher.

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    1. That’s the bright side.

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  20. Loved this as always! I’m buying that book!

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    1. 🙂 Thanks so much Rosemary! Let me know how you get on with it!

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  21. One man’s trash is another’s treasured bedroom. Off to the next adventure. 🙂

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  22. Excellent!
    Perfect for the prompt.

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  23. I’ve often wondered if that happens and how frequently. Poor bloke. Hope he finds somewhere better for the next night.

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    1. Let’s hope so, thanks Laurie 🙂

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  24. Well done! You developed connection, sympathy and interest in 100 words. I’d like to know more…

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    1. Thanks so much Angela

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  25. Very interestingly told. There are so many out there who have no place to go to or sleep. It’s sad.

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