He felt broken. Battered. Alone.

No one believed him.

There was no body.

But there was a criminal.

Out there. A murderer.

He was sure of it.

Someone had to deliver justice.


Written as part of #MicroMondays, hosted by Varad over at Loose End Of The Thread. For more information and to join in visit HERE.

Each week we are given a set word count for a piece of micro fiction, and a quote from a book that must be included in the story. This week’s quote to be included was ‘But there was a criminal’ and the word count was 33.

Read other stories based on the prompt HERE.

20 responses to “BUT THERE WAS A CRIMINAL”

  1. The MC is all alone without clues or evidence and only his instincts with him. That desperation would make for a great story arc. The staccato sentences add a lot to the scene as well. Good one, Iain. Glad to have you onboard with #MicroMondays.

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    1. Thanks Varad, enjoyed it. Look forward to seeing what others come up with 🙂

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  2. OOH. A slightly diff departure for you Iain but still an area you excel in.

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    1. Thank you – quite a challenge with so few words allowed on this one!

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  3. This was deep – in so few words. Thanks!

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    1. You’re welcome, thank you for the kind comment!

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  4. You have brought out so much in so few words! Nicely done!

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  5. I though there was a great story in this poem.

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    1. Thank you for reading.


  6. I like this. Great job. This week seemed easier than last week, at least to me.

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    1. Thanks Corina, let’s see what next week brings! 🙂


    2. *Channeling one Stinson, Barnabus* – Challenge Accepted! 😀

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    This tale could actually lead to a great suspense drama…
    Good one Ian!

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  8. those few words convey a lot. 33 words is really challenging to write!


  9. This is one determined character, so well drawn. I imagine he’ll find his criminal.

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