IAIN KELLY

OBSESSION

I watch the fire fading in the chiminea, poking at the dying embers with a stick.

Three in the morning and the party was winding down. Everyone else had gone inside half an hour ago.

Beth had gone inside, with Daniel’s arm draped round her shoulders. I wish it could have been me in Daniel’s place.

If only I could talk to her again. She no longer answers my e-mails, text messages or voice mails.

If only she would invite me to her parties again. then I wouldn’t have to creep around like this.

I have to get her to listen, to pay attention to me. That’s why I’ve come prepared tonight.

Car doors round the front of the house. Everyone is leaving. Except Daniel and Beth. And me.

I open the bag I have brought with me. The knife and rope are for Daniel and Beth. The hammer I take out.

If we hadn’t argued over this stupid chiminea things would have been okay. It smashes to pieces.

A light goes on in the house. I look up and see Beth and Daniel at the window.

I smile and wave. Our party has only just begun.


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© Dawn Miller

Written as part of Sunday Photo Fiction. Write a story of around 200 words based on the photo prompt given (above). Hosted by Al Forbes. For more details visit HERE.

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33 responses to “OBSESSION”

  1. csheldonblog Avatar

    Slightly confused is this about the hammer or the urns lol!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s about the hammer smashing the urns… 🙂

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  2. shehannemoore Avatar

    OOOH…. Nicely turned round from the opening line.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, it turned round as I was writing it!

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      1. shehannemoore Avatar

        These are the best stories.

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  3. angietrafford Avatar

    Really enjoyed this one 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Angie 🙂

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  4. Sandra Avatar

    Definitely sounds like an obsessive. You won’t find me arguing with him over the chiminea. 😦

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Something must have happened in his childhood with a chiminea 🙂

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  5. James Avatar

    He’s one seriously disturbed little toon.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He has some issues for sure.

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  6. The Voice Avatar

    You’ve put a nice gender twist on the old expression “Hell hath no fury…” I enjoyed the dark tone. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, appreciate your comment.

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  7. Liz Husebye Hartmann Avatar

    Evil and twisty, in the best way!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Liz 🙂

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  8. Kecia Sparlin Avatar

    The world is a better place with one less chiminea. Thank you.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, and yes!

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  9. goroyboy Avatar

    Titilating snippet, well done.

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  10. ceayr Avatar

    Nicely built story, Iain, and I like that I am not the bad guy this week!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It should be shared around now and then. Happy to take a turn!

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  11. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Watch out Beth and Daniel! Nice one Iain.

    Click to read my story!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith

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  12. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    Oh my…I don’t think Daniel or Beth are going to have fun at this party!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      No they won’t. He on the other hand sounds like he’s really looking forward to it!

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      1. Iain Kelly Avatar

        Thanks for the prompt photo, sorry I made such a sinister tale from it 🙂

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  13. Dahlia Avatar

    I have a feeling Beth and Daniel are wising up to his intentions. At least I am hoping! Nicely done 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I hope so, but I’m not sure they can do anything to stop him!

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  14. Sunday Fiction Avatar

    That’s the way to win her back. What could go wrong? Good story Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Well if she won’t listen to reason, how else can he convince her?! Thank you 🙂

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