He found the phone booth that would provide a secure landline connection.
He punched in the number. Two rings and a click.
‘Danny?’ Her voice was tired.
‘Did you do it?’ he asked. He pictured the blood-spattered body.
‘I had orders.’
‘I have to come after you.’
‘I’ll guess I’ll be seeing you.’ The line went dead.
Danny slammed the receiver down. She had promised she was finished.
He walked back to the apartment and turned on his smartphone. His location would be revealed immediately, the microphone would be recording. He dialled the office.
‘Detective Thompson. Senator Carmichael is dead.’
Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).
Although this stands alone as a piece of intrigue, in my mind it is a sort of sequel to a previous Friday Fictioneers story which you can find here: HAPPY NEW YEAR.
To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
Satisfyingly complex, Iain. It extends well beyond the 100 words
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Thanks Neil, there is a longer story kicking about there if I can ever nail it down and write it. Glad that you sense that too.
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Im curious. What happens then?
What did that call say…
Awesome read
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Thank you, definitely room to continue this story!
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This is as complex as any thriller I’ve ever watched! Then what?
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Thanks Jane – I’m glad it seems to be intriguing people – now I just have to write the long version of what happens next.
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That could turn into a much longer project! Good luck 🙂
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Intriguing, both episodes.
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Thanks Sandra.
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Hmmm….. great lead in to a bigger story (hopefully) 🙂
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One day (hopefully). Thank you.
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There’s nothing worse than a hit-woman lying about being retired!
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Gripping tale, but no denouement which is desperately needed. Please!
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Thanks Patrick – I’ll need to think of one now…
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Dear Iain,
Sounds like the beginning of a longer political thriller. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle
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Hoped he wiped off the receiver! Nicely told
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A microcosmic story macrocosmic in its telling. Great prose.
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Thanks Kelvin
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I admire the versatility of your themes and how effortlessly you alter and match-up .
Great story!
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Thanks Moon
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Tightly written, intriguing piece. Loved it up to the last line then wondered if the names were significant?
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In all honesty, I haven’t thought far enough ahead to tell whether they’re significant names of not. There was no intention to relate to anything else… at the moment. Thanks CE
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Shades of Det. Sand’s adventure! It would be a great story to be immersed in!
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Thanks Annie – so nice you remembered Det. Sand. Definitely in the same mould.
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I “spent” a month with him and looked forward to his next move each day – he was pretty unforgettable 🙂
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I can see this expanding into a great story. Well done.
xx Rowena
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Yet another challenging murder mystery. You should become a crime writer.
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Thanks James – if only someone would pay me to do just that 😉
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I know the feeling.
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Keep it coming!!
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Thanks Liz, I’m encouraged by everyone’s comments. There’s a much longer story there to write 🙂
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Intriguing story–there were so many ways to take this. Well told!
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Thank you!
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Read your earlier post ,’Happy New Year’.
a well crafted political thriller. Can I expect a continuation to this interesting story?
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/07/the-sunday-call.html
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Thanks, possibly could do. I think it could be the spark for a novel length story.
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As always, nice writing and dialogue.
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Thank you Eva 🙂
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This is intriguing! I agree with Neil. I would love to read more!
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Thanks for the encouragement Sascha
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You’re very welcome! Please let us know if you do write further on it.
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A detective and a hitgirl. A potent mix made exclusively for explosive romance. Great write up, Iain. I’m with the majority in suggesting that you expand on this one.
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Thanks Varad – think I’m going to have to get writing this now!
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Excellent, Iain! I have to agree, nice and tight and goes well with the first chapter or on its own. Loved it.
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Thanks Dale, always appreciated 🙂
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A good “bad” scene, compact and well executed — pardon the pun.
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Thank you Christine
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Sounds like he’s quite tight with the hit woman, but he still has his job to do. Nice one!
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Yep, he’s in a tight spot. Thanks.
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A juicy snippet from an intriguing tale. You never fail to enthral Iain!
Click to read my FriFic
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Very kind Keith.
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Wow, Iain! Touch and go! I’m just wondering how this will work out. Good intrigue. Any plans for it?
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Certainly seem to be a lot of comments asking for more – stay tuned!
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Interesting! You should expand this story.
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Thank you, definitely a possibility.
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Well, that’s a complicated relationship they’ve got going on there! Unsustainable, I’d say. Intriguing tale, Iain and I liked your sparse, cut back language, fitting for a thriller scenario. Nicely done
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Thanks Lynn
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Great story, beautifully written. I’m fascinated by what he might see in her – and she in him – and how on earth they’ll be able to maintain a relationship. My money’s on him turning bad…
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Ye of little faith! I think he will try to save her rather than go bad himself… maybe!
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Reminds me of Carmen and Don Jose…
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An entire first chapter in 100 words!
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Thanks Liz
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Tightly written, Iain. A great opening page for a novel. 5 stars.
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Thank you, just have to write the rest of it now…
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Wow. Lots of intrigue going on with that phone!
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Thank you
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Ooooo so layered! I’m fascinated. Yes write more i say
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Thanks Laurie, I’m working on it 🙂
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i think there’s more to the story than meets the eye. for instance, why didn’t he call office using the landline?
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Certainly a lot to be revealed.
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Lots of intrigue in this one. I tensed up while reading it.
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Thanks Dawn, that’s a good reaction to a thriller!
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Never knew who was on the other end before smart phones and called I’D. A mystery… good take!
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Thanks Courtney
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Yes, as was stated above — you must continue this story and give us some resolution.
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Thanks Sandra, I will try my best!
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Plot to a bigger story. Very nicely done. 🙂
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Thanks Natasha
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That’s the problem when assassins/ members of the security services have relationships with each other. So much is hinted at here, giving us chapters not just 100-words.
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Thanks Sarah Ann, lots of good feedback inspiring me to write more about these characters.
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I’ll look forward to more then.
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Do I read romance between the lines? Very taut little thriller!
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Thank you, definitely some connection between them.
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Interesting … I’m reading that he has a soft spot for her, or at least a sneaking admiration, assassin that she is!
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Thanks Sarah, definitely something going on there.
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I agree with others here that there was so much between the lines, it kept you thinking long after it was finished. I enjoyed it!
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Thank you Helen, very kind.
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She is not a one hit wonder then? Intriguing story, waiting for the sequel.
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Seems like she has done it before. Thanks.
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Oh, twisty and very intriguing. I’d love to read more, too. Great writing.
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