IAIN KELLY

GILT-EDGED

Glass roses, gilt-edged with gold, smashed and splintered.

He sits among them, the broken shards of his life.

She has gone now, the fire and the fury.

She will return, he knows.

She will do it again.

Why does he put up with it?

That abstract notion of love? Loyalty?

Or shame? Shame that a woman can bully and subjugate a man.

He should be strong, he should stand up to her.

But he can’t bring himself to hurt her, in spite of it all.

He picks up a splintered petal, sharp golden edge glinting.

Here is a way out.


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Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

111 responses to “GILT-EDGED”

  1. Sandra Avatar

    He sounds truly desperate. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra

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  2. Tannille Avatar

    Chilling. Strong message Iain…

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  3. neilmacdon Avatar

    He was angry enough to smash the flowers. Maybe it’s not his own life he plans to take

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Your assuming he smashed the flowers…

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  4. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar

    Does he plan to take his own life or hers? I believe it the the latter. Superb taut story, Kelly

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Either way, it will not end well. But he has already mentioned he cannot bring himself to hurt her, so…

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  5. Violet Lentz Avatar

    Oooo deliciously dark…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Violet

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  6. pensitivity101 Avatar

    I feel for him. Too often we forget men can be victims too.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Di, that was the intention to highlight this.

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      1. pensitivity101 Avatar

        Have known a couple of instances Iain.

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  7. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Dark and foreboding. You leave this reader with lots of questions. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Rochelle.

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  8. ceayr Avatar

    Well, Iain, she sounds like a sweetheart!
    He should be thinking of running.
    Strong story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you. Yes, it’s hard to understand the reasoning if you have never experienced that sort of relationship.

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  9. granonine Avatar

    There is such sadness in both your characters: A woman who cannot or will not control her rage; a man who is too gentle by nature to stand up to her and is thinking of death as the only way out. Really good, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Linda

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  10. pennygadd51 Avatar

    “The fire and the fury” I felt that phrase accounted for at least some of her attraction for him – he’s hooked on the violent emotions she kindles. But it’s a seriously abusive relationship, and he needs help.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Penny – that’s it, love can be used as an excuse for many behaviours.

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  11. scr4pl80 Avatar

    Not too many people think about abuse of this kind. Maybe you should start a new movement. Good story, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Janet, I would leave that role to someone who has experienced it, but it is something that should be more out in the open.

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  12. Gisselle Hernandez Avatar
    Gisselle Hernandez

    Dang, really dark. Makes you feel for the protagonist and a sense of wanting to help. Great write.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Gisselle, much appreciated

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  13. Indira Avatar

    A sense of love and loyalty both perhaps restricts some women and men from standing up. That’s why they suffer. Nicely done.

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  14. notestowomen Avatar

    Very powerful story, Iain on a rarely touched on topic. It’s true that men are victims of abuse too but that’s hardly addressed. My heart goes out to him. I hope he seeks help and not take the way out that he is contemplating.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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      1. notestowomen Avatar

        You’re welcome 🙂

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  15. J.A. Prentice Avatar

    Beautifully written. The protagonist’s plight is very sympathetically rendered and the last line is tragic.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  16. csheldonblog Avatar

    So sad, well told

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  17. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    How tragic he feels the only way out is death. He cares for her, doesn’t want to hurt her, and can’t acknowledge the problem to anyone else. He’s boxed in. Well-told story of a terribly sad hidden truth.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Brenda, you sum it up well.

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  18. lisarey1990 Avatar

    I love the ending. It’s a great twist. But the message of this story is amazing. So many men suffer domestic abuse & there is not near enough awareness about that. A really strong, great take.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Lisa

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  19. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    This is really good, Iain. I like that dark shit. The sparse opening to the trapped feeling to the twist at the end were all very well conveyed.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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  20. larry trasciatti Avatar

    Let’s just hope he doesn’t ever act on his idea

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Indeed, thanks Larry

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  21. Dale Avatar

    No good ending ahead, I fear.
    Of course, if he was a tad stronger, he would just up and leave and start anew…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I fear the strength he had has gone already. Thanks Dale.

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  22. Dawn M. Miller Avatar

    This guy needs a confidant.
    Or a new girlfriend.
    Or a prescription.
    Def needs help.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Indeed he does.

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  23. Russell Avatar

    I would advise a different way out, but that’s just me.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I think we all would, if only he would listen.

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      1. Russell Avatar

        Very true. It can be very hard to listen to advice while caught up in the situation.

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  24. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    Dark and chilling, but so is life.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It can be. Thank you

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  25. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    He took the easy way out. Nice tale.

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  26. Anita Avatar

    Poor man. He could have decided to walk away. Ending life is not the solution.
    This kind of abuse is less in comparison with men torturing women.
    Not everyone can/should put up with such nonsense and abuse; it’s not love or patience.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Anita

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  27. draliman Avatar

    A very grim scene. Domestic abuse can go go both ways.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It certainly can. Thanks.

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  28. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    There must be something about her that makes him put up with it – so far.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      The heart is a mysterious thing.

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  29. Rowena Avatar

    Ouch! I think extreme physical pain can be easier to bare than some emotional pain and being trapped in such a hopeless situation. However, I would like to see him have a change of heart. Or, perhaps for somehow to find him first. Perhaps, he can rise up and find his own feet and a way forward after all!
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Rowena, it would be nice to think he held on and decided on a better way forward.

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  30. Russell Gayer Avatar

    There are other ways out.
    Excellent story of a tortured relationship, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Russell

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  31. 4963andypop Avatar

    Very sad story. He expresses a kind of self-loathing and hopelessness that does not seem logical, but rather is seated deep in his emotional state. I sincerely hope someone walks in. Like, now!😬

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Me too! He has hit the bottom, he just needs a hand to get up.

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  32. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar

    Sad and I hope he’s not going to slit his wrists, very well told Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Hope is something he needs to rediscover. Thank you

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  33. James McEwan Avatar

    The dark side of the female of the species and no one believes their evil natures. A very emotive and difficult subject, well told.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you James.

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  34. plaridel Avatar

    whatever course he’s thinking, i don’t see a happy ending.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  35. Inside the Mind of Isadora Avatar

    The desperation comes through in every word. A truly ominous dark and sad story. Extremely well written, lain.
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Osadora

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  36. joyroses13 Avatar

    Oh gosh, getting caught up on your last few posts today is really pulling the heart strings! So well written, but I do hope a twist comes for him and he realizes that there is another way!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      So do I, I left it with that slim chance of hope.

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        Thanks for leaving some hope!

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  37. talesfromthemindofkristian Avatar

    Sad and powerful, I wanted to cry out ‘ NO! Don’t do it!”

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Absolutely, but it happens to so many who never hear those words of support

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  38. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    Sadly abuse in relationships is common in all genders even though it’s more frequent with man vs. woman. He shouldn’t do it, but in his state of mind he’d need help. Very thought-provoking.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – glad it has got you thinking

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  39. Woman walking Max Avatar

    A powerful, desperate lament – wonderfully conveyed by the bright brittle fragments of broken glass / shards of his life. Like the way it ends with a hint of how he may escape. Well written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much for a lovely comment 🙂

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  40. subroto Avatar

    We don’t really know who will be taking the way out though. With the abuse he endures maybe it’s him but then again it could her that he is thinking about.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It does have that hint of ambiguity

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  41. StuHN Avatar

    No one is worth that. Hard to walk out, though, when you feel so beat down.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      I agree, having never been in that situation, it is hard to imagine feeling so trapped and out of options.

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  42. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

    Oh my, Iain. This poor guy.
    I hope he came to his senses and found a better option than that …
    Well done!
    Na’ama

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  43. magarisa Avatar

    I can’t even imagine how difficult it would be for male victims of abuse to seek help. The fear of ridicule must loom over them.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Exactly, thank you for reading

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  44. Alice Audrey Avatar

    If only he’d picked up a suitcase instead.

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  45. Margaret Avatar

    The broken flowers are like his life – sad. I like how you’ve slowed the pace by all your line breaks to show his struggle to know how he should feel.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Margaret

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  46. The Reclining Gentleman Avatar

    Nicely told Iain. We can feel the pain and the despair.

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  47. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I think this happens more often than we think… the advice to women is always: leave before it’s too late; maybe that should be his way out.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      The same advice applies

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  48. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Oh no. A terrible choice. I hope instead he just choses to leave. No one should live a life like that

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Laurie

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  49. Soumya Prasad Avatar
    Soumya Prasad

    Nooooo, he shouldn’t have done that! Abuse is abuse, no matter who is the victim here. I wish he had stood up to her and had her punished! No one deserves to go through abuse. Definitely not at the hands of someone you love.

    Really well done, Iain. Great use of the prompt.

    My post here: http://www.lifeofleo.in/2019/02/the-inheritance-of-loss.html

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much

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