Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

INTERVENTION

I was never a strong swimmer, unlike him, and he was stronger.

That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run.

But he did love the water, always at the pool, showing off his toned body and admiring the girls.

So it seems only right that I leave him there, floating face down, naked, blood seeping from the slit in his throat.

They’ll blame FiFi of course, a lover’s tiff. But that’s okay, I’ll be there to support her through it.

After all, that’s what best friends are for.

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Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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93 responses to “INTERVENTION”

  1. Sneha Ganesh Avatar
    Sneha Ganesh

    Oh my! This is great

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you so much 🙂

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  2. Susan A Eames Avatar
    Susan A Eames

    Oh, gosh, what a dark story. Great take on the photo prompt, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Susan, yes, I gave in and just went with a dark one this week!

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  3. Varad Avatar
    Varad

    Yes, that’s exactly what the jealous best friend is for. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Always good to have someone watching your back…!

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  4. robertawrites235681907 Avatar
    robertawrites235681907

    I do like this, Iain, especially the last line.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Roberta 🙂

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  5. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    She’s made a mistake. There’s too much self-congratulation here for her not to have

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Next chapter sees the jaded detective arrive on the scene and spot something that doesn’t quite fit…

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  6. Colline Avatar
    Colline

    Love this twisty piece! Now I am curious as to how she did it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Colline, I think there may have been some seduction involved – you have to use what talents you have 🙂

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  7. What Words May Come Avatar
    What Words May Come

    Buahahahaha… oh that little minx of a best friend!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Kevin, I wonder if she will remain a best friend for long…

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      1. What Words May Come Avatar
        What Words May Come

        And there’s the next adventure… “She didn’t appreciate what I did for her, so, I helped her understand as she lay there bleeding… I need a new best friend!”

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  8. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Makes one wonder if he was stronger, how your MC managed to slit his throat and get him into the pool… since she didn’t want to get her hair wet 😉 Of course, she could have already been in the pool and it was just a question of getting close enough to him…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      She may have used some seductive charms, he was very easily led… 😉

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      1. Dale Avatar
        Dale

        There is that…

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  9. ceayr Avatar
    ceayr

    Fifi, Iain, really?
    That made me laugh aloud, archetypal dumb blonde!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Stereotypes do help when you’ve only 100 words to play with 😉

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      1. ceayr Avatar
        ceayr

        It was wonderfully done!

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  10. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    Fifi, Bambi, Muffy, Fluffy or Buffy, you’ve made it plain that the guy was a player and his taste in women was dumb and sexy. Maybe he deserved to die, but I’m not sure Fifi deserves the consolation of his best “friend.”

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      What’s in a name, eh? Thanks Linda

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  11. J Hardy Carroll Avatar
    J Hardy Carroll

    Great little story here.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  12. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    Oh wow! I think you’ve been hanging around with CE Ayr too long. Murder most foul.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He does rub off on you eventually, it’s so relentless 😉

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  13. David Stewart Avatar
    David Stewart

    Devious plan, although I don’t know if he’s thought it out too well. He might have to visit FiFi in prison after it’s all said and done. Nice piece.
    David

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks David

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  14. Rachel Bjerke Avatar
    Rachel Bjerke

    Yikes! Poor Fifi… sort of.

    Chilling tale that I would bet somewhere out there in the world isn’t entirely fiction!

    -Rachel

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Friendships are complicated things! Thanks Rachel 🙂

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  15. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar
    neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

    Looks everyone’s got murder in his mind with this prompt.
    Excellent story, Kelly.
    That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run…
    nice reason provided for alternate course of action.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Have to take into account the practicalities. Thanks Neel

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  16. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Love the casual voice of the narrator, Nicely done Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Keith, she’s a casual kinda gal.

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  17. Russell Gayer Avatar
    Russell Gayer

    A clever, and darkly humorous piece, Iain. I’m FiFi has a good alibi.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      If not, her best friend can provide her with one I’m sure. Thanks Russell

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  18. notestowomen Avatar
    notestowomen

    Chilling tale, Iain. Poor Fifi.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  19. JoHawkTheWriter Avatar
    JoHawkTheWriter

    Watch out poor Fifi. If the cops don’t get you his best friend will. Loved it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Yes, best to stay on the right side of her it seems!

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  20. StuHN Avatar
    StuHN

    Jealousy and unrequited love. Add to it the UberMe generation, and you got naked dead bodies in the pool.

    Bodies in the Pool. Interesting name for a band

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Love can make all generations do crazy things! Thanks Stu 🙂

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  21. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    He sounds like a jerk… but maybe slicing his throat was a going a little bit too far.

    Snipping his “appendix” might have been better….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Bjorn, you have a twisted mind! 😉

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  22. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    That was a totally twisted ending. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rochelle, hope your trip is going well 🙂

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  23. Create Space Avatar
    Create Space

    Glad you’re not my best friend!!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      You don’t need helping out like Fifi?

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  24. larry trasciatti Avatar
    larry trasciatti

    While I realize that water, in western culture, always has so represented the forces of evil (goes back to the days of the ancient Jews) , you all seem to find such nefarious misconduct in this prompt. Such an appropriate murder it was..roasting him upon his own pitard

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      There does seem to be a high body count this week!

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  25. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    he mustn’t have seen it coming. i wonder what he did or didn’t do to drive her crazy enough to kill him.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think whatever it was, it existed more in her head than anywhere else.

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  26. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    We both went on a killing spree this week… Something about that water!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      We’re not the only ones!

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      1. Tannille Avatar
        Tannille

        Good to share the feel good vibe!

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  27. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    Heaven forfend she should break a nail while slaughtering him.
    Poor FiFi. With best friends like this woman…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Not a broken nail, even worse!!

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  28. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    Angry jealous girlfriend! Should not have messed with her. Now you paid through you life.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I’m not sure he really deserved it 🙂

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  29. Violet Lentz Avatar
    Violet Lentz

    Love to know the back story on this one, Iain….

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Violet, it involves teenagers in love 😉

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  30. patriciaruthsusan Avatar
    patriciaruthsusan

    A dark but good story, Iain. Great description. I could picture it. It sounds as though she doesn’t like FiFi much either. —- Suzanne

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I don’t think it’s a true friendship. Thanks Suzanne

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  31. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar
    Brenda’s Thoughts

    What a scoundrel he was! At least she didn’t get her hair wet and her make-up didn’t run. A dark story that made me chuckle. Well written and entertaining as always! =)

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Brenda

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  32. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Ooooooo dark and moody. Love the imagery here. Fabulous piece.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Laurie

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  33. Danny James Avatar
    Danny James

    FFF for sure.

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  34. Liz Young Avatar
    Liz Young

    And all the evidence washed away in chlorinated water!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Yep, no need to wipe the place clean 🙂

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  35. Woman walking Max Avatar
    Woman walking Max

    Creepily sinister — pity the poor pool attendants clearing up the blood !!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Bit of scrubbing, it comes off easy 😉

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  36. Jewel Ingalls Avatar
    Jewel Ingalls

    I’m not sure if I’m impressed or totally disturbed of the level of commitment she has to her friendship with FiFi. As always, well done!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      She does take being friends seriously:-)

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  37. James McEwan Avatar
    James McEwan

    I guess best friends should share. I would run a mile and keep going to get away from her.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I guarantee she would track you down 🙂

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  38. subroto Avatar
    subroto

    If that’s her best friend behaviour, I wonder what she would do when angry?
    Seeing the blood count this week, I think it’s better to fill a pool with soil and having a garden bed instead.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Yes, it’s put me off swimming pools for a while, far too dangerous!

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  39. Bear Avatar
    Bear

    Good one.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  40. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    She’s a devious one!
    Good portrayal.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Dawn

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  41. magarisa Avatar
    magarisa

    I imagine her walking away from the bloody pool in high heels, with her hair dry and make-up intact, making her way to a nail appointment.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Exactly 🙂

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  42. 4963andypop Avatar
    4963andypop

    Quite a cool cucumber telling this tale. Her motivation is mysterious but her skill at overcoming obstacles, unquestionable.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      She doesn’t let anything stand in her way, for sure.

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  43. Sascha Darlington Avatar
    Sascha Darlington

    whoa! Was he a player who came onto the best friend…I guess because he’s naked that must be the case. She boiling-rabbit crazy. Good one, Iain. Nice POV.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Unless of course she stripped him after the deed?! Thanks Sascha

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  44. Enkin Anthem Avatar
    Enkin Anthem

    That pool is ruined for everyone else too. Not nice!
    But great story 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  45. kzmcb Avatar
    kzmcb

    I liked the tempo best of all and I could picture the scene. The murderer’s name doesn’t bother me anywhere near what it did to the rest of your readers. But it does spur me to defend people who are judged by their names. Perhaps a story in less than 100 words…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      What’s in a name after all? Thank you for reading 🙂

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