GILT-EDGED

Glass roses, gilt-edged with gold, smashed and splintered.

He sits among them, the broken shards of his life.

She has gone now, the fire and the fury.

She will return, he knows.

She will do it again.

Why does he put up with it?

That abstract notion of love? Loyalty?

Or shame? Shame that a woman can bully and subjugate a man.

He should be strong, he should stand up to her.

But he can’t bring himself to hurt her, in spite of it all.

He picks up a splintered petal, sharp golden edge glinting.

Here is a way out.


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Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

111 responses to “GILT-EDGED”

  1. He sounds truly desperate. Nicely done, Iain.

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  2. Chilling. Strong message Iain…

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  3. He was angry enough to smash the flowers. Maybe it’s not his own life he plans to take

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    1. Your assuming he smashed the flowers…

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  4. Does he plan to take his own life or hers? I believe it the the latter. Superb taut story, Kelly

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    1. Either way, it will not end well. But he has already mentioned he cannot bring himself to hurt her, so…

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  5. Oooo deliciously dark…

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  6. I feel for him. Too often we forget men can be victims too.

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    1. Thank you Di, that was the intention to highlight this.

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      1. Have known a couple of instances Iain.

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  7. Dear Iain,

    Dark and foreboding. You leave this reader with lots of questions. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Well, Iain, she sounds like a sweetheart!
    He should be thinking of running.
    Strong story.

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    1. Thank you. Yes, it’s hard to understand the reasoning if you have never experienced that sort of relationship.

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  9. There is such sadness in both your characters: A woman who cannot or will not control her rage; a man who is too gentle by nature to stand up to her and is thinking of death as the only way out. Really good, Iain.

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    1. Thank you so much Linda

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  10. “The fire and the fury” I felt that phrase accounted for at least some of her attraction for him – he’s hooked on the violent emotions she kindles. But it’s a seriously abusive relationship, and he needs help.

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    1. Thank you Penny – that’s it, love can be used as an excuse for many behaviours.

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  11. Not too many people think about abuse of this kind. Maybe you should start a new movement. Good story, Iain.

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    1. Thank you Janet, I would leave that role to someone who has experienced it, but it is something that should be more out in the open.

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    Dang, really dark. Makes you feel for the protagonist and a sense of wanting to help. Great write.

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    1. Thank you Gisselle, much appreciated

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  13. A sense of love and loyalty both perhaps restricts some women and men from standing up. That’s why they suffer. Nicely done.

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  14. Very powerful story, Iain on a rarely touched on topic. It’s true that men are victims of abuse too but that’s hardly addressed. My heart goes out to him. I hope he seeks help and not take the way out that he is contemplating.

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  15. Beautifully written. The protagonist’s plight is very sympathetically rendered and the last line is tragic.

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  16. How tragic he feels the only way out is death. He cares for her, doesn’t want to hurt her, and can’t acknowledge the problem to anyone else. He’s boxed in. Well-told story of a terribly sad hidden truth.

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    1. Thank you Brenda, you sum it up well.

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  17. I love the ending. It’s a great twist. But the message of this story is amazing. So many men suffer domestic abuse & there is not near enough awareness about that. A really strong, great take.

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    1. Thank you so much Lisa

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  18. This is really good, Iain. I like that dark shit. The sparse opening to the trapped feeling to the twist at the end were all very well conveyed.

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  19. Let’s just hope he doesn’t ever act on his idea

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  20. No good ending ahead, I fear.
    Of course, if he was a tad stronger, he would just up and leave and start anew…

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    1. I fear the strength he had has gone already. Thanks Dale.

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  21. This guy needs a confidant.
    Or a new girlfriend.
    Or a prescription.
    Def needs help.

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  22. I would advise a different way out, but that’s just me.

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    1. I think we all would, if only he would listen.

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      1. Very true. It can be very hard to listen to advice while caught up in the situation.

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  23. Dark and chilling, but so is life.

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  24. He took the easy way out. Nice tale.

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  25. Poor man. He could have decided to walk away. Ending life is not the solution.
    This kind of abuse is less in comparison with men torturing women.
    Not everyone can/should put up with such nonsense and abuse; it’s not love or patience.

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  26. A very grim scene. Domestic abuse can go go both ways.

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    1. It certainly can. Thanks.

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  27. There must be something about her that makes him put up with it – so far.

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    1. The heart is a mysterious thing.

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  28. Ouch! I think extreme physical pain can be easier to bare than some emotional pain and being trapped in such a hopeless situation. However, I would like to see him have a change of heart. Or, perhaps for somehow to find him first. Perhaps, he can rise up and find his own feet and a way forward after all!
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. Thanks Rowena, it would be nice to think he held on and decided on a better way forward.

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  29. There are other ways out.
    Excellent story of a tortured relationship, Iain.

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  30. Very sad story. He expresses a kind of self-loathing and hopelessness that does not seem logical, but rather is seated deep in his emotional state. I sincerely hope someone walks in. Like, now!😬

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    1. Me too! He has hit the bottom, he just needs a hand to get up.

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  31. Sad and I hope he’s not going to slit his wrists, very well told Iain.

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    1. Hope is something he needs to rediscover. Thank you

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  32. The dark side of the female of the species and no one believes their evil natures. A very emotive and difficult subject, well told.

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  33. whatever course he’s thinking, i don’t see a happy ending.

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  34. The desperation comes through in every word. A truly ominous dark and sad story. Extremely well written, lain.
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Thank you so much Osadora

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  35. Oh gosh, getting caught up on your last few posts today is really pulling the heart strings! So well written, but I do hope a twist comes for him and he realizes that there is another way!

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    1. So do I, I left it with that slim chance of hope.

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      1. Thanks for leaving some hope!

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  36. Sad and powerful, I wanted to cry out ‘ NO! Don’t do it!”

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    1. Absolutely, but it happens to so many who never hear those words of support

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  37. Sadly abuse in relationships is common in all genders even though it’s more frequent with man vs. woman. He shouldn’t do it, but in his state of mind he’d need help. Very thought-provoking.

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    1. Thank you – glad it has got you thinking

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  38. A powerful, desperate lament – wonderfully conveyed by the bright brittle fragments of broken glass / shards of his life. Like the way it ends with a hint of how he may escape. Well written.

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    1. Thank you so much for a lovely comment 🙂

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  39. We don’t really know who will be taking the way out though. With the abuse he endures maybe it’s him but then again it could her that he is thinking about.

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    1. It does have that hint of ambiguity

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  40. No one is worth that. Hard to walk out, though, when you feel so beat down.

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    1. I agree, having never been in that situation, it is hard to imagine feeling so trapped and out of options.

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  41. Oh my, Iain. This poor guy.
    I hope he came to his senses and found a better option than that …
    Well done!
    Na’ama

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  42. I can’t even imagine how difficult it would be for male victims of abuse to seek help. The fear of ridicule must loom over them.

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    1. Exactly, thank you for reading

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  43. If only he’d picked up a suitcase instead.

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  44. The broken flowers are like his life – sad. I like how you’ve slowed the pace by all your line breaks to show his struggle to know how he should feel.

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  45. Nicely told Iain. We can feel the pain and the despair.

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  46. I think this happens more often than we think… the advice to women is always: leave before it’s too late; maybe that should be his way out.

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    1. The same advice applies

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  47. Oh no. A terrible choice. I hope instead he just choses to leave. No one should live a life like that

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  48. Nooooo, he shouldn’t have done that! Abuse is abuse, no matter who is the victim here. I wish he had stood up to her and had her punished! No one deserves to go through abuse. Definitely not at the hands of someone you love.

    Really well done, Iain. Great use of the prompt.

    My post here: http://www.lifeofleo.in/2019/02/the-inheritance-of-loss.html

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