IAIN KELLY

A NOS MORTS

The bugle sounded, the flag was lowered. Feet shuffled on gravel.

The silence was broken by the diesel engine of a barge. They didn’t close the canal anymore.

Some her mother had nursed back to full health, some never recovered. One her mother married.

Twenty years later she was alongside her mother as men repeated the same mistakes. She remembered the faces, the blood, the screams. The cost of war.

She was the last of them, the nurses of the Hôpital Temporaire d’Arc-en-Barrois.

Would anyone remember those men once she was gone?

The barge carried on along the canal.


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Copyright Sandra Crook

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

104 responses to “A NOS MORTS”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Beautiful and haunting, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Neil.

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      1. prior.. Avatar

        neil had the two words I was feeling – beauitful and haunting…
        I also loved the bit of meter in the flow here –
        would make a great read aloud…
        slowing down with
        ” She remembered the faces

        the blood
        the screams.”

        long pause – and look around
        and quietly saying:

        “The cost of war.”

        so good!!

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      2. Iain Kelly Avatar

        Thank you so much, appreciate the detailed comment 🙂

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  2. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    Lest we forget. Hopefully, they will be remembered as will she. Excellent Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Keith.

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  3. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    Intriguing piece. I like the language.

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  4. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Tragically well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Rochelle.

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  5. subroto Avatar

    Lovely story Iain. Yours is a historical fiction too. I think you should add this link to the hospital’s name https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/H%C3%B4pital_Temporaire_d%27Arc-en-Barrois

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – I did read the same link, but didn’t want to link to it as I’m not sure it is the exact same place, but now you have provided the information 🙂

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  6. ceayr Avatar

    Superb piece of writing, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you CE.

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  7. Jane Dougherty Avatar

    So it really was a hospital? Good story, Iain. The true tragedy of war is that it is forgotten, or glamorised and sugar-coated.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It had that look to me so I went with it. I agree, feels like we have completely forgotten the tragedy of it at the moment.

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

        The commemoration industry has taken over, seems to me.

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  8. J. E. Kennedy Avatar

    Gripping and tragic, well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much.

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  9. Snow's Fissures and Fractures Avatar

    We run in circles and repeat our mistakes. Well written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Lori

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  10. Rowena Avatar

    Very well written and thought out. I really loved it and found it very touching.
    xx Rowena

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Rowena, very kind, glad you liked it.

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  11. Sandra Avatar

    Very nicely done. I could almost hear that barge.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I imagine you were steering it down the canal Sandra 🙂

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  12. mandibelle16 Avatar
    mandibelle16

    There’s great ambience feeling to this. You express such sorrow well, along with this hopeless dream that no one will forget those sacrifice in war; we always do at some time. Great piece!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, it feels like we have forgotten it at the moment for sure.

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  13. thebookwormdrinketh Avatar

    Wow. The same mistakes repeated again and again. What sorrow. Great writing!!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  14. pennygadd51 Avatar

    I love the writing in your story. It’s simple, clean, elegant. Absolutely direct and to the point, choosing such good little incidents to convey the atmosphere. The barge was a particularly good touch.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Penny, so pleased you appreciated it.

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  15. Varad Avatar

    Beautiful tone in this tale, Iain. Nice piece of historical fiction.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Varad.

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  16. granonine Avatar

    lain, I think this is now my favorite of your stories. Such a haunting sense of sadness, at the same time shwoing compassion. Really well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much, a very kind comment.

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  17. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    So well written, Iain. Such a tragedy, beautifully told.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Dale 🙂

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  18. jillyfunnell Avatar

    Iain, you have conveyed so much with just a few words. Very moving.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Jilly.

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  19. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar

    Oh, Iain. I love where you took this! I do believe it’s one of your best. My heart is breaking ~ just a little.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Alicia, such a nice compliment.

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  20. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    Love it—who will remember? it’s like those barges passing….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Bjorn, that was the little connection I was trying to weave into the story, so glad you saw it.

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      1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

        Ha.. being a poet I always spot the metaphor.

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  21. Jelli Avatar
    Jelli

    A beautiful memorial.. who will remember, indeed.

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  22. Edith M. Field Avatar

    A moving story, Iain. So very well written. I love the powerful imagery of people passing by regardless, so cleverly personified in the indifferent movement of the barge.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Edith, I’m glad you appreciated that image.

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  23. Alice Audrey Avatar

    In the long span of history, how many such barges have passed?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      An interesting thought, thank you ALice

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  24. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist Avatar

    A beautiful story Iain. The cairns might make some wonder and find out but over time so much is forgotten.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Irene.

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  25. Moon Avatar
    Moon

    Brilliant, Iain. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Moon.

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  26. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    Such a powerful piece of historical fiction.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you very much.

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  27. James McEwan Avatar

    I liked how you made the connection to the wars. There was also a reminder of the futile idea that WW! was the war to end all wars.
    I enjoyed reading this.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks James.

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  28. draliman Avatar

    A very grim tale, very nicely written.

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  29. Vivian Zems Avatar

    A good tale you spun here. War generates so many memories.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Vivian

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      1. Vivian Zems Avatar

        My pleasure.

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  30. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    For a few years I worked in a ‘former’ WWI hospital, built using wooden huts. Now that hospital and its memory are long gone. In years to come it may be completely forgotten. Your interesting story delivered memories. Thank you

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Michael, it’s important we don’t completely forget the places and the people from the past.

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  31. Woman walking Max Avatar

    A beautifully written story, written with a delicate and elegiac touch, so expressive. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much, a lovely comment.

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  32. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Ghosts of the past and the circle repeats. Great themes in this one Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Laurie 🙂

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  33. plaridel Avatar

    war does represent the best and the worst in mankind.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Neel

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  34. Sarah Ann Avatar
    Sarah Ann

    Great the way you pack so much in. This has an overwhelming weight about it – the barge representing life going on, almost as a disrespect to those who have died. Definitely a story that lingers.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much, very kind.

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  35. liz young Avatar

    A moving take on the prompt. Traffic doesn’t stop on Armistice Day in London either.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’ve noticed over the years that less and less people stop what they are doing to observe the minutes silence.

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  36. mumpoet Avatar

    How very sad and how very sad that this is very true – a lot of people tend to forget about what they don’t experience first hand or learn through family members. Very nicely written 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much.

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  37. patrickprinsloo Avatar

    Lest we forget. I once observed a service at one of the WW2 cemeteries in France. A moving experience.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I’m sure it would be. Thank you Patrick.

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  38. Dawn M. Miller Avatar

    Beautiful story.

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  39. Dan Bohn Avatar

    Lain, wow! An excellent gripping story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Dan, much appreciated.

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  40. Jan Vanek Avatar

    Beautiful tale of the cost of war, the love and respect of a woman for her mother and the passage of time. All in 100 words. Marvelous!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Jan!

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  41. Kalpana Solsi Avatar

    History repeats itself as men never learn from their or other’s mistakes. very subtle language.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, glad you appreciated it.

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  42. Inside the Mind of Isadora Avatar

    I must agree with all who have left comments before me, Iian.
    The build-up to the ending is superb. I enjoyed reading very much.
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Isadora, much appreciated.

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  43. Lavanya Avatar
    Lavanya

    While most of us were writing about castles and princesses, here you come with another unexpected twist. Superb story telling as usual!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much.

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  44. Sascha Darlington Avatar

    Beautifully done, Iain. This feels like one of your more thoughtful pieces.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Sascha.

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  45. rgayer55 Avatar

    Nicely crafted, Iain. A point of view we don’t often think about–or perhaps choose not to.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – I think we choose not to imagine what a lot of people went through in those times. and still currently are around the world.

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  46. Lynn Love Avatar

    Well written story Iain. I love that image of the canal barge, life plodding on regardless as men die in their millions. Wonderfully done

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Lynn

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        My pleasure

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  47. athling2001 Avatar

    Beautiful piece of writing and a deep question which we may never be able to answer. I hope we never forget.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  48. lisarey1990 Avatar

    A very beautiful story.

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