IAIN KELLY

DIGGER!

‘Digger!’ he shouted from the back seat.

Where did it come from, this fascination with any construction or agricultural machine? Tractors, cement mixers, dumper trucks, combine harvesters, even bin lorries – all of them elicited a squeal of joy upon sight.

And so we all joined in with my son’s enthusiasm.

‘So it is, that’s a good one!’ I would reply.

‘What’s that over there?’ I would call if I managed to spot one first.

‘Bin lorry!’

‘Yes, a red one, we don’t see many of them, do we?’

I smile at the memory as I watch the small excavator at work. The claw scooping dirt from the mound of earth, swinging round and dropping it.

The sound of the earth hitting the wood below is hard and unflinching, without any sense of decorum or sentimentality.

I’m still standing there as the machine trundles away on it’s caterpillar tracks.

It is my wife who comes back for me, touching my elbow gently and steering me away from the graveside.

As we walk to the waiting car, a blue tractor growls along the road.

‘Tractor,’ I call out, but no one answers.


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Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story or poem in around 175 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge hosts Priceless Joy and Joe. For more information visit HERE.

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44 responses to “DIGGER!”

  1. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Oh man, that’s a sad one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yes, I didn’t start out with that intention, but that’s the way it went.

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  3. Jade M. Wong Avatar

    Well, that twist was heart wrenching, Iain, but well-written all the same. Great job 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Jade

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  4. Kelley Farrell Avatar

    Oh, heart wrenching!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Kelley

      Like

  5. notestowomen Avatar

    Heartbreaking.

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  6. joyroses13 Avatar

    Oh man!! Poignant!
    I think I will go back to reading your book, that’s not sad, at least not yet, will it be??? 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Erm, well… it has it’s moments!!

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        Ha Ha! I have been enjoying it!

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      2. Iain Kelly Avatar

        I am glad, do let me know what you think when you finish it 🙂

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  7. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    The end physically hurt to read. Incredible, masterful, devastating work.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much.

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  8. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar

    Beautifully poingnantly sad, great stuff as usual.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, very kind.

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  9. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    This is powerful, a picture of true love, with the three characters seen so clearly.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Michael

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Reena

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  10. pensitivity101 Avatar

    Oh Iain, this tugged at the heart strings.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Di

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  11. Lynn Love Avatar

    You rotten devil, Iain. That gave me such a punch to the chest. Especially as my son (now 14) did exactly this when he was little – though he was more often shouting car names. We used to pass regularly by a railway line and I still have to stop myself calling ‘Look, a train!’ Well constructed, just enough detail so we know what happened. Heartbreaking.
    BTW, most of the way through A Justified State – really enjoying it 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Lynn, a difficult one to write as my son also does this, so really it’s based on him – i just hope I’m never in the same situation as my protagonist here! Good to hear you are enjoying it Lynn and that someone ‘out there’ is reading it, I hope you like the ending too! 🙂

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      1. Lynn Love Avatar

        I’m liking it very much. Will let you know when I’m done – and leave an Amazon review of course 🙂

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  12. Shweta Suresh Avatar

    That’s heart-wrenching. But beautiful all the same.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Shweta, exactly as I hoped it would be.

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  13. Moushmi Radhanpara Avatar
    Moushmi Radhanpara

    This was really sad.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It is, but then sometimes life is.

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  14. JS Brand Avatar

    I loved the writing Iain, but wasn’t ready for that ending.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks JS, it was intended as a hard one to take.

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  15. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    Very touching! Memory of son, poignant.

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  16. syncwithdeep Avatar
    syncwithdeep

    this is sad! yet touching.

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  17. Joe Owens Avatar

    Sometimes the story takes over Iain and we cannot do anything but write it as it comes.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Exactly what happened here Joe.

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  18. Jennie Avatar

    Sad, and well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jennie

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      1. Jennie Avatar

        You’re welcome, Iain.

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