‘What in the name of the Lord is that heap of junk doing here?’
‘Why it’s the ‘Daisy May.’ You remember, my Grandaddy’s old truck.’
‘I know what it is, Dennis. I asked what is it doing here, outside my porch.’
‘Well, Grandma was going to junk it now that Grandaddy has passed on. But I said I couldn’t let her do that. So she said then I could take the thing. So here it is.’
‘And what are you intending to do with it?’
‘Well I thought I could do it up then maybe we could take it for a drive like we used to do on Grandaddy’s farm.’
‘Dennis Barnes, take your hands off me and wipe that stupid look off your face. You think I’m goin’ to carry on like a teenager in that thing with you again, you can think again. And get it out of my sight. What will the neighbors think?’
Estelle slammed the front door closed and smiled. She loved that crazy man and always would.
Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.
To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
Love! This is my favorite yet. The opening pulls you in and the ending makes you want to visit these two more.
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Wow, thanks John. Couldn’t really think where to go with this prompt, so just started writing a couple of characters and see where it would take me. Glad it impressed you.
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I love them Iain. Well done xx
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Thanks Shehanne x
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This is cute Ian. Kind of romantic I’d think from Estelle’s POV, though she wouldn’t let her husband know that. I liked the realism in this story touched with a bit of whimsy 🙂
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Thanks Mandi, glad you got it all 🙂
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I love this Iain. The dialogue is great. And while I am not sure of the setting, I actually read the whole thing with a southern accent (lol).
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Ha, that’s good, I had somewhere south in mind, so glad it came across that way! Thanks, very kind.
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😉
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Hahaha! I love this! Loved the ending! Great story Iain!
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Thanks PJ! 🙂
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That’s good. I like her smiling at the end.
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Thanks Sascha.
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Their voices are so unique and compelling! An exchange of words, only, makes up the majority of this piece; and yet, I can see, hear, and “feel” them in my own way. I love that! Great job
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Thanks Izzy, really pleased you read it that way, very kind comments 🙂
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haha very funny, “what will the neighbors think”, is every woman’s go to line to point out how ridiculous they think something is.
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It seemed like something she would say if she was telling him off, but not in an entirely serious way 🙂
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I wish I could write dialogue half as good as what you have just done. Great writing 🙂
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reminded me of the hillbillies somehow – great dialogue! You managed to give Estelle words that made her so endearing! Loved it much!
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Thanks, always grateful for your comments 🙂
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Charming story. I know you were going for an American south feel, but having a Dad who grew up in Oklahoma, most folks here don’t say “daft”.
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Thanks James. Although I’m not specific about location you’re probably right. What would be the equivalent expression?
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There’s more than one possible, but the most likely word is “crazy”. It’s pretty region agnostic.
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Duly noted, I may edit the word. Thanks for the tip.
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No worries. My last two “On (day of the week) the Time Traveler (something) stories contained British and Irish characters, so I probably messed up their dialogue.
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That’s why having a few handy connections on the internet is a very useful thing!
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I read it with a Southern accent as well. Enjoyable story!
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Thanks Loretta, I’m glad that’s coming across- it sounded that way in my head!
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Crazy men are the best men – at least that’s what always say in my defence! Nice one Iain
My story is Daisy May
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Thanks Keith, I agree 🙂
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Aww I love the realness you brought to the couple. They really do sound and feel like a couple in love ^_^
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Thanks Jade, glad you liked it 🙂
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fun 🙂 and downright accurate!
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Thanks Samantha 🙂
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Aww… this was so sweet and romantic. I love it.
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I love the title too
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Thank you, very kind, glad you liked it.
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This is sweet. I bet Dennis made her have twinkle in her eyes 🙂
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Thanks Jacqueline, glad you saw that side of it 🙂
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